Originally posted by: crazy2012
I need one help again :D
how can I describe a dead scene?
one of the lead is crushed under wheel of a bus and other is seeing it, bt can't do anything, so how can i describe the pain so that readers also can feel the pain??
thanks
Let me try -
The occasional dog barking is the only companion the humming wind has. The homeless man on the corner lights his beedi and smokes away. The empty packets of chips roll around, dancing to the music of the wind in abandon. Delhi, two in the morning.
They walk down the streets, along the pavement, unaware of their sorroundings. The wind lifts her fringes and gently lets it fall over her eyes. "Bloody hell" she mutters, impatiently tucking it behind her ear. He glances down at her smiles a small smile. It seems to him a little crazy how some habits stay. Like her habit of saying bloody hell at every insignificant little thing.
She realizes that her companion has been studying her idly. "What?" she asks, scowling. "Nothing" he replies. It begins to drizzle, monsoon announces her arrival. "Its raining" she says, the scowl now magically disappearing. "This reminds me of that scene in that movie Koi Mill Gaya ... you remember that scene?" she asks him, turning back to him.
"Of course, I can't really forget it can I? I mean after that scene like a million times just because you're bitchy enough to monopolize the TV, I don't have it in me to forget" he says, one corner of his mouth pulled down.
The rain increases her tempo. "Idhar chala mein udhar chala" he shouts suddenly, pretending to stumble around like a drunk, drunk man. From across the street, the homeless man looks up from his beedi with interest.
It is at that moment that a bus appears out of nowhere and hits him. His song is abruptly cut of with the squelching and grinding. The rain thins and the surroundings seem a blur. There is an odd sound emanating from the surroundings. She realizes it is the sobs from her chest. She crawls back to his body, squelched underneath the wheels of the now still bus. She leaves behind a trail of blood, adding her own to his. Tears, when she needs them most, do not give her solace.
There is an odd ringing in her ears. He lies, like a morbidly fascinating artwork, in a pool of blood. She tries standing up, but her knees don't give way. With the curious strength that comes with grief, she tries to pull him out of the mess. At last, she lets her shoulders fall down. She feels light. She is vaguely aware of the smell of a beedi, and dark hands on her shoulder. "Suniye madam ji" the voice says, from a place far, far away. She fights the one battle she knows she will lose and fights it with relish.
Under the starry night, she sits beside her dead husband, in his blood, waiting and watching.
A pretty rough idea of, I hope I helped!
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