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Hey Namratavyas! So a confession here, 😳, I've read all your chapters because I'm so madly addicted to this show and meanwhile I indulge in the writers' FFs and I've decided to take time out and comment on everyone's FFs that I've read so far, starting with yours because it was simply the first one I read lool - fair? 😉
So let's get started! I'm Tink by the way, real name Parvesh so you can take your pick 😛.
Part 1So Part 1, it starts with the portrayal of Astha being the typical girl who has posters of the hot dude in her room and stuff - not bad I like it. Young girl dreams of everything including a handsome groom, a girl's gotta try right 😆.
And Varad and Naranjan are crooked in your story (I do think Naranjan defines the word 'crafty' in his on-screen character lol), and poor Shlok he's akdhu bevaviour hasn't stopped his peecha even in the ffs! 😆
So from this part we get to understand what kind of characters all are, leaving us to wonder how the title of your FF will fit in with these opposites, Will Love Happen? Hmm, very interesting girl.
Part 2
Do you know what this scenario reminds me of slightly 😳, Fifty Shades of Grey, when Anna knows that Christian will be present on her graduation day, its a very sweet little scene and your scene reminded me of that too but it had its own Shlok arrogance throughout it which I enjoyed. I mean its so Shlok disregard the garland! *rolls eyes* And bechari Astha's umeed is shattered😭.
But all is not lost in the part, jaate jaate Shlok made sure 'indirectly hi sahi' that uske office ka raasta kya hain, which means it's only our Astha that can qualify for this role right! 
Part 3
Acha toh Shlok knows about Varad's filthy habits 🤢, but as if that isn't bad enough, yeh Anjali has to insist on Shlok marrying! 😭😭 Nahiiin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I don't like it one bit!
Lekin, Shlok also gave eeth ka jwab pathar se! 😃 Go on my boy! ❤️
Aaaw poor Shlok he had flashbacks of his real Mother, what a trauma that must have been for the poor kid to grow up .
LIAR LIAR! LIAAARR, NARANJAN AGHNIHOTRI IS A LIAR! I don't like this dude, he looks and acts like a full on creep. 
Part 4
Eeek and it starts with Astha entering Shlok's office as his personal assistant, wow Astha khoob paraye ki hogi in these past 2 months 😆. And omg, Astha falls straight into his arms, a bonus on the first day, but what's this? Shlok doesn't even take a moment to acknowledge Astha in his arms - what a guy! Come on Shlok you gotta be a gentleman somewhere *tut tut*. And jaate jaate she has to collide with that idiot Varad, was left wondering why he enquired about her 😡, Astha darling! You better be careful of him honey!! 😲
So Shlok has given Astha the task of solving the issues taking place in the college, and the principal doesn't even acknowledge any of the sort! What a jerk! And again that stupid Varad, I really don't like him in this FF lool, you've done a fab job in turning him into an assho*e 😆.
Part 5
It starts with a short interaction between Astha and Shlok but as usual Shlok bechari ko bhau hi nahin deta 😕, but at least we know they're meet later at home 😳.
Nahhiiinnn!!!!!!!! Why does this Varad interrupt every two seconds! I wanna kill him already 😡. Haaaw that flippin' bast***d tried to touch Astha! 
I'm gonna officially kill you Varad! 😡
I'm gonna officially kill you Varad! 😡Finally! Shlok notices the girl and woh bhi when she's wearing his bloody clothes lool, don't worry Shlok I'm sure you're rich enough to buy yourself another pair if Astha doesn't decide to give it back to you 😕. So it begins, 'do dil mil rahe hai, magar chupke chupke' and haye haye they spend the night together in Shlok's room, I guess this was a test drive for Astha to check whether the bed will be suitable for their love-making skills 😆😆😆.
Poor Astha, she doen'st regret sleeping in Shlok's room but gets nervous when she bumps into that stupid nosey Varad, I wish I could bury him alive, and how dare he jaate jaate trying to instigate against Shlok to Astha! 😡 I wish Astha would slap him.
So Shlok wonders about Astha, about time hun, honestly itni dher lagata hai koi?
In the bin??????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! What the hell, how could you throw that kurta in the bin?????!!!!
Bad move Shlok, I'm not impressed, pyar ki pehli nishani and you binned it!! 
And on top of that he's decided to stay away from Astha, NO Shlok don't do it! I'm begging you.
And on top of that he's decided to stay away from Astha, NO Shlok don't do it! I'm begging you. So that's my comments for the first 5 chapters rest will follow, I'm just feeling hungry you see, aur yeh paapi ped ko kaun samjhaye 😆. But I will be back real soon, and you keep posting great updates such as these, and if you send pms I would most definitely appreciate the alert. But gotta say your story is superb very catchy and most of all even when the chapter itself has finished this story has a tenacious attachment well after I've read it, I think it's mostly because you've shone the light on the characters in the way that they are to be portrayed in the near future minus Varad lool, although I hate his guts in your FF I do sort of like him in the show, but anyways meanwhile you keep up the good work hun, you're doing a fab job, and I will return very soon with the rest of my comments. 😛
Love Tink
Kyunki Saas Bhi Kabhi Bahu Thi 2
Iss Pyaar Ko Kya Naam Doon
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