Originally posted by: Sarunfanatic_Ji
Entry #24 - Eyes Beyond Perfection - Genre, Tragedy.
Comment : Beautiful!! And very very heart warming shot. Arohi is full of life, just like her mother. 😳
Originally posted by: shreya2748
My vote for entry # 24 ❤️
I cried at each line but seriously its unique,u won't find it anywhere
Like os of the year,or my life :')
Their love,care,their playful banters,their moments,him cornering her,teasing her saying her nose or cheeks are red,her calling him LG,him changing unintentionally himself in her love,her chirpiness.uhh...no one can imagine how hard it is to live without all these,and just remembering those moments,admiring her every antics in dreams,reminiscing past,like feel her,remember her,admire her,but can't see her,can't touch her,can't show ur love towards her,don't have anyone to care about.It's to hard to live life like this,the way you described dark side of his life,his loneliness,his cries,his shouts in middle of night,his pleads,his guilt.like he wanted her back,just one chance to have her back,just one chance to save her,they promised each other,and she did keep her promise,but he couldn't and that pain is just unbearable.and your lines showed his feelings very well.That he started drinking,he closed himself in his(their) room crying,shouting,even forgetting his own daughter :'(
Ohh I can't imagine how he returned from the place where she died.is it that easy to live everyday where they have spent their special moments
The great ASR,who was now more ruthless to the world,no one but his sis and his daughter knew how shattered he was from inside
Like he was dead inside,but was just living,smiling for his daughter
But his,THEIR daughter,the way she tried to help her dad,the way she tried to share her dad's pain,the way she tried to lessen the burden he was carrying all these years that was amazing,just like khushi did when he revealed about his parents death to khushi.
She was feeling proud of her father and why won't she,her father was the best dad,and best husband in this world,cause it's too hard to live without ur life partner,and that to when you were/ARE madly in love with her
Love love loved it
I can read it infinite times
Among these 26, 8 of them were beautiful which touched my heart mainly 5,8,22,24 were awesome just I got into it that felt happy sad and Wht not. These four just drowned me down into the pool.
Entry #24 Eyes Beyond Imperfection...
Comment: This was touching. Arnav's mental state when Khushi passes away, written very aptly. Yes, that's how he would be when Arnav loses Khushi. Loved Arohi's character and her determination to bring her father back to being cheerful wholeheartedly.
Thanks to above all who shared their thoughts😃
A big thank u to Sarunfanatic_Ji , divya1122 , Barun_Gf , shreya2748 , avni_barun , vishruta , nature2 , ssyahoo and whiterose29 for voting for this Os🤗
After the declaration of results one reader scrapped me after knowing that entry no.24 was by me and it really made me overwhelmed😳..Her username is avni_barun..Thank u soo much dear ur scrap made my day🤗
Originally posted by: avni_barun
Hey dear...
I have read ur OS in d contest and If I am not wrong its Eyes Beyond Perfection...
It was an incredible piece of writing...
The way father-daughter relation was descibed was beautiful...
It touched my heart...Arohi supported Arnav and helped her come out of grief was shown perfectly...
I broke down completely when Arohi asked about Khushi to Arnav...
This is one the best OS i have ever read...
Lazyleaves and mistyrains (Judges) too shared their thoughts and below is there comments and I feel greatly honoured that they commented on my OS particularly,
Mistyrains
Entry 24: I love the fact that this piece was narrated from the point of view of a daughter who has never known her mother. A very touching read.
LazyleavesEntry 24. Nice story, but it is difficult for me to imagine an alcoholic Arnav who doesn't fulfill his duty towards his daughter, even initially. My bad! But otherwise, a good concept :)
A big hug to you all🤗
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