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AquaSandhya

@AquaSandhya

Sparkler

+ 8

Posted: 10 years ago

#411

I am just trying to feel the satisfaction you must have felt as you typed, The End. Incredible isn't it. To finish what you began but more importantly to have written something unique ...something only you could have written and most significantly something that explored varied relationships. It was truly a different experience for me, reading PJ.

Soulmates, live-in couples in 80's or was it late late 70's, difficult relationships that aren't meant to be, career women, housewives striving to make a mark in the world and the best grandmother. Oh, yes, PJ was different.

Congratulations Twigstar!!!

It was the perfect ending and both families have found a semblance of peace. I'm happy for them. Especially Anjali. Loved the way you closed it with her and Shyam's apology that was subtle yet heartfelt.

Your Arnav may have been an anti-thesis of ASR but boy I loved him. And I loved him the way he was right from the beginning. We all face confidence issues at some point in life but he came out a winner. And the way he stands by Khushi is awesome 😃

Khushi - I see Twiggy. And you know why I adore her 😃. I do :) Sweet, considerate, talented and intelligent. You go girl :)

Payal - Hah! Christina Yang!!! No wonder. I liked Shonda Rhimes ability to conceive a Yang but I am more a Meredith (in the earlier episodes. Started hating the show beyond the first seasons). I want success but don't believe in trampling. So, now you can understand my fight with Payal. I always said Payal will be a brilliant career woman. And who says marriage is a must on the cards. To hell with it. Let her be happy doing what she loves.

Akash - He was different from the show and may I say, he is one of those I dread in real life because they want their women a particular way and if it doesn't happen they sulk making family life miserable. When the story began he was one of my favourites in your story and then he wasn't. But he was real,.Very real.

Devyani - love. love. love. I wish you had a dog too 😆

Garima and Shashi - Cool people but typical parents. Parents worry for their kids and thats what they did. They truly were a one of a kind couple. Hats off to you for creating them.

Twiggy - I am not sure how you came up with the concept but it was something unlike another. So many snippets of life and invaluable ones at that. Take a bow darling 👏. Am glad your friends pushed you to write. And continue...keep at it.

Now, you go celebrate for completing your first fictional work. Ciao.

P.S - Since you asked, here's my title suggestion (in retrospect) - The Crossroads

P.P.S - I think I've written my longest comments on PJ without doubt. IT goes to show something doesn't it. Your writing did that...brought out the argumentative me...like Payal. Ironic much right!

Edited by AquaSandhya - 10 years ago

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HIPKKND

@HIPKKND

Explorer

Posted: 10 years ago

#412

Kudos on such a wonderful story!...I came to know about this from Meera's FF. I had kept it on hold wanting you to complete..then I read it in one straight shot!..what a lovely tale to read..you should continue writing, you really do it so well...I loved all the characters you have created, each one so nicely done..hope you will write another one very soon!

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Archana M H

@archana.mh17

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 10 years ago

#413

Ok, I have been meaning to put up a comment ever since you posted the final chapter of this story, & then, I thought I'll do it once you put up the epilogue! And, although I reserved this spot right on the day you updated the epilogue, I've been hesitating ever since to actually write a comment! I will tell you why! There are some stories that you read, & forget! Then, there are some that absolutely compel you to comment on their brilliance! And, then, there's a third category of stories-they're so wonderful that not all of the words in your vocabulary will not do justice & PJ has been one such story for me! I have been lost for words that would sufficiently describe to you what it meant to read this story! I am afraid, we'll have to make do with whatever the words can tell, but I assure you, that this story will be all that & more!

Story-You know, it was interesting to see how you conceptualized this! And, I can tell you with certainty that this is one of the few stories that have truly been slice-of-life, sticking to what's real, what one deals with on a daily basis, the actual catch 22 situations in life! And, your narration did something wonderful to this story!

Characters:

Arnav-Yes, I loved the show's Arnav Singh Raizada & that is also perhaps as good as any Indian TV show is ever going to get in terms of detailing of a character, but your Arnav was a breath of fresh air! And, yes, I must add, the good guys finish last, doesn't get the girl, blah-di-dah is a truck of bull**** &, they are the likeable ones! Your Arnav was an endearing nice guy with his own vulnerablilities & it just made him so very human! This is one of the best anti-ASR versions of Arnav that I have ever come across on this forum! His journey of self-discovery was beautifully written!

Khushi-This girl is dealing with issues, I am sure a lot of youngsters face, i.e., making a choice between what her parents think is a safe, sensible option/backup or following her heart & doing what she believes she loves! Her story arc was an interesting one! And, she found a middle ground , & a new clarity in the way she perceived things in life! An engaging story! And, her relationship with Arnav, the rock-solid, unshakeable bond they shared was so completely wonderful!

Anjali-Now, she was dealing with an issue that quite a lot of women deal with! And, when she, finally chose to be happy, break out of those chains that were holding her back, pulling her down, I cheered for her! Life is, after all a pursuit of happiness & to compromise on that will only leave people with regrets & resentments!

Akash-Now, this man, I do not understand! I agree Payal should've probably told him about her applying for a fellowship, but his entire reaction to the issue seemed off! But, I guess, some people just need the reassurance that they get from a partner that's around, physically close by! And, sometimes, some love stories are just not meant to be! Can they rekindle their relationship once Payal returns-my opinion, I don't think so! Their issue wasn't her going away, but the clash between their priorities, & that won't change once she returns!

Guptas-I liked them! They were parents trying very hard to be supportive if their children's dreams while trying to ensure that they have a good life! And, sometimes, you feel that a tough decision is the need of the hour! Was Shashi's decision wrong? I guess, there'll be two sides to that argument, but his reasons were practical & I cannot help but agree with him, for the most part!

Payal-Now, the reason I kept my opinion regarding her character for the last was because I needed to get the other characters out of the way, for this one! She is my favourite character in this story! And, I might be partial because of that! And, by the way, I thought there was something familiar about her & when you said she was inspired from Dr. Cristina Yang's character, that fell into place! Do I love, Yang, the only woman character from all the TV shows that I have watched that truly is unapologetically original & so well-written that she's practically a gift to the audience! I have no idea how they'll run Grey's Anatomy without her from Season 11! And, yes, she loved, she cared, she made relationships, but truly, her work was what made her, & she didn't, actually need anybody else to complete her, just like you pointed out! So, it isn't very surprising that I loved your Payal so much! She was flawed, but she was strong, sorted, determined, & she was also a loving daughter & sister! And, her love for what she does, that singular focus on it with which she functions is fascinating, & whatever she does, she does with her complete conviction! She was at fault when she jumped to conclusions & said certain harsh things to Arnav, but she isn't a bad person! She is a great person with her own set of flaws, just like anybody else!

There, I have basically, just put everything I thought about this story & its major characters, here! I know, it is a little like word vomit, because this story is so wonderful, that I am still trying to find the words that would do justice to it!

@Vgedin-GREAT story! I loved reading each part, each relationship & each character's journey! Keep writing because you are so good at it! I hope more people get to read your work!

Edited by archana.mh17 - 10 years ago

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IronButterfly

@IronButterfly

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#414

What a lovely ending.

So happy for Anjali and Payal.

Here's to a happy life for Arnav and Khushi.

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Maria

@JRia

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#415

loved the ending... though sad for Akash - Payal

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crazy-ash

@crazy-ash

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#416

wow..the journey.has ended... already?

nothing just seems enough as i want it go on and on and on...but the way u ended it is awesome!

like seriously... here, everybody had its flaws and then they slowly learned either how to live with it or overcome their insecurities for better...

thanku so much for giving me this wonderful read!

good job'

i hope to see u soon!

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Chaitalee Ghosalkar

@Eccentrica

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 10 years ago

#417

Epilogue for me was loved primarily because it had Anjali in it, and in a healthy dose. It wasn't just her current and future path that was delved, but also Shyam's stance; something that was obscure till now.

Shashi beat Garima in fireworks😲

Oho... engagement on the cards! Me is happy!

I know the epilogue was set at a juncture not too much into the future, but I expected something on Khushi's books; more than Karthik's two words😉

About the characters:

Payal was inspired from Yang! No wonder I championed for her😃. I'm all for Yang, although there have been times when I've not really understood her, an example being her decision to not have kids of her own when she has been shown gelling up with Zola perfectly well. But then that's Christina Yang for you.

Akash...sure he did have much gumption than the one in the show, but for me it was more of a case of, you can either side with Payal or with Akash. And I chose the earlier.

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shr1234

@shr1234

Navigator

Posted: 10 years ago

#418

It's lovely Twiggy! Shashi is so sweet, I can relate to his touching bond with his girls. With this epilogue, we know all of them are in a better place, even Anjali and Shyam too. Bold characterisation was the strength of PJ. Your Arnav wasn't the typical ASR we see but all of these people were so real. Like Anjali torn between home front and her aspirations, loving parents, a mature Khushi :) I won't deny sometimes I disliked a cutting Payal but then we do have in our circles people like her, good at heart and honest, never sugar coating their feelings.