Arhi FF: Labyrinth - Thread 2 Link posted - Page 84

Originally posted by: KittuPratzz

😆😆 Oh ...Doc's here!!!

Onir...how is youuu?? 😛

Oh hi Kittu... 😃

Originally posted by: -Mitra

@ Onir, welcome back!

Chapter 6: Stuck - "Oddly, I didn't want to take lead that night. It seemed uncharacteristic of me that I hadn't insisted on taking the cab and paying for it myself"

There is an illusion of control from both ends. She thinks she is letting him take the lead. While he thinks, well, we haven't gotten to that part :)

I don't know about the finances part that you are referring to. However, if you are referring to this line, where she wonders if he doesn't have enough money to get a cab for the daughter of Shashi Draupad, then she speaks them in the holds of her haughtiness. Its not in allusion to their future.

Oh! you make sense in every way. Don't bother writing down your thoughts. We are here to catch you if you wander off in this labyrinth.

Ok, but yet I do feel she is somewhere stuck within her own thoughts contradicting her own decisions.

Amazing update! Will re read and come back to write more. All I can say is I'm wondering if Shyama meant the last line literally or figuratively...?

Originally posted by: Kishmish

Finally ... 😆

Part of Vishwa's plans seem to have worked but somewhere something seems

to have backfired ...

Shyama did not land up at the pub but in the bargain Dhri and he got bashed up ...

Resulting in Arnav/Arjun having to drive them to drop the injured Dhri off home ...

but the camel or rather the mule sat frigid in the car not helping in getting the injured

Dhri out clearly not not wanting to be a part of the game that Vishwa was playing ... 😆

trust the stubborn mule ...

Shyama seems to have been avoiding Vishwa and is pretty shocked after her talk

with Shradha !!!???

I wonder what Vishwa's game plan will be now to get the two errant souls to meet ...

Thanks Hasini ... waiting eagerly for the next ...

[YOUTUBE]https://youtu.be/o1DGN1_ETAQ[/YOUTUBE]

Originally posted by: KittuPratzz

geeezzz...ur video...Marjaawan!!!! ummmaaahhh a big hug 🤗 its awesome!!! my flute!!! and my neela megha syama!!

ok now I am confused Shraddha????. I thought it was just a made up story by Vishwa to know if there were any sparks from shyama side??. Guess I need to go back and read the previous chapter. Everything seems to be backfired for Vishwa?? Arnav frigid LOL...perefct.

Res!!!

Originally posted by: dreamymaya

Res!!!

But got to say this...Vishwa and his sarcasm which is even in his thoughts :0 awesome!!

Kishmish, thnks for the video...its lovely!!

Chapters 11-15: The story or to say the narrative moving forward makes it more interesting and has me on the edge. Indeed you have filled life into your words and made this whole narrative into a labyrinth for not only your characters but also for me as a reader. It has pulled me in, that whichever direction I try to go to arrive at a sound conclusion the more questions arise yet there are certain things falling into place. 👏 Brilliant writing

The blue flames again connecting them ... Forcing them to spend some more time in each other's vicinity as well as giving her opportunity to get a glimpse into his family and its dynamics. Was it to enable her to decide about her choices from the swaymvar?? The whole train journey and the time spend together was like a friendship of sorts among strangers which was quite alarming with the ease with which they felt familiar and comfortable to share their life within a day of knowing each other yet not knowing. The fight or disagreement with the following lashing out by Shyama was in a way more real to me ...as it showed some opposition from her side towards the speed with which they were moving forward breaking unseen yet strongly held onto barriers. She wants to shield herself form it all yet even in face of danger seeks him alone that too with so much of right on him (by her gripping his collar). He defends his doings and is miffed by her, in spite of all of it he still seeks to have that familiarity with her by emphasising his name as Arjun to be called by her. Thus proving only he could handle her. Vishwa and Dhri reached almost in same time gap as them even though they left before, which I feel is Vishwa's doing.

The homecoming was apt 👍🏼 I know this story isn't about her marrying all brothers as in the Mahabharata yet her entering into marriage with one brother will bond her in some relation with the other four ... who are going to be bound to protect her honour. So Khyati's saying of the quote of sharing with inclusion of not breaking it feels as if prediction of events to follow. Arjun's concern throughout her phase of injury and its impact was well brought out. He carried her in even when she had her brother and best friend within arm's reach, and it was all smoothly allowed.😉😆 Though he entered the house with her in arms, she was the reason for him to be living a restless night out and away from her on the terrace. 😆

Presumption and Ingress ... Both chapters were one leading to the other. It was like Khyati unknowingly was symbolically allowing Shyama to enter the world that she has been handling as the woman of the house thereby handing over the household to her by a small start to it by her being aware of the secrets of the family...😃 I was reminded of Arjun-Shyama's conversation about secrets. Nilofer didn't want Khushi to be awake without have an inkling that that the conversation between Khyati and Nilofer has in some ways awakened her, where the secrets revealed in darkness of night led to Shyama analysing everything in a new light with the dawn of the new day.👏 Her knowledge of the past night gave her an eye to see all the brothers in a more refined way... Like she could distinguish the different individual characteristics of the twins, or even for that matter Dev... making it easy for her to form bonds even though she just entered their household the night before as a guest. Excellent writing Hasini, and brilliant tying up of it all.👏👏 👍🏼 Dev and the eye with which she observes him was something that I liked a lot. She describes that Dev's catharsis is cooking while within the same plane your writing reveals that Shyama's catharsis is observation and keeping within her not only her own secrets in the blue of her life but also secrets of all that are going to stuck with her in the web spun by Vishwa.

She has been restless due to the disagreement and lashing out on "him", (I really like how she keeps referring to Arjun as him and not otherwise...) while he has been trying hard to deflect her form him ... But as put together by you he wanted her to think over her choice by showing her the stark reality of his household and life which should have been distasteful or unfulfilling to her ... but then she completes him and his this deflection itself causes her to affirm her choice and get attracted to him... All in all it was aiding and in correlation to Vishwa's ploys and manipulation to have them both end up together.

Iago...👏👏👏 too good. The way you have incorporated Shakespearean references and connections between these two form their very first meeting is very interesting and brilliant way of keeping a link always. Othello is one such work of Shakespeare that I have had most debates on with my friends, especially in reference to Iago... It has always intrigued me. Your inclusion of the quote here and the whole meaning to it was well woven. I really loved the idea of leaving the note without the actual quote 😉 Very smart!... thereby leading the bearer to put in some more efforts for the whole revelation showing that the apology was needed and that the bearer was ready to forgive just seeing the thought behind the apology.

Loving this story and your adaptation to it all... will come back for more...I guess reaming 6 parts now... 😃