D3 SS: What if? *Re-writing* - Page 7

Originally posted by: Muskan_TR

read it all In one go...
phewww...

it was nyc...

CS Was a bit too long...seriously...I think u should just cut off more than half of CS Coz it usually discloses most of the story...

BT ya it ws nyc :)

all the chapters were well written :)

just waiting fr next :D

Originally posted by: ...Shrisha...

Chapter 1A

i had read this chapter

before you edited and even after you edited

i don't remember if i had commented or not so commenting once more

i am really free today being it a sunday

plus after the test in school a day off from mom

coming back to where i was

the chapter was fab

god i didn't expected a jealous Rey from you

romance and lovey dovey scenes after reading falling in love with Reyaansh Singhania is a total shock

but i like the the jealous Rey

and the feisty Taani is something i always love to read

you know i am just fed up of innocence

so loved the feisty Taani

and the dialogue which celebrity had which surgery etc etc it wasa fun to read

they really got it on face

its fun to read such chapters

when people get pay backed for all their deeds

Rockstar his attitude claims him to be a rock star

he just rocked it

shutting their mouths made the climax of the chapter

Originally posted by: ...Shrisha...

Chapter 1B

i don't think i have commented so here you go girl

i won't say i liked anything in this chapter because i loved this chapter

and love and like are two different things you see😆

idiot thing was fun to read

Taani hitting Varun

oh well i forgot to mention

Varun was a suprise to get

after waiting for as you said 3 years i am happy to get Varun😆

coming back to idiot thing Saale Kamine Varun i couldn't hold my laughter over Swayam's reaction

by the way possessive Swayam ko kya hua?
anyways i am liking his Swayam too

so keep going girl

flashback beautifully written loved it to the core

i am a flashback fan i really love reading and writing stories in flashbacks

Vishaka's irritation over Rinni's shout wow

canada??? speechless

so holiday due to renovation

sounds like there is fun on the way

Taayam's little fight was cute and the plan seems fun

so both the gangs are on picnics nice...

one more thing just don't get hurt by it

i never said it to any other writer only reason was i didn't wanted to critisize and hurt them

but i'll say that to you only because you are my friend

the line...

Rey feels like he's died and gone to heaven hearing these words.

diya these are kind of distracters generally people use it in their stories like Rey was jumping in happiness hearing Taani's words or here Rey was dancing with joy these lines more than making you love the story distract you from reading just say Rey was happy hearing that that's enough your stories are near to reality and in reality no one actually jumps in joy hearing this or be's in heaven he just becames happy with that or just more than happy i know people really like reading it but these lines do distract from the main plot and readers like me really find it difficult to get back on track after releasing Rey's situation and reading the chapter

look Diya i don't have any intentions to hurt you its just that i don't want you to lose any readers people normally don't say that they just say it was an awesome chapter and just chuck it but at the end of the day they don't want to continue reading it and will therefore rarely comment so just don't get hurt and if possible keep that in mind

Originally posted by: piki_happiness9

read all d parts in one go
u r Realyy amazing writer
really eager to read taarey confession
plz update soon

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