VirMan SS: Kuch Ankahee Mulaakatein UPDATED Page 11, 19/10

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JESMY

@JESNIA

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#81

SUPERB👏👏👏👏
LOVED IT

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kulsum_virman

@kulsum_virman

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Posted: 12 years ago

#82

I dunno how you do it every single time its like in a simple flow just simple words yet so capturing yet soo beautiful it creates that beautiful moment or just makes us goo woww on every thing expressed in your words...i just love it and you are just soo damn amazing 👏👏

more than a virman love story this story is inspiring to be and to do what we want to do what our hearts want us to do ...do it on our own way rather than repeating and doing wwhats going on...
and those dialogues of both amazingly written a beautiful lovestory with giving us something to inspire to follow...fab work maham 😃

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nikki.171

@nikki.171

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Posted: 12 years ago

#83

Loved it ! Its a love story with a message !
I'd love to give a longer comment but I am short on time.
I am really really looking forward to another story from you soon !

(Hint Hint! 😉)

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Syed695

@Syed695

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#84

Awesome..!! Loved it..lots of unkahe batein..and the beauty is they understand the unsaid words..its the essence of their relation...Virat finally spoke what has been bothering him and the change after...Like it...and he read her thoughts that wow...Waiting for next...Thanks for the PM Maham..!!!

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Jannat

@Jannat94

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#85

that was amazing dear
loved it and enjoyed it
thanx 4 the PM 😃

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prathe

@prathe

Stunner

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Posted: 12 years ago

#86

wow loved it...superb lines and superb ending dear hats off👏😛👏

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luv nishal

@luv_nishal

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#87

amazing update wid amazing ending...

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maham

@...Maham...

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#88

Huge huge thank you to all those who read and appreciated this! Thank you for understanding what I tried to write.. means so much. Will try to write more regularly from now on. 😊

Maham.

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Divya

@myownarea

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#89

Der aaye durust aaye😆

Will post my comments sooon 😳

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Divya

@myownarea

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#90

This gift :) Sigh! I took so long to reply and I feel weird about it, and I'm sorry too. something or the other kept coming up and I kept delaying it. You know secretly, its the kaise mujhe scenario all over again. Ok, its twisted, that apart Thank you so so much for writing this :)

PART 1

I like the special touches you give the characters. There is a lot of you in them (you know that right?) some times its in the conversations, I hear it in your voice sometimes. At other times its in the way they are. Anyway, the special touches that really caught my attention were Manvi being not the one to stare, but of course I thought when I read it.

Second one that was very interesting was how

virat got into the midst of the crowd asking them what they wanted. It made sense for him to be like that.

The scene in the terrace where Virat is looking at the moon and singing reminded me of Fountainhead. You know the book talks about that elevated being that you be when you completely surrender yourself to your passion and never compromise, I could relate it to the way Manvi looked at Virat.

It was nice to see how much Virat understood Manvi's position even thought he hadn't been told anything. There is a bond that such conversations create. A chance meeting and your life is changed forever. That is also why Manvi remembers him so clearly even five years later

Part 2

Starting with Virat's dream. It actually symbolised his internal struggle beautifully. It wasn't dark or scary. Of course it wasn't - he had work and admirers aplenty, yet it was cold and lonely. Very well done on that!

I liked how J being J had gone on and on about Viren, I found it an adorable quirk here. While Virat had known of her and waited for a whole month for her to turn up. Wonder what his reaction was when he first saw her pic :) I liked how you showed Viren instantly picking up on their obvious connection and later acting all lawyerly on Virat 😆 Typical.

Their initial conversation was hilarious because Manvi actually took offense to him saying their meeting wasn't important enough while she had done the exact same thing.

It was lovely, the way you hinted at Virat's changed nature without jumping into it head along. You emphasized on the point that he was essentially the same, something had changed with regard to the music he so loved.

The reasons you gave for them drifting apart was so real. It was beautiful to read. The contrast of the secrecy of the night and harsh day light was marvelous. Great piece of writing there.

Typical of Manvi to want to help Virat the way he inspired her to follow her dreams.

Edited by myownarea - 11 years ago