Amour Immortel Swaron OS

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Heya guys so here is another swaron OS by me I wrote it for the OS contest but couldn't submit it. So,I thought about sharing it with you guys now.Hope you like it.Do read and review your comments mean a lot.Enjoy reading


Amour Immortel

He was standing there once more Gazing at the sea. This was the place where he has been coming ever since college got over and he had to meet her. He was content on the outside but on the inside a war was raging threatening to rip him apart. He closed his eyes and stood there for a moment when he felt her. He knew she was there, he knew she would come so he smiled and turned around and there he saw her. She was standing in front of him as beautiful as ever dressed in his favorite Salwaar kameez. She knew he loved when she dressed in that. She smiled at him innocently but he faked a glare and said

"You are late, awfully late."

She just smiled and held both her ears and said

"I am sorry"

Just her smile and that sweet tone of hers and he was a goner, the fake anger slipped of a bright smile appeared on his face. There was new glint, a new hope in his eyes that instant. His face broke out into a grin. This is what always happened.

"Fine I forgive you but this is the last time you have kept me waiting OK". Even though he said so they both knew he would forgive her for every mistake she did because he loved her that much. So in return she pinched the skin of her throat lightly and replied

"Promise". That had him melted into a puddle of goo. She was the most innocent yet most cunning person he had ever seen. Ironic isn't it. So He smiled and she occupied the swing and looked at him and said

"Come on push me. I want to ride the swing". The way she said that like a petulant child had him chuckling at her innocence. He shook his head and approached her, he stood behind her and put his hand on both ropes on either side of the swing and whispered in her ear gently.

"First you are late now instead of groveling for my forgiveness you are demanding me to push you so that you can enjoy the swing ride , where are your manners my love ?" Her cheeks turned a brilliant shade of pink in embarrassment. He loved that blush so much. He took in her appearance and drank her in. The way her long eyelashes were now down in embarrassment hiding her humongous olive green orbs and brushing her pink cheeks. The way her cheeks were turning pink with every passing second but most of all the way her lips were curved into that adorable shy smile of hers, God how he loved her. His gaze was broken when she cleared her throat. He saw her looking at him with the puppy dog expression that he could never refuse. She took full advantage of her impact on him and asked him again

"Please". He heaved a loud sigh and said "Fine but this the last time I am giving in to that puppy dog face got it", again they both knew that it was just a statement. He gently pulled the swing back and pushed it forward and her face broke out into that brilliant smile that lit up his day every time. As soon as the swing came back he kissed the crown of her head and pushed the swing with a little more force. The loud giggle that escaped her mouth had him chuckling too. That way he continued to kiss her head and push the swing. Soon the sun started to set and darkness was enveloping them. The sky was no longer bright blue. With the change in weather she sighed and said.

"Its time, I have to go". He wanted to say ,Not yet but he had no choice so he simply left his place and walked ahead of her and stood facing the sea while she sat there looking at him with sad eyes. The next time he spoke his voice was thick and cracking.

"First you came late, and now you want to leave. I haven't even looked at you properly today. I haven't had the chance to love you properly today." Though it was just a statement what it meant only those two knew.

"Swayam I know but I will come early tomorrow promise. I love you and I love being loved by you. You know I can never stay away from you for long, You know that right."

He heaved a sigh and said without facing her.

"You always leave me Sharon, You always leave me"

She stood up and came to stand in front of him. She took his hand put it on her cheek and he immediately cupped her cheek and caressed it softly with his thumb. His touch spread warmth throughout her while her cool skin was his undoing. She looked at him once more and said

"I never leave with my choice Swayam situations take me away but I always come back and I will keep coming back for you forever just remember that OK. As long as you love me I will never be away from you for long. I will always find my way back to you."

"I know Sharon and so you will always keep coming back to me because I will love you for an eternity but I just wish I could keep you forever and never let you go."

She smiled at him and put her hand on his heart and said "you have me right here forever". Saying so she kissed the patch of his skin below which lied his thumping heart and said "For now I have to go. Take care of me and yourself".

He smiled and gently kissed her forehead his lips lingering longer than a minute before he pulled back and cupped her face and said with a smile "Always and forever my love, Always and forever. Come soon tomorrow I will be waiting for you right here".

She smiled and replied "Of course after all its always and forever". Kissing his palm one last time she started walking away, he didn't look at her he just sat down on the wet sand as waves came and hit his feet every once in a while. Once he felt she was gone, a single tear rolled down his cheek. He had held those tears ever since he had felt her presence before. Her presence was like a guilty pleasure to him, her coming brought him immense happiness but with that also came the pain of knowing that she would be leaving soon too and he couldn't do a thing to stop it. He looked at the dark sky and more tears started flowing out of his eyes without any restraint. His silent cries soon turned to sobs which wreaked his whole body. The sound of his cries was same as of a lioness whose cubs had been killed in front of her. His tears and pain was flowing out with such intensity that if anyone could see him now they would break down too instead of consoling him. This was him Swayam Shekhawat the local Romeo of the town but the only difference between him and real Romeo was that he didn't die with his Juliet instead he survived only to see his Juliet every day after sunrise till sunset. Everybody called him insane and mentally damaged. No one believed him that he could see her but he didn't need anyone because as long as he had Sharon and he could touch her and feel her even for a few hours every day he will survive because her love made him strong and he also knew that his love is what has the strength to keep her coming back to him. He wants to join her there in the heavens but she becomes furious at the thought and always say "Don't even think about it, I left so early I didn't even get the chance to explore the world but your connection to earth makes me able to experience it, so if not for you stay for me" and with that he agrees because he is a sucker for her puppy dog face and he holds on to the hope that when god will see fit and she experiences everything he will reunite them be it here or there in heaven with her one thing he is sure of is that with her its "always and Forever". With that he gets up and looks at the swing one more time and visualizes the image of her that he drank in earlier and then he leaves. Once he reaches the locality the whispers start and Vicky his neighbor comments.

"So back from your imaginary meeting with Juliet huh Romeo". Everyone laughs and Nilesh another guy comments "what a love story you have dude, you are a Romeo whose Juliet died before him". Saying so the guys burst out laughing while he just turns around with a smile and replies.

"Romeo and Juliet can never be far apart that is why my Juliet comes back to me everyday and when time comes I will join her and we will be together where we belong while the rest of you will reminisce Swayam and Sharon instead of Romeo and Juliet because our love is far stronger that even a difference of life and death doesn't matter"...

This is how it was for Sharon and Swayam the couple whose tragic love story is far more beautiful than any fairytale yet far more tragic than a nightmare but their love made them strong for each other.

"Lovers die but love remains immortal"

-Harshita


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Posted: 11 years ago
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This was so so Brilliant..I couldnt able to say how much i loved this..It was so so emotional having all the possible factors to make ur readers numb and to make them think how much uniqueness we have in swaron lovestory..The idea was superrbb and the deep and dark theme behind this work was painfull yet enough to make me fully amazed..It was out of the way to reminiscence swayam as a character of Romeo n loverboy..And honestly i loved his pov regarding daily meet with sharon..The way u wrote his dialouges was drastically amazed me again,Enough to make me bit cry..Now u did so so well to describe his feelings,to express his love and his emotions for sharon,which is died n imaginary for world..At the end,i just loved swayam's answer to those guys,(Seriously what a big played with the words there)And last loved the ending where u described ur main theme behind this work and it was so true..Trully swaron story is far more beautifull till eternity yet more tragic then a nightmare.but there love made them strong for each other..
Lovers die but love remains immortal (Perfect line to decribed ur real message behind this OS)

Great Done..Just keep it up

I am really sorry for not resuming to read ur FF just becoz of busy life And,i guess i had so much reserved comment there😆But i hope,i will read it and do comment very soon..Till then wait for that..




Prateek
Edited by prateek.007 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Omg this OS was really fab.

- Swayam feelings his dialogues everything was perfectly written.

Keep writting more!
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Posted: 11 years ago
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it was beautiful and fantastic os... loved it
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: prateek.007

This was so so Brilliant..I couldnt able to say how much i loved this..It was so so emotional having all the possible factors to make ur readers numb and to make them think how much uniqueness we have in swaron lovestory..The idea was superrbb and the deep and dark theme behind this work was painfull yet enough to make me fully amazed..It was out of the way to reminiscence swayam as a character of Romeo n loverboy..And honestly i loved his pov regarding daily meet with sharon..The way u wrote his dialouges was drastically amazed me again,Enough to make me bit cry..Now u did so so well to describe his feelings,to express his love and his emotions for sharon,which is died n imaginary for world..At the end,i just loved swayam's answer to those guys,(Seriously what a big played with the words there)And last loved the ending where u described ur main theme behind this work and it was so true..Trully swaron story is far more beautifull till eternity yet more tragic then a nightmare.but there love made them strong for each other..

Lovers die but love remains immortal (Perfect line to decribed ur real message behind this OS)

Great Done..Just keep it up

I am really sorry for not resuming to read ur FF just becoz of busy life And,i guess i had so much reserved comment there😆But i hope,i will read it and do comment very soon..Till then wait for that..




Prateek



This was huge.I really didn't expect this response especially from you prateek bhai.This concept just struck me out of the blue when I saw the pic for the OS writing contest and so i penned it down.I really didn't think that it would create the desired impact among the raders but seeing as you were impressed I am a little confident now.Thank you gor the generous review
Oh and as for your res on the SS its fine.I know how hectic life can be at times so dont worry about it and read when you have time and unres then.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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thank you😃
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Originally posted by: -Jasmita-

Omg this OS was really fab.


- Swayam feelings his dialogues everything was perfectly written.

Keep writting more!


thank you jas dii😃
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Originally posted by: arsha-rupanshi

Super osam..
Loved it.. :))


thank you😊
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thank you very much😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Beautiful os... Luvd d essence of pain nd satisfaction mixed up together.
I m at loss of words to describe what i felt while reading it. All i cn say is that i m happy that i could read this fab piece of write up.
Amazing job.

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