You talk about emotions, then you talk about love, then you talk about relationship dynamics and then you talk about this story.
This story is the perfect blend of emotions, love, relationships etc and all portrayed in the utmost real way as possible. No vamps, no unnecessary loud characters, no over the Top drama, no fairytale -sweeps-you-off-the-floor-but-highly-unbelievable-sort-of-romance. It is just the right balance.
I've often enjoyed reading fictions, note romantic fictions, that are more close to reality. Because that is the only time, it feels right. feels possible. and, makes worth imagining. And, all the worth believing that it's true. :)
Your characters are flawed yet that's what makes them so beautiful in my eyes. Because, i too believe in the world being gray - not black or white. But, that doesn't mean they are wrong, negative people. It just means that the characters are human in the end!
I love how this story was different. How this was not about two people from opposite sides coming together, but about what happens after a happily ever after. what happens when you are in a relationship. What relationship dynamics one goes through. Because, that is how you have to live with it when the initial goody goody part of the relations ends and you are left with reality.
I've realised I've always loved Payal's character. It was refreshing to see a character like her. I too love Christian Yang's character in GA. But, I hated the way Payal was portrayed on-screen. A character like Payal and Akash had a lot of potential and depth but on-screen their characters which started with such promise weren't given their dues in the end. I know, being one of them myself, enjoyed Arshi/Sarun chemistry very much that fans demanded 24/7 screen time, but, I just wished these side characters were well explored too. Which would have made the story in the future tracks more interesting. But, these characters get their dues in these kind of stories. I must say, I've never enjoyed Payal more than ever before this story. I love the whole-i-am-bitch-but-I'm-actually-a-beautiful-soul character she is. I always wanted more of arnav-payal(i got so much here, also, I loved their whole relationship, beyond khushi yet coz of khush) and akash-khushi too. But, the latter I've read in so many FFs. Payal in your story plays from time to time the inner voice you hear in your head but afraid to listen. Always showing the mirror. Her charm lies in her bluntness but it can prove to be fatal form time to time as well. She can be mature yet be childish at times as well. I love everything about her. :) Yes, she has flaws but hey, who doesn't? But, I loved how in the end you didn't bring them together. Or maybe they do get together in an alternative universe. It totally depends on whoever thinks of what. But, I loved how separation was a part you covered which happened. Because not all relations are meant to be. I loved the whole maturity in the way you handled the pair and kept it so real. They were not perfect in the end. Their relation taught me a valuable lesson. Like Payal I too felt that love was enough. But, when Aakash said it's not enough. I finally understood it is not. Specially seeing Shyam and Anjali's relationship.
But what she did with Arnav, the conversation about facing your fears..It could have been done in a better way. She is a strong character but her flaws were beautifully pointed out by akash who in his own ways is her perfect balance. She was shown the mirror by Akash and I guess, it was needed to bring the girl to start addressing others feeling as well. Though him looking out for his brother was doubtful at that time since he was so as shown from his previous behaviour as self-observed. That is another amazing thing i noticed in your story. Your ability to provide so many lines to a relationship. Like so many depth and portray it. Like how two people who live together can actually be far from each other, mentally. Like arnav and akash. They are there for each other but in some ways still not. That is one dynamics of a relationship I think we all understand. Kudos to you for portraying it as well. Though I loved how Khushi said that she understood more Payal-Arnav than the sibling duo.
while I used to read your story, I used to go through some of the comments that would come with the update. Must say all of them added so much to the story. I used to sometimes take the other people's comment for further introspection into the story. Like Aquasandhya quoted Arshi in the best way possible - 'Your Arnav and Khushi are connected across so many levels. They are friends, they are lovers, they are confidants who counsel each other and they are a couple who enjoy the relationship of that of an mature married couple who understand each other's tastes, tone of voice and moods. That's a dream couple'. I couldn't agree more with her. In the end, there is a reason they are our favourite couple ;)
Anjali. She is head-strong. But, you have made us understand where she comes from as well. we have always seen people like Shyam around in our lives. I guess, in the end he did realised his mistakes. I hope he becomes a man worthy enough for Anjali.
I love the whole Shashi-Garima pair. They are such wonderful parents. Yes, what he did with Khushi would be wrong but I guess it comes from a parent who is just looking out for their kid and also, time and again you have told us why he did what he did. Emphasised the need to make such a harsh decision. I'm not supporting him but I just agree to some extent regarding the same. The amount of freedom and independence and trust they have in their kids speak of the kind of modern yet well-balanced parents they are. And, the upbringing, the values in their kids show just that. :)
The end in which Khushi chooses the best of both worlds. I just loved that part. It felt so great to read about her choices and the way Arnav is always there to support her.
I don't know why you felt Arnav was not the ASR. But in almost all of those updates I felt so. In his vibe. Yes, he is different but it didn't lessen his chances of making us fall in love with him :D He is perfect!! I want one too for myself :P
I loved the end, it was a coming of age story. Hey, I guess I did wrote so many words, but I still feel that I could have written more. Express more because your story just deserves that. I loved how real the story was and a commendable job at your writing you did. The author in you has an uncanny ability to write and explore different facets of human emotions. I wish to read more from your end.
GREAT PIECE OF FICTION👏👏
p.s. I don't want you to change this fiction's name. It adds to the whole charm and intrigue of the story.
p.p.s I wonder how you have such a crazy vocabulary. I envy you for that. Please do share how? Crazy play of words you do :)
p.p.p.s. Do consider publishing this FF. ^__^
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