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Posted: 10 years ago

#161

Hi just finished the last two chapters, just awesome. Its lovely seeing the emotions and inner voices of these two, and your last chapter says it all. "Complete in their incompleteness".

I love how you writing is just more than a plain story. Simply wonderful.

Have you thought of doing one for their Rabba vay moments? The ones I can think of were when they are locked in the store room, the teej scene when he catches her and breaks her fast, when he throws the dupatta from Lavania and it falls on her, when they coadh and the sindoor goes over them both, and last but not least the holi scenes.

Ooh just thought of the other two, the hospital hug and the scenes just before the mu.. the food serving, him turning uo at the houee and waiting for her, the impatience when thry wanted to talk just before the wedding, and the scenes where she talks for him.. oops said two.

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Posted: 10 years ago

#162

Originally posted by: addicted25
Hi just finished the last two chapters, just awesome. Its lovely seeing the emotions and inner voices of these two, and your last chapter says it all. "Complete in their incompleteness".

I love how you writing is just more than a plain story. Simply wonderful.

Have you thought of doing one for their Rabba vay moments? The ones I can think of were when they are locked in the store room, the teej scene when he catches her and breaks her fast, when he throws the dupatta from Lavania and it falls on her, when they coadh and the sindoor goes over them both, and last but not least the holi scenes.

Ooh just thought of the other two, the hospital hug and the scenes just before the mu.. the food serving, him turning uo at the houee and waiting for her, the impatience when thry wanted to talk just before the wedding, and the scenes where she talks for him.. oops said two.

I am not sure if I can do romance, especially for the scenes on the show. I personally don't like how Arnav walks into her personal space or grabs her arm and pulls or pushes. I don't find it romantic so that would be hard to write.

If you have any scene to recommend, please provide me with the links for the scenes. I haven't seen the show so I am not sure which scenes you are talking about. 😊

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kclovearshi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#163

Hi RB,

I have read few of your works and every time I'm left speechless ; I don't seem to coherently write any comments as they don't seem to do justice to your prose..

Each of these pieces are gem and I wish I read them sooner and had requested a scene.!

I read your previous comment that you haven't even watched the show.. I'm really amazed at your ability to understand the characters, their essence.. I mean I could have never guessed this fact..

If you are still up to writing a scene, can you write about Arnav's thought process after he was unable to apologize to Khushi when he sends her to a dilapidated guest house and she was nearly killed..actually she never gives him a chance to apologize to her.. She gives him a piece of her mind and walks off after handling her resignation letter..

The episodes start around 27 or 28 and go up to 33.. They are available in hotstar :)

Cheers

And thanks in advance if you consider my request :)