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Okay I read the thing
It was good, I did like the entire thing alot, the way you potray characters
Mr Loverboy and the simple girl I like it. like, really like it.
The chapters are well written and the characters as well as the storyline is convincing. I really liked the way you portray the emotions and actions through words.
I've always liked that.
You're really good at it you know, you're really good at writing. And I won't kill you for the last fourth chapter, i think that was necessary, the slap. to dignify the girl. or less the story would have lacked realism.
And it might have seem unrealistic.
But the I loved the effects you add through simple plain words, I love that.
The thing is, I don't get Kriya's emotions well, I mean, is she just playing along or does she really feel something? You should totally write a chapter from Kriya's point of view.
I love it altogether. And seriously, you write so well.
believe me, it's amazing what you can do in such simple meaningful words.
I love it and you as well,
-Your Bookworm :)
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