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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: IronButterfly
This was fab. So beautiful. Amazing how you described their relationship. Very well written. Enjoyed reading each line.
God bless

Happy you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading :)

Originally posted by: ipkknd_gbdfan
I'm glad to see you posting your writing on IF again.

This OS is good, but when will you continue all your other stories?

Thanks for liking :) I'm working on my other fics and will probably get round to posting new chapters soon.

Originally posted by: drunkiiebabe
fabulous

Thanks!

Originally posted by: archa2810
Its kind of CUTE

Lol, thank you :)

Originally posted by: snoopy84
this was real cute loved it

Thank you !

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Posted: 12 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: dumas
awesome update beautifully done loved how they both missed each other loved their inner thoughts about each other and the feelings and the little thing that made each other their awesome beautifully done thanks for the pm

Thank you so much for liking!!

And coincidentally, that was the pic I had in mind when I was writing that part too :P

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Posted: 12 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: khushiarnav88
You're crazy, you know that?

I mean, seriously, you call this OS not-up to par? I mean, "WHAT THE...!" Smh. I just don't understand you. This was amazing!! Loved it to pieces! C'mon, woman!

Great job! I really enjoyed reading this story. Can't wait to read more. Don't fret about what happened...Take it to stride, love. We're all behind you. 👍🏼

Cheerio

I feel like a child being told off - who can't stop smiling. Thank you so much! I never really expected this OS to get such positive response, but I suppose that's because I myself was feeling so negative when I was writing/posting it :s

I am really, really thankful for your support and your wonderful, wonderful feedback! Somehow the world doesn't seem all that glum anymore :D

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Posted: 12 years ago

#54

very well written..😊

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Posted: 12 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: LondonChick
What's wrong with you. How dare you say this is not up to the mark?! That was just so perfect! It was just so perfect. Te descrption the quote at the begining it was just so beautiful.

You should check out quotes by Nicholas Sparks I am sure you will love them. Woulda posted the link to his quotes but I am on my phone so I can't.

But that was just so beautifully written. I love the bit about how Arnav would do things like shout at her but then wait up for her until she came to bed. That was my fav bit I went back to read that bit so many times. I woulda have liked that bit a 1000 times if I had the chance to!

Thank you for penning down such a beautiful OS.

Also all the best for you living alone if you have to may God give you the strength to be able to do this.

Thank you so much for the PM,
Take care,
God bless,
Jenna

Lol, I'm getting a fair share of scolding here, and call me masochist but I don't mind it at all :P I'm so glad you liked this OS so much - it makes me feel a bit guilty for being unfair to it, being so negative about it. Hard to feel negative now, after reading such wonderful comments such as yours! I am truly moved that you liked it so much :) There's something positive in life after all :D Thank you!!

And thank you also for recommending Nicholas Sparks! I've only read 'A Walk To Remember' by him, and that was ages ago, but I still remember vividly how beautiful and touching that story was...still brings tears to my eyes. I'm glad you liked the quote and will definitely check out some more of Sparks' works :)

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Posted: 12 years ago

#56

well, must say if this is the way you write when freaked out, what heights of writing you must achieve when in a calm and collected frame of mind 😛! a heart-warming os... enjoyed reading of khushi exploring a 'sleeping' arnav's body, finding similarities between his stubborn cowlick and him and of her shyness and arnav's teasing when he catches her in the act...

affording enough time only to comb back every last wayward strand clear from his forehead and then to the side with copious amounts of hair-gel... is this a comment on the look barun / arnav often sported in the show, especially toward its end?

especially loved the parts dealing with their vulnerabilities and hidden fears... sheer beauty exuded from the lines describing the smile breaking out on khushi's face at arnav's promise to spend the extended weekend with her, and the effect that smile had on arnav... the part delineating arnav's notion that he wasn't deserving of her and she might leave him some day was also moving!

hope you'll have an enjoyable time of taking the first steps into the world of independence... hopefully the bouts of panic and going berserk will lessen as you gain the confidence and the self-assurance to face whatever life has in store for you... here's wishing you all the best!

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Posted: 12 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: summaiyasayed
nice updt

thanks for pm

Thank you!

Originally posted by: ruby-red
aww that is so beautifully writen, loved it.

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

Originally posted by: kpk1002
Beautiful OS. I am sooo glad that you are back after that horrible plagiarism incident. Please keep writing😊
Thanks for the PM.

Aw that's so sweet of you :) I'm glad to be back - and it's not so easy to leave behind such wonderful folks as you ! Thanks so much for all your support - and for reading and liking this OS!

Originally posted by: distantobserver
BEAUTIFUL writing.
Absolutely beautiful. Lovely language, perfect grammar, and brilliant emotions all together.
Great job, keep it up!!

Thank you so much! Your feedback means a lot to me!

Originally posted by: 1chilly
This is poetry not prose. Lovely story. Read it twice already, it is so beautiful. It is not just a beautiful emotional OS but the way you have described Khushi looking at her husband and her emotions at that moment is lovely.

Oooh thank you so much!!! That's a really, really sweet thing to say and I'm really flattered and pleased and happy that you liked it so much!!

Originally posted by: P4rveen12
Wow just wow, this one shot was mind blowing and outstanding, written exceptionally well. Honestly from start to finish it was a beautiful read. Wow the relationship that Arnav and khushi share its just so beautiful and amazing, loved how you wrote down both there feelings and emotions in such depths, you are honestly an amazing and fabulous writer xx

Thank you, thank you, thank you!! My feet would probably leave the ground now out of happiness if that was physically possible :P I draw confidence and inspiration from readers' feedback and comments such as these completely make my day and remind me why I love writing (and Arhi of course) so much! Thank you so much!

Originally posted by: LaxshaLOVEArshi
Very interestin start ddear ! Lukin forward !

Um, I intend this to be a one-shot only ... no plans to continue, sorry :s But I'm glad you liked it :)

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Posted: 12 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: Atyay

Beautifully presented!! 👏

No matter what you think, I loved this OS. 😊

Thank you! That really means a lot to me!

Originally posted by: rashgirl000
omg. that was freaking awesome.
you deserve a huge 🤗 and 👏
thanks for the pm

Aw shucks😳

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it!! 🤗back to you!!

Originally posted by: pmohini1
this is sooo sweet and meanigful and gave me goosebumps and shivers on just how cute it was!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Aw, it's really good to hear that you felt that way! Thank you! Am so glad you liked it!

Originally posted by: gayatri_y
Beautiful...
You are one talented witter who projects the emotions excellently...

😳Thank you! I'm flattered and humbled that you think that!

Originally posted by: arshidee
wow ...!!!!!! 😲
That was an amazing OS I tell u ...!!!!
I really couldn't take my eyes off the screen while reading it... 😊
ur writings are really fascinating ...I totally loved it ...:):):)
not to forget ..thanks for the pm dea ...:):):)

I'm really, really happy you enjoyed it! Thank you so much!

Originally posted by: rskumar
beautifully written...👏

Thanks!

Originally posted by: kuts
hey,its a cute one. and ha,its lengthy enough to kill my spare time.

thankx for sharing. :)

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sweet,their love is sweet ..

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Thank you so much! You're comment is sweet too :)