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Posted: 10 years ago
#21
hey gargy😊
so sorry couldn't comment on your previous updates! And kya baat hai yaar! updates are getting longer! Achha kiya! Descriptive bhi hai! I am very excited to see Raj's entry... ekdum karan johar films type entry honi chaiye!😃 Imagining all the original cadets together but all more matured and smart now! The update size and the frequency you have going on right now is good. But I won't be complaining if the size gets more bigger and bigger 😉. You know Raj's Point of view would really make things intersting. Please consider it?😊 Oh and one more thing! no need to rush with the story line, thoda easy lena. Its nice when things are not rushed, otherwise it becomes too fast and confusing. Not that you are rushing.😊 but just a friendly advice, something to keep in mind😊.
Baki all is great! and I am enjoying reading your story.
Do update soon!
Cheers👍🏼
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Posted: 10 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: passiflora4eva

hey gargy😊

so sorry couldn't comment on your previous updates! And kya baat hai yaar! updates are getting longer! Achha kiya! Descriptive bhi hai! I am very excited to see Raj's entry... ekdum karan johar films type entry honi chaiye!😃Imagining all the original cadets together but all more matured and smart now! The update size and the frequency you have going on right now is good. But I won't be complaining if the size gets more bigger and bigger😉. You know Raj's Point of view would really make things intersting. Please consider it?😊Oh and one more thing! no need to rush with the story line, thoda easy lena. Its nice when things are not rushed, otherwise it becomes too fast and confusing. Not that you are rushing.😊but just a friendly advice, something to keep in mind😊.
Baki all is great! and I am enjoying reading your story.
Do update soon!
Cheers👍🏼


very suggestive post.thnkq for guiding me the xact way of a viewr.i wl keep that in mind..
lov,gargy
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Posted: 10 years ago
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part 7:
same day 7am Nilu's house,

a big manson,fully decorated with flower and lights and all.so many people so many noises.one young handsome opend the door of a room to go inside.a prety lady s still sleeping with a sweet smile on her face which indicates she is having some good dreams of prince...
the boy looked at her so clam and innocent face for a little while and said to himself "Sis,will miss you...be blessed always..though i know chief will always take care of you but some how if he doesnt MUJHSE BURA KOI NEHI HOOGA"n he became soo emotional but then with the fraction of a sec the innosent look of his face became mischivious and bang..he pull off the blanket of her and started pulling her leg.all of a sudden the atmosphere of the room began violent.the clam girl now started screming"bro...wht r u doing.aur to bus aaj hi ki din h mere bed pe aise soye rahne ko.aj to disturb mat karo."but who care..he then started disturbing her all the way possible.from throwing pillows to pulling her hair to all kind of saitani."nilu,yea bhi to soch aj ke baad koi aise disturb bhi to nhi karega.hum sab lok kabse uthke sab taiyari kar rhe h aur maharani abhi tak swapno ke duniya me.sis uth ja nhi to tu apne swapno ki rajkumar ko swapno me hi dkhte rah jayegi aur dulha ghora leke wapas bhi chala jayega.mom niche bula rhi h.sab log aa rhe hai.bahut si rasam bhi suri honi h..uth ja abhi"
"bro aur thora sa sone doo na.."
"as u wish..mujhe bahut kaam h.dad bula rhe h.jaldi niche aa jana."
and UD was about to leave and then came back and said"by the way sis,all the best for ur future life.wil miss u"
hearing this nilu got up from bed and said"will miss you too bhai.aur main dur kahan ja rhi hu.15min ki to baat h.main to har roz aa jaungi yahan aaplogoko paresaan karne.itni jaldi mujhse chutkara nhi milne wali:-)"
meanwhile mrs. sahani also came as they were taking soo much time to come downstairs.hearing their convrsation she also get emmotional.she went near her bed and huged her tightly"will miss u betaa"
"mommm.bhai mom ko samjhao na."
ud said"HA abhi aap sab nicha chaliye.iisse hume itni jaldi azadi nhi milne wali.isi liye isne aalekh ko choose kiya taki yahan rah sake aur hume har waqt paresan kar sake"showing a fake attitude he saw the ladiez and all of them bust into laugh.
they came downstairz where all the reletivez were present.Mr. sahani was busy with some last mins preparations.when he saw nilu he came to her and put his hand on nilus head to bless her.he also get emmotional.but not melodramatic.then they all get busy with their work.
after meeting with some relatives they started the HALDI rasam..(as i m a bengali so i dont know much of hindusthani marriage rasams.so i wl make them as i know.plz consider.)..all the ladies present there put some haldi on Nilu one by one and bleesing her for her married life.


Here at Alekh's house:
all the friends were chating and memorizing their past golden days suddenly puja made a comment which turned the happy atmosphere in a pre thunder strom silence...breaking the silence the strome came when alekh made a comment " hero k bina film kaun dekhega?"...
Edited by gargy4u - 9 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#24
part 8:
same day 7am Nilu's house,

a big manson,fully decorated with flower and lights and all.so many people so many noises.one young handsome opend the door of a room to go inside.a prety lady s still sleeping with a sweet smile on her face which indicates she is having some good dreams of prince...
the boy looked at her so clam and innocent face for a little while and said to himself "Sis,will miss you...be blessed always..though i know chief will always take care of you but some how if he doesnt MUJHSE BURA KOI NEHI HOOGA"n he became soo emotional but then with the fraction of a sec the innosent look of his face became mischivious and bang..he pull off the blanket of her and started pulling her leg.all of a sudden the atmosphere of the room began violent.the clam girl now started screming"bro...wht r u doing.aur to bus aaj hi ki din h mere bed pe aise soye rahne ko.aj to disturb mat karo."but who care..he then started disturbing her all the way possible.from throwing pillows to pulling her hair to all kind of saitani."nilu,yea bhi to soch aj ke baad koi aise disturb bhi to nhi karega.hum sab lok kabse uthke sab taiyari kar rhe h aur maharani abhi tak swapno ke duniya me.sis uth ja nhi to tu apne swapno ki rajkumar ko swapno me hi dkhte rah jayegi aur dulha ghora leke wapas bhi chala jayega.mom niche bula rhi h.sab log aa rhe hai.bahut si rasam bhi suri honi h..uth ja abhi"
"bro aur thora sa sone doo na.."
"as u wish..mujhe bahut kaam h.dad bula rhe h.jaldi niche aa jana."
and UD was about to leave and then came back and said"by the way sis,all the best for ur future life.wil miss u"
hearing this nilu got up from bed and said"will miss you too bhai.aur main dur kahan ja rhi hu.15min ki to baat h.main to har roz aa jaungi yahan aaplogoko paresaan karne.itni jaldi mujhse chutkara nhi milne wali:-)"
meanwhile mrs. sahani also came as they were taking soo much time to come downstairs.hearing their convrsation she also get emmotional.she went near her bed and huged her tightly"will miss u betaa"
"mommm.bhai mom ko samjhao na."
ud said"HA abhi aap sab nicha chaliye.iisse hume itni jaldi azadi nhi milne wali.isi liye isne aalekh ko choose kiya taki yahan rah sake aur hume har waqt paresan kar sake"showing a fake attitude he saw the ladiez and all of them bust into laugh.
they came downstairz where all the reletivez were present.Mr. sahani was busy with some last mins preparations.when he saw nilu he came to her and put his hand on nilus head to bless her.he also get emmotional.but not melodramatic.then they all get busy with their work.
after meeting with some relatives they started the HALDI rasam..(as i m a bengali so i dont know much of hindusthani marriage rasams.so i wl make them as i know.plz consider.)..all the ladies present there put some haldi on Nilu one by one and bleesing her for her married life.


Here at Alekh's house:
all the friends were chating and memorizing their past golden days suddenly puja made a comment which turned the happy atmosphere in a pre thunder strom silence...breaking the silence the strome came when alekh made a comment " hero k bina film kaun dekhega?"...


thats all for nw.
lov gargy..
Edited by gargy4u - 9 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#25
guyz plz commnt if u like the story or any suggetions.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: gargy4u

guyz plz commnt if u like the story or any suggetions.




there is no need for any suggestion
tum bohat acha lekh rhi ho
just keep it up
i m loving ur ff


love naina
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Posted: 10 years ago
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nice part


par aj ke pure din me ek he part
koi nhi next time ek do or update kar dena
neelu yudi ki nok jhok was nice
shadi ke time sabhi ladki ke ghr wale emotional ho jate h
par yr sach kahu toh mjhe neelu me nhi naina me interst h i mean raj naina me kab aa raha h mera raj naina se milne
plz jaldi se hero ki entry karao



love naina
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Posted: 10 years ago
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part 9:

all were so shocked and surprized to hear what alekh said..and all could only stare at alekh for his clarification..
alekh: are apun kyaa bol raha h ki aj apun ki shadi h aur aj apun ich hero hoga naaa.chalo chalo bahut kaam baki h AND HE LEAVE THE GROUP PRETENDING TO BE BUSY.
it took a few mints for the group to digest what he said and to come bak to normal well quite normal coversation.
but naina.she senced something fishy.as she knows alekh quite well.he is not a person of faul talks.is it that Raj is still...nooo.how can that be possible.then he would surely contact with her in the past years and would never let her live the life she was leaving..no..its not that she dont want him to be alive.infact that would be the only reason to want to live again.but is it possible..ohhh god..y r u again making me hopeful when i hav finally admitted the hard truth..maybe alekh has gone mad for the xcitement of his marriage.
naina was lost in her thoughts when someone tap her solder.
"kya soch rhe h Naina"
coming back to the reality she found Abhi was looking at her perplex face"ummm..nhi to.kuch nhi...excuse me sir"and she left the room leaving Abhi there.
if she would turn back she could hav see a smile on Abhi's lips who was saying in his mind"'aap kitna bhi chupa lo Raj ko leke apki concern sabko dikhai deti h..sachme kuch kuch chize hume bhagwan pe phir se bharosa dela deti h ki woo kahin to hai.kahin se hum sab pe apna maharbani barsa rahe h.nhi to yea miracle hi to h..."saying this he also left for the dayz work.
after completing the arrengments all joined in the dining area for lunch..
all were having chit chats while naina was still lost in her thoughts.instade of eating she was playing with the food.alekh was one side of her and huda on the other.alekh noticed her absent minded but didnt say anything.but
huda : oye panjaban itna maat kha.dkh meri foolan figr maintanance ke liye kuch bhi nhi kha rhi.kuch to sikh.
puja: huda tu to us mucchar ki tarha maat bol.(she still hates major.nair)
all of them started laughing except naina. she was calculating something but wasnt able to get the answer.
"naina itna maat soch.kha le.nehi to sham ko masti kaise karega HERO k sath."
naina was still confused 'is he talking about himself or...'and give alekh a strange look.
alekh get the meaning and looked at his plate pretending to be busy with food.
after the lunch complete pooja announced that she hav to go to the parlour and insisted Naina to come with her.naina first tried to protest but when all started preserizing she had to go there reluctantly.

at about 5pm.poja waz ready to blow the boyz head.she was wearing a deep green zardousi sharee with matching jewelry and a hair bun.she was looking so preety and charming..then it comes the turn of our heroine..naina..WOW was the only word huda(who came there to pick the ladies up from the parlour to home) could mannage to say when he saw Naina.she was looking stunning in the red sharee which alekh baught for him.with the magic strick of makeup all her eye bags were gone.and the simple yet gorgious earring neckles and bangles were complimenting her divine look..from the kajal to the bindi to the lip stick everyting were just perfect.and her loose hair or we can say KHULE HUYI JULFE was complimenting her look even better.only one thing was missing there.her ANKHO TAK PAHUNCHTI SMILE..though she was looking ammizingly stunning but she was not happy from inside..in her mind still she was lost to match some calculation bus was failing to do so..
during the time of coming back to home Huda cant keep his eyes away from Naina and the whole way he was complimenting her to make her happy or to see her smile.but all in vain.
when they step down from the car the ready Barati were mesmarised by these two ladies beauty.Ali was unable to close his mouth after seeing poja in that avater..and alekh fixed his gaze at Naina and said in his mind"bus ek smile,jo kuchi palon me tere pass hoga.."
and they started the barat toward the big event..which will change the life of few persons forever...

that alll,
lov gargy,
do comment
Edited by gargy4u - 9 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#29

Originally posted by: meenuraj97

nice part


par aj ke pure din me ek he part
koi nhi next time ek do or update kar dena
neelu yudi ki nok jhok was nice
shadi ke time sabhi ladki ke ghr wale emotional ho jate h
par yr sach kahu toh mjhe neelu me nhi naina me interst h i mean raj naina me kab aa raha h mera raj naina se milne
plz jaldi se hero ki entry karao



love naina


are bhai aa rha na humara hero...nxt updt me he will be here with usss..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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nice update

alekh ki barat nikal rahi h
puja n naina dono both r looking beautiful
puja ko dekhne wala ali h
plz mere naina ko dekhne wala uska hero jaldi le kar aao




love naina
thanks for pm
plz update next part soon

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