[VM FF+18] One Mistake Chapter 25, pg 144 UPDATED

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Faria12345

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Posted: 12 years ago

#101

Originally posted by: helina

May god really bless me Faria.. No matter how much i try not to praise u for long updates but something was wrong with me and i want to praise u every time for that. Romantic..OOPs... Hot update i guess. Ummm... Long comments.. How much long? I couldn't say which part i liked most. Cause it was a bit long if i m allowed to say. Thanks for the pm

Stay fine...

Hahah u r funny! Thanks tho. U seee that's how u should make ur story LONG TOOO! Cuz as u know I always have complain :p

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sapphhire

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Posted: 12 years ago

#102

awesome love the all the updates, completely amazing and well written.

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Ankita

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Posted: 12 years ago

#103

OMG such a big part it is 😲😲 😃 one part divided to so many 😃
r u serious u wrote it faria 😆 itna long 😲 who r u 😆 humare faria ko kahan chupa ke rakha hai 😆

ofcourse u need a longgg.. comment for ur super long update 😃

so i will give one too 😃

the first part was just so amazing 😃

he was just flirting with her 😉 ❤️

their all nok jhoks just make me laugh louder and louder 😃😆

manvi dropped the luggage on his foot 😛 bechara ka pair toot hi jayega 😃🤣

virat gave his hand then took it back 😲 😃

V- "if u r a wild cat than I'm a tiger..
And u will know how WILD this tiger can get" mumbled on the way

this line was awesomeee.. 😉

the second update was also awesomee 😃

virat calls manvi wild cat ,bandariya 😆 and she calls him monkey 😆 precious names 🤣

virat options and advantages make me laugh like hell 😆😃

manvi cares for him little hi sahi 😉

V- that sounded unwanted.. Say it sweetly with a smile like "Virat I missed u sooo much please come with me..."
M- go die I don't care n she started to walk
V- acha suno... Tum bhi kya yaad rakho gi tumne bulaya aur hum chale aaye
M- manvi didn't look back and virat followed her with a mischief grin

this part was superb 😃 it was so hillarious 😆🤣 was laughing my head out during the first two parts 😆

virat ko toh sach main advocate hona cahiye tha 😆 kitna facts pata hai 😆

uske family ke sarre advocates ka asar hai 😆🤣

they talking about love and virginity 😲 😃

M- gyani baba ki jai ho
V- khush raho bacha..

its hillarious... 😆😆🤣🤣

He walk toward her n lean really close to her shoulder overlooking Wat she was making kya baat hai 😉
M- She didn't realize that he was behind her 😳
V- I called u witch that doesnt meant u will act like one
M- aaa... Virat... What r u doing here? N what u mean??
V- I mean to say if u r not a witch then y the hell u making potion? Do u know black magic? Or Dayan toh nehi ho? he checked her foot if it was upside down or not.. Phew they r straight so u are not. Thank god😆😆😆 he is totally mad or what 😆🤣 laughing out holding my stomach 😃
M- what rubbish.. R u out of ur mind? yesh!! 😆
V- yay tum bandariya hi ho!! Thank god aaj bachaliya.. Warna Mai toh socha ke Tum 😛

this part was just hillarious 😆

Ha this... She hold a silk pinkish nighty n showed him with a smile... nighty and virat 🤣

V- his eye grew big... U want me to wear this? 😲😆
M- witout thinking she answered "mmm yah.. "
V- Do I look she-male to u from any angle??? U want me to wear a nighty?? Aur vo bhi pink?? gosh!! i am laughing like anything now while cmnting and my family are giving me have- u- lost- it look 😃😛
M-bit her tongue. How stupid she was to show him her nighty.. she throw the nighty inside the drawyer and closed the doors.
Hell embarrassed..😳😳 hahaha!!😃

i had read till this from my phn and my charge was very less when it just finished 😲 and even there was power cut at that time but how could i leave such a big update reading half i cotinued with that low or no battery as it was not switched up 😆 as i am a mad 😃😛 as such intense scene was coming up too 😃

so again i continue 😃

And you all besharmis dare u to skip any line :p i am one of the besharam only 😉 and leaving one line no way 😃

manvi was checking him out 😉❤️ eekhs!!! 😃

virat caressed her lips 😉 kya baat hai 😃 (party!!! 🥳😛)

virat fell on top of manvi 😉❤️( jumping up and down and dancing😆)all thankx to u faria 😃

i was and now also only grinnig like an idiot reading this romantic part of the maha epi
😃😃 sab virman ka asar hai 😛

virat kissed her on her cheek two times * in virman dreamland *

OMG this part was totally hot and romantic ❤️❤️

loving this part to coreee... ❤️😉 u know i am a besharam 😉

Wait a second what the hell am I typing???? Giving u love making scenes??? Screw me, its only chapter 7 ... U all dirty minds don't grin too much! CONTROL.
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OK don't be sad now! Continue :p i was laughing at ur jokes seriously u r very funny 😃

did i said it earlier? noo i knew 😛

OMG manvi over virat now thats too awesomeee.. 😉 *my besharam thoughts 😛*

OMG she bite him 😲 sacchi ki wild cat hai 😆

OMG what virat did to stop her 😉 god i am being very besharam 😉😛

why her phn ranged on the correct time bt the song is good 😃

Kaminies break lagao aur kya chaiyeee... Isse
jyada I can't give nor will! U will never get a sex scene from me... U all eye
rapist get off don't even dare to think whatever happened above! lmao! 😆😆🤣🤣
Shit it's all my fault I should have stopped on
the first part.. But this Enrique n pitbull is so distractive that I
wrote this... i am very thankful to both of them coz they made u write it 😛

u r very funny faria 😆😆 nd reading ur note i was laughing my ass out 😆😃🤣

altogether it was just a superb,mindblowing,amazing and a freaking awesomeee update 👏👏👏👍🏼

dont say from next time that its bad and we will sleep it is damn awesomeee!! 😃😃❤️

update asap 😃 i know u r not going to do but still kehne main tax thodi na lagta hai 😆😆

enough of my pak pak now or else u will go mad 😆😆🤣 and heres ur long comment from only and only meee 😛

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Faria12345

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Posted: 12 years ago

#104

Ankitaaa thank u sooo much for ur comment.. Glad u enjoyed.. Even I enjoyed too u guys have no clue how many times I went back n extended each dialog or added scenes...!i wasn't gonna stop but did cuz my battery ran out n phn died. Haah yes u may thank pitbull n Enriuqe I'm blaming them cuz rite now I m in tension cuz idk how to continue lol.. Probably gonna listen to Lopez again n will come up with something

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Ankita

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Posted: 12 years ago

#105

Originally posted by: Faria12345
Ankitaaa thank u sooo much for ur comment.. Glad u enjoyed.. Even I enjoyed too u guys have no clue how many times I went back n extended each dialog or added scenes...!i wasn't gonna stop but did cuz my battery ran out n phn died. Haah yes u may thank pitbull n Enriuqe I'm blaming them cuz rite now I m in tension cuz idk how to continue lol.. Probably gonna listen to Lopez again n will come up with something

urs always welcome faria 😊 and a bada wala cmnt was needed for the super bada wala update na 😆 😆
haha i know u must be blaming them now 😛
yep u will come up with something exciting i know 😃 and do listen to lopez then may we get another super long update like this one 😃 😛

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Faria12345

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Posted: 12 years ago

#106

Originally posted by: Ankzmishra

urs always welcome faria 😊 and a bada wala cmnt was needed for the super bada wala update na 😆 😆
haha i know u must be blaming them now 😛
yep u will come up with something exciting i know 😃 and do listen to lopez then may we get another super long update like this one 😃 😛

Greedy much? Lol yah starting now lets see what I can I do :p

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Captain_Pari

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Posted: 12 years ago

#107

OMGOD twinooo ye tuhne hi likha naa 😲 ithna Lambaaa 😲 😆

Buahahahah all will think is this you? but i know aise tuhi likh sakthi hain, ur hyperness shows even in your update, and i love ur inbetween comments 😛 im like ye meri Faria hi hain, 😛 amazing as alwaysss love their banter, and the dialogue is so youuu 😛 😆 hayeee what a Hottt update lekin not hot enough 😆 😉 i know you can do better, so next time make it better 😆 acha abb update soon 😛 i hate waiting 😛 Loved ittt Twinoo muahhh your sachi main an awesome write! 😃

-Luv Pari

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Faria12345

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Posted: 12 years ago

#108

Originally posted by: Captain_Pari
OMGOD twinooo ye tuhne hi likha naa😲ithna Lambaaa😲😆

Buahahahah all will think is this you? but i know aise tuhi likh sakthi hain, ur hyperness shows even in your update, and i love ur inbetween comments😛im like ye meri Faria hi hain,😛amazing as alwaysss love their banter, and the dialogue is so youuu😛😆hayeee what a Hottt update lekin not hot enough😆😉i know you can do better, so next time make it better😆acha abb update soon😛i hate waiting😛Loved ittt Twinoo muahhh your sachi main an awesome write!😃

-Luv Pari

Thank u <3 n isse HOT psh u dream on! Lmao pagal mujhe apni sakal dekha na hai sab ko isse hot dekhaya toh :p update lol I'm being lazy! As u know I hate waiting so I don't wait to write but taking day off 15 pages likh ke dimag ki dahi hogayeee >.< next update next week or Mayb earlier or later idk.. As u know I'm way too busy Hahaha 😉 😉