Love can be hard sometimes--A Swaron story(updated on page 12)

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akanksha

@sharif_lafungi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#81

bhai meri taraf se bi wish krna plz...
reyam convo is super fun always..swayam is so cute while getting ready to meet her...
pyar ki pehli seedhi dosti...
sharon sleeping on his shoulder was adorable ..
update soon

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Sowmya

@Joshua_TANHA

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Posted: 11 years ago

#82

And Happy Birthday to "Someone Special " 🥳

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austen_TanHa

@austen_TanHa

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Posted: 11 years ago

#83

belated happy birthday to the special someone🥳(though it ain't belated according to my time😎)

res chhe mharo

unresd

chapter 1-

great start. in a single chapter you've laid their characters down beautifully. even if they hadn't been so similar to the characters on the show, i would have known their personalities easily from this. poor swayam is lost in those mesmerising eyes shuruat se hi😆..i like the pace of your story. since i dont have to wait to read the next part, i can even appreciate the cliffhanger in the end😛

chapter 2-

🤣..Rey badi kaam ki cheez nikla👍🏼..swayam falls hopelessly in love in 7th std, he smokes and sings...yeh mujhe uski kam and teri story zyada lag rahi hai😛..you've managed to hit all the bull's eyes in this update. 1st the city-delhi, love stories are meant to bloom in this city. 2nd- train journey, always brings forth visions of chup chup ke pyaar. there is something incurably romantic about travelling in a train. 3rd- the portly principal- always a good troll.

i thought Rey was the star of this update and like the 1st update you've beautifully woven his character introduction into the story with no awkward bumps. the last part reminded me of the paplu swayam esp the pre-RDX party scene where he struts around in a suit coz his mom says he looks handsome in one and tells his friends "sharon se shadi ki long term planning toh hai"..aah good times!

chapter 3-

boy are you a romantic or what!! kriya bhi super smart hai, in one stroke dono couples ki setting kara di😆. i have only one problem with this update- why did SwaRon not converse after swayam introduced himself? wouldn't the normal thing when two people meet for the 1st time be to talk and find out as much about each other as possible?

i'm happy that Sharon already trusts Swayam so much but it does seem to be at odds with the prickly, wary-of-the-world sharon you laid out in the 1st chapter. I'm sorry about this but I'm too much of a Sharon junkie to not say this😳.

that apart, the rest of the update was wonderful. love how you've kept a light vein running through the story so far. swayam irons the T-shirt he wants to wear🤣..sach sach bata did you do this too😉..

so far so good, chal ab jaldi update kar. bahut hua intro, ab main story shuru kar...me waiting😛

Edited by austen_TanHa - 11 years ago

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widowmaker

@widowmaker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#84

Originally posted by: Rockingbhardwaj
reyam convo is tooo goood yr..
swayam kirne efforts lga rha h...

mrignaini...lovely ...

sharon swayam k shoulder p sar rkhkar so gai...
swayam ke maan me laddoo foote..

loved it dear..
thanks 4 d pm

Thanks for such a beautiful comment...

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widowmaker

@widowmaker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: Kunta_tanha
Wow update finally 🥳

Reyam convo is very nice
Swayam take time to get ready ... To impress Sharon ( before rdx's party ki yadd ayi mere ko 😆 )

Mrignaini - 😛 yeh Accha n unique word for tariff

Humm, chalo friendship ki starting hogai ... Ab hopefully swayam impress Sharon soon

Sharon slept resting her head on swayum's shoulder, haye swayam ...tik tyo hoga na 😆
How he will control his heart beat !!!

Overall nice update

Thanks for pm Archit 🤗
( now happy ab baat Karo 😛 )

Thanks kittu...🤗

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widowmaker

@widowmaker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#86

Originally posted by: diyaswaronholic
The only thing I can say is WOOWW
Bhai this was completely awesome!!
mriginaini?? Whr did u get this word frm!! But Jo bhi ho It suited perfectly!
Sharon sleeping on Swayams shoulder ..
Aww

This is tooo good bhai
loved it
waiting fr d next part

Thanks bachha for a beautiful comment 🤗

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widowmaker

@widowmaker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#87

Originally posted by: akankshaArsha
bhai meri taraf se bi wish krna plz...
reyam convo is super fun always..swayam is so cute while getting ready to meet her...
pyar ki pehli seedhi dosti...
sharon sleeping on his shoulder was adorable ..
update soon

Kiya akku wish tri taraf se bhi...and thanks for such a lovely comment 🤗