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Ananya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#391

Omg you updated!!! Damn! *trying not to glance at the update right now*

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Disha, you were amazing!!! and I cannot tell you how much I enjoyed that kaaali-bheegi-raat-mai jungle wala scene. Absolutely brilliantly written...especially their heated exchange of dialogues.

Oh and I loved that touch-me-not flower reference.

🤗 You were exceptionally good for a debut writer, Disha. I hope all these encouraging words from the comments makes you want to write more 😊

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AquaSandhya

@AquaSandhya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#392

You did it. You finally did it. Come here you... for a nice tight welcome-to-this-side-of-IF hug 🤗

Fantastic debut 😃

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rk2127

@rk2127

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Posted: 11 years ago

#393

Res

Edited.

That was super Che... I mean can't believe you wrote for the first time Disha. That was written to the perfection.

Everything...whether it's Arnav thoughts on finding Khushi her in his forest or his past with her, there short rendezvous relation or his shortcoming to not man up enough in realizing and managing his priorities, or his acceptance to the feeling he still have for Khushi and may continue till eternity.

The suspense created with intruders in forest or the scary and doubting Khushi following Arnav or there moment of pasts or present building passion ad desire for each other.

Everything for me was to the T perfect. Everything was described perfectly there emotions, there feelings, there fights or there silence and yeah the song selection.

They got to clear out a lotto move own with future. Arnav got to accept his cowardice and clear his image and Khushi got to know the real reason to understand that she was not intentionally insulted by Arnav but kept at a distance from his problem.

Looking forward to the next part.

P.S. Disha I hope you didn't mean that this is the last time you are writing. You know you are good and I'm not the only one saying. You being a part of this collab says a lot.

👍🏼

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ssyahoo

@ssyahoo

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Posted: 11 years ago

#394

Yay Disha

It was fabulous chapter! I was hooked right from your title and loved how you incorporated so many emotions in your update. The attraction between them was simmering indeed 👏

You should surely write more often!

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Fried Rice Ji ðŸš

@Friedriceji

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Posted: 11 years ago

#395

Ris

Ris

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Ohmigid D. What was that girlie? You know you nailed it. And I am already thinking about reading some fresh stories from your pen. Very sooner.

Here I was thinking about reading some romance in the jungle and you gave me a fight. Okay.. I forgive you because its your debut and you have done a great job. Chal maaf kar diya teko.

Aaahh the rain and the attraction. Seems like some hardcore romance is up our grill. Cant wait.

This smuggling and stuffs are giving a fresh pace to this story. I am not sure if I have ever come across such subject in the FF forum. Thanks for bringing out this subject.

Like I had mentioned before...I am totally in love with this concept. And one of my lover is a part of this story. *giggles*

Sam, I miss you yaara.

And D... Pliss keep writing will you?

And Jen, when is your turn?

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J P

@TwilightStar_JP

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Posted: 11 years ago

#396

Girl you should definitely consider writing more often!! You have given away without giving into more details!!! I mean just what's required is shown and the rest is convered like a skirt!!

So the attraction still exists! Thought it was situation that made them reconsider their feelings or precisely him!! You can't blame him!! And now she has all the rights to stay away once bitten you see!! He should suffer and to win her back woo her again!

Desire in the land of ArShi they always bring them closer first and then they spring apart!!

About the poachers why isn't Khushi telling him what she over heard??

Cheers

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Arjuhisis

@Arjuhisis

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Posted: 11 years ago

#397

disha, congratulations on your debut

I cant believe this is ur debut work - u seriously wasted your talent all these while disha - please consider writing more and more - for a first time writer, this was super duper awesome

lot of revelations, I must say - reading between the lines, I could gather a lot of information which my mind was craving for - so it was arnav who turned away from what was grooming between them

fantastic inaugural chapter - keep going girl

so its NIDS next, is it?

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luvbug

@luvbug

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Posted: 11 years ago

#398

Oh wow tht was an amazing update disha... The tension btw arshi was portrayed wonderfully ... Seems hard to believe tht this is u first time :)

I think u should officially start writing :) hope to read more from u

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Dr. Anupama Ramakrishna

@anukat

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Posted: 11 years ago

#399

Hey Dishu

I apologise for just reading this chapter! ...will make up for all the others soon!

Well! Well! Well! What have we here a very very promising writer! OMG!!!!

I enjoyed two things in your writing! The language and the crispness!

The flow was just right with just the right amount of accent on the necessary details while you explain the context and the settings splendidly!

The contextual usage of the songs is what I loved really( you know I love it myself!)

You must consider writing more often and what can I say ... I could go through a rainbow of feelings from a sense of expectation to excitement then fear and then relief, and a little bit of curiosity not to mention Arshi romance!

...The woods are dark and deep...

But I am sure my friiend you don't need to go a long way now for you are there...

coz you wrote splendidly...the very first time...

Congratulations and best wishes!

Warm hugs

As I always say...

Enjoy and Express!

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1chilly

@1chilly

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Posted: 11 years ago

#400

Et tu Brutus!

Everybody seems to forget I live in a different time zone from the US and India. Dish, you too updated when I was sleeping.

Excellent debut! But then that was expected from you. Hamein bharosa tha, hai aur rahega.

You continued with song and it created a lovely ambiance in the middle of the forest. But then came the unexpected tyrn with the smugglers at work. It was a bit scary with me hoping nothing happens to Khushi. I was scared she'll get caught.

We got a small glimpse of their earlier relationship. Arnav was certainly not a cad but just a young guy who wanted to make something of himself without anybody boggling him down. He didn't want a serious relationship at that point of time. Well, now is the right time to make it up to Khushi.

I get the feeling Shyam as the villian will be something too obvious. You guys are devious enough to spring a surpruse on us later. I feel maybe Aman and even Joy could be involced in the smuggling racket. Waiting for the bext update already.

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