KUNWAR AMARJEET SINGH OS- His fantasy (updated in page 4)

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Pray_For_Peace

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Posted: 11 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: luvarsha20
thanks mia doll, you are a sweetheart.

you are most welcome Kishi!! 🤗

I'll be busy next week with college stuff, so pm/scrap me the next time you plan to update.

Thanks in advance.😊

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darshita

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Posted: 11 years ago

#32

brilliant and fabulous chapter... the poverb were wonderful... loved it...
do continue soon and pm me

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Kashish

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Posted: 11 years ago

#33

KISH! This was just... you know I felt like this is the real him. The real Amar. I'll go through things in order cuz there were just soo many of them here. You know I love how this small tiny piece packed such a huge punch beginning right from the start.

I LOVE the fact that he wasn't over the moon with her winning. THAT is realistic. Yes, he would be disappointed that he didn't win but he would rather she did than anyone else. So yay for those small nuances.

I like the bits about the names too. I could imagine rubbing his thumb over it with a fond smile on his face and a distant look in his eyes and now I'm sounding creepy so moving on...

I love how you've stuck to her aloof personality. Her warm smile at him and how his breathe hitches. Because it would. Because it's so rare and its all for him. Ah.

And you know I absolutely loved the bit about the acting because YES! Just everything about that bit was amazing and the canon in my head. I personally sometimes think he is the most honest as Reyaansh, rarely yes, but I do. And I'm so happy to know I'm not the only one.

Dude this bit: Yes, Reyansh was the perfect scapegoat. Only if she knew there were never two different people and characters to begin with.

👏

Thank you for this brilliant piece. If you're always going to pack this many details in something this tiny, I'll gladly sign up for bite size bits from you. Also sorry if all I'm pointing out are the instances but I think that's the strength of your piece. The keen acute observations and how you tie them up with words to make them appear real life making the reader go 'Oof course! duh!'.

Awesome awesome followup and one that just leaves me hungrier for more!

Edited by Couch_Potato - 11 years ago

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payal sood

@love_arsha

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Posted: 11 years ago

#34

Nyc update...
Amar prv written beautifully...
Thaanx for informing me...
Thnnku so mch

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Mruganka and Anushka

@Arshalicious

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Posted: 11 years ago

#35

Wow I totally loved this update

The way u have described Kunwar's thoughts is just incredible

His feelings after Shakti winning DID, first day of D3 workshop, his thoughts about acting and being conscious during the interviews...It is all described so beautifully and realistically that I can easily picture it in front of my eyes

Great job!!
Waiting for the next part

-Anushka

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Shukti_19

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Posted: 11 years ago

#36

Awesome update
luvd every bit of it
continue soon

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VAISHNAVI MURALI

@-vaishnavimural

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Posted: 11 years ago

#37

just read d whole update..

i loved d way u showed kunwar amar's thoughts brilliantly..

loved last para a lot..

awesome work..👏👏

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madhu

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Posted: 11 years ago

#38

Nice update :D yaa too chota tha..
Bt mast tha...
Oh.. So amar apni feelings rey k through depict kerta h.. Nice haa

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Himani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#39

posted by mistake

wrong post

Edited by -Khwahish- - 11 years ago

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Himani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#40

Karry you are too good at deciphering emotions you know ...

I loved your take on his personality ...about his views and the way he got attracted to her ...Its a treat to read ...I love your crispy and brewing writing style 😃

I personally love the second part more because it defined Amar in a way ... I could literally feel Amar was conveying the OS ...The way he loves dancing and acting too holds a special place in his heart ... How it defines him ...Amazing description 👍🏼

You should definitely write more on POVs ..It seems to be ur forte :D