FF: War Path (Aslok fight it out)

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MayaB5

@MayaB5

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Posted: 12 years ago

#341

Love your story, just wish it wasn't ending so soon...

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priyavin

@priyavin

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Posted: 12 years ago

#342

Astha, the hell raiser; how apt

So Shlok is getting used to her n is relaxed when she is around.

Astha's giving him nice jhatkas, waiting to see when he will come down to his knees

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rajani_sid

@rajani_sid

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Posted: 12 years ago

#343

Very interesting...I think more interesting than the actual serial plot tight now:-)...keep it up...

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latha_555

@latha_555

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Posted: 12 years ago

#344

i just absolutely love that aastha is so jealous of swati, and her comments to shlock about swathi, especially the one about the baby girl...i think that whole paragraph was just awesome...both thinking about the baby and their own interpretations, and then aastha, asking him what he was thinking about...id so love to see such a scene in the serial...

liked what she said to stop him from drinking...and i loved the last part when she went on overnight business trip and her flippant replies were awesome.

i like how shlock is enjoying her ways and is also covering up and in a way protecting her...

congrats on ur last chapter and the whole jothi track almost seems like it was copied from your story...well done...i did tell you they could hire you...