An ArHi SS:Seduction *Thread Two* (COMPLETED)

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Desire6

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Posted: 11 years ago

#511

Everythng is so mysterious nd am hookd to d story..
very beautiful updt

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LooneyLuna

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Posted: 11 years ago

#512

Originally posted by: meera30
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Well, the morning isn't any better- except my crazy theories are being contained within by the rational side of my mind. So I will <deep breath> wait for you to reveal just what her reality is, why she will be the next one he will lose and why she thinks staying away from him is the thing to do. <deep breath>

To the chapter itself - you are beginning to write poetry in prose - well honestly you always did but earlier it was more about passion and love, now it is about beauty and well...seduction. I don't know if I have ever read a full blown physical intimacy chapter from you before but that dream was frikking brilliant in the way it said everything and yet left enough out to keep it mysterious, elegant and sexy.

For a story named Seduction, you are doing justice and then some. You don't even need him to spell out that he will seduce her...because that - the chase, the honesty in the chase is evident in everything they are doing with each other, to each other!

As always, I am saying a lot less than what I am feeling. But then I know Luna will do better and I will wait for comment :D (the one she had on the last chapter was effing brilliant!)

TELL ME ABOUT IT!

I think you wrote about this part in such perfect words, my comment is going to fall short now!

Also what is with this story and feeling a lot more than can be put into words?! Someone? Anyone?

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prati_incept

@prati_incept

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+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#513

Originally posted by: LooneyLuna

TELL ME ABOUT IT!

I think you wrote about this part in such perfect words, my comment is going to fall short now!

Also what is with this story and feeling a lot more than can be put into words?! Someone? Anyone?

my comment is going to fall short now!

😊

ha.. now you know

you made me feel the same many a times..

🤗

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-HEAVEN-

@-HEAVEN-

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Posted: 11 years ago

#514

was khushi akash's girlfriend??? if this isnt the case then kill me for this awful prediction!!!!

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vandana.sagar

@vandana.sagar

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#515

Chapters 1 to 4

Juhi what an app name for your story Seduction! It's not just Arnav and Khushi who you are being seduced !

You are the seductress who has successfully seduced us with your brilliant writing !

I love the play of names love NK and Lavanya Kashyap, happily married , Aman of course and I love how Preeto is the artisan and I love how you've used them in your story!

I also love how you've put in incidents from the show into the story ! The payal scene in the show with the ghungroo one here! The use of the term chamkili too! The dargah scene with the key falling down with your own take to it!

You have successfully captured the on the essence and feel of what the dilapidated Sheesh Mahal would probably look like.

I have loved the research you have done for this story ( My mother is from Lucknow so all the places you mention I felt a connection with )! The mystery and the intrigue behind both of them and their past something that binds them together in terms the secrecy involved.

The aura of mystery and intrigue coming out so well and most of all I love the way that you have shown how both of them can feeling each other's presence right from the beginning and without even actually haven't spoken there is something that has connected them.

A feeling between them so powerful which has is helping them break out of the past.

I love the attraction and the desire they feel and I like the fact that it's mutual and I like that in such a short span they have bonded so well and he has actually realised that she is important in his life , I loved how he cannot see disappointment in her eyes and how her accepting his lunch plan was so vital to him, I loved how she came up with an alternative plan.

I loved their kiss and how her go away affected him, how he has decided what he needs to do not just for himself but for his nani and Di...and then issues instructions to Aman to find out everything about her ..that important is she to him and he has this urgent need to know everything about her...things like why she was inside when everyone was outside during the celebrations !

I like how she understands his reason and what he is going through! I loved how he wants to open up to her and wants to come out in the open about his past and wants her to do the same so they can start with a clean slate and take if from there...to see where they would go from there as two normal and ordinary people.

The guilt he feels for the past and what happened to Aakaash and so has been depriving himself of any chance of happiness and a normal life in order to repent. And then she comes along and he is instantly attracted to her and he can't control how he feels and for the first time wants a shot at normalcy and a chance of happiness ...

I like that she is aware of him watching her it exhilarates her, and she knows it is him whose eyes she has been feeling on her from the first day!

I have my list of facts ready here too as I read and needless to say I love this one too!

The pace, the concept, the characterisation and descriptions ...it is a visual delight too!

When it is your writing ...I feel my words are never adequate to express my thoughts!

I am sure in my excitement I have missed out stuff I would have wanted to say...

Edited by vandana.sagar - 11 years ago

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sindhu

@misscrazyfan

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Posted: 11 years ago

#516

omg that was serious and seducting way of taking the story to move on...

omg i just love this arshi...

like ur narrating...

the way arnav carvings every night and the love he held for khushi and the way khushi is standing for her pride and controlling her feelings is awesome...

omg arnav did it,,he just told her that he love her...

so will waiit for the next to know the truth and what astonished arnav after he entered the blue roomm...

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Polkadots78

@Polkadots78

Inactive

Posted: 11 years ago

#517

I don't know what you meant by the chapter being not what we would expect..

For me it was like an assault on my senses 😃.

Did you ever feel that your surroundings cease to exist when you are so pulled in by what you are reading..??

Beautiful total edge-of-the seat entertainment, Juhi!!

Thank you :)

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snapeseverus

@snapeseverus

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

#518

Originally posted by: -HEAVEN-
was khushi akash's girlfriend??? if this isnt the case then kill me for this awful prediction!!!!

I was thinking on the same lines... 😕... !!!!!! What if, she has written the same thing in the letter and that is why Arnav is not ready to belive her !!!!! 😲

J, you are playing with our minds now... please update the next chapter soon !!!!!!! Else, I'll keep posting these predictions like we used to see last year for IPKKND... that never came true 😛

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Amanram

@Amanram

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#519

Hey Juhi

I have just read and re-read Chapters 4 and 5. They are totally awesome and as promised with cliffhangers galore.

So finally we have Arnav's story. It is just so sad. Can one family facing so much grief and loss remain unscathed - definitely not. No wonder Arnav is such a brooding character. Aman's POV of how his friend changed with life events is just too good. After a long time it seems that Arnav is embracing life once again with his attraction/ pull towards khushi although there seems to be a note of despair as well with not being willing or even capable of letting go of the person he has fallen in love with. He does call her a loved one doesn't he? Damn this letter! What does it contain and what is that impossible situation of Khushi that is somehow seems unbelievable and makes him call her a liar! also I don't think I am liking the way the word 'seductress' is portrayed in Arnav's fantasy. It seems so deragotary somehow.

I have kept racking my brains for a possible take on Khushi's story but I have come up with zilch. This cliffhanger and mystery is definitely too high quotient for me. I am thus waiting with bated breath for Khushi's story to unfold and to be swept by it.

One thing is for sure. just like in 'Shattered', this pull between Arshi which they both acknowledge and want to explore more than anything else is here to stay. For me, seduced they already are by each other and come together they will but whether to stay together or to be separated is the question for me to ask and for you to answer of course!!😉