Arshi Story : Once Upon A Time..... chapter 3 up, PG 19, 16th June

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KBS

@oKBSo

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#81

Arnav is different here, and I am too happy by this Arnav, who respects Khushi

And OMG I am too waiting for the dawn

what she would give him

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Sharmila

@ongongong

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#82

Hi Pooja! 😊 I hope I can call you that.

Firstly, thanks for the PM 😃 otherwise I would have missed such a beautiful story

And coming to the story, I LOVED it. Seriously! A very different yet amazing concept. So they were married off when they were young. Okay, honestly I was confused by Khushi's behavior at first I mean why was she acting so childish 😕 and I laughed with arnav while reading the 'running' part. She was so scared of him which is quite normal, I suppose as she's young. And when Khushi said she's 14 I was like What??? 😲 Did they marry 14 year old Khushi to 28 year old arnav?? And I am sorry for that 😳 So Arnav's just 18 too. Only 4 years gap, no big deal! Looking forward to see how their relationship is gonna progress. Their conversation was cute,thanks :)

P.S. I cannot promise you to be an active reader caz' my college started and I will going to hostel in a month or two but still I will try my best. 🤗 Take care.

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Param

@pup03

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#83

beautiful start of a great story.. will be looking forward to read what did khushi give to arnav before he left??? loved the start.. 😃

thanks for pm 😊

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Archna

@archnahardik123

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#84

Read first chapter and I found it interesting.

This is second story I am reading of child marriage and I am looking forward to read more.

Start is great. Both of them know that they got married already. Let's see how they think about this.

I loved this.

Thanks for sending me pm.

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Archna

@archnahardik123

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#85

Second chapter.

Their first meeting is so sweet. And yes these kind if marriages was common in India.

Loved that arnav don't want to be like other who treat their wife badly. He want different kind of relation with his wife.

It will be interesting to see how their relation develop with time.

Waiting for next chapter.

Hi I am sending buddy request please accept it.

Edited by archnahardik123 - 11 years ago

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Aruni.

@Aruni.

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#86

Whoa i love this! I am not really a fan of child marriages and all that, but the prospect of a good love story and of course Arnav-Khushi in it is going to make a hit i think 👍🏼

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Arshix144

@Arshix144

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Posted: 11 years ago

#87

Hi Pooja, congratulations on your first writing venture!

I am so glad you decided to write because from what I have read here, you write quite well.

And what a refreshing concept too. Khushi is only 14 a mere child and Arnav is just 18, yet they are already married. This fact baffled me a little then when you mentioned the time and day, it all made sense because in some villages people are still marrying their kids off in the same manner. Not to forget that back then people were much more mature at the age 14 and 18, they were already familiar with the harsh realities of life thanks to the way they were brought up. This was brought to light in chapter two when Khushi informed Arnav how her mom taught to her to act in a certain manner, loved the way Arnav told her that she didn't need to be a certain way infront of him. That she didn't need to be afraid of him. I am already liking this Arnav Pooja so thank you for a great portrayal of his character, at 18 he is surely well informed.

Cannot wait to see what transpires next!

Ps. Thank you for sharing your work with me and all the best, I am sure you will do remarkably well with this story.

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riafna

@riafna

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#88

Beautifully written.

How innocence and cute khushi was... no one ... I will tell mom...

Arnav made her understood in his own style. ..so sweet.

Gift? Those times may be mafler jacket or fower?

What was Khushi searching for? ..

Like it very much

Thanks for pm

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FeistyDewdrop

@FeistyDewdrop

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#89

hi P!

thanq for the p.m.. :) the storyline is sweet and interesting... I love the Arnav here n his non domineering attitude :D

the description of the day at his in laws place was enjoyable:)

looking forward for Khushi n his journey of life :)

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@.LadyHitler.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#90

Someone suggested me this FF and i am glad i read this..

Firstly i loved this concept.. Arnav is 18 and khushi is 14 and they are already married.. This is a unique concept..

Loved arnav when he told her she can behave the way she is..

Looking forward to read more.. Continue soon..