ArHi FF! Gravity - Thread 1 - [Completed] - Page 51

As a preamble, I'm a lover of the elements of old school drama.

Re:Ch11 - I'm reserving judgment on this one. For now, at least.

Re:Ch 12 - I think I really liked the making of this chapter, and the portrayal of what these siblings share. Mistakes and misgivings alike. I connected so much with both the characters here, it might as well go into the list of favorite chapters from your story.

Re:Ch13 - And as a follow up to 12, let's just say I feel let down by the drafting of Shyam's predicament. Because while you'll likely get space to explore layering to his character, I'm just going to (briefly at least) lament the loss of a potential Iago... I know the sensibility of fiction of our times loves "grey" over black and white, but sometimes I just miss the sheer audacity of black and the convolution within the web of reactions it elicits. Sorry if I sound vague, I'm thinking too many texts at once saying this.

Re:Ch14 - I can suppose a very resolved bordering on objective psychology at play in the way Lavanya deals with Khushi, but there's something about the familiarity of reactionary behavior, as from the others, the absence of which in Lavanya's case bothers me some. Not in skepticism. Just, making peace with the constitution of such a character, you know? She's not "shallow to the extent of being onedimensional" as Khushi now perceives, but she's also not stoic or saintly to a fault, I like to think. I might as well admit, she's the most intriguing of characters to me at the moment, because I don't know what I expect to come across in the layout to her rationality.

Arnav and Khushi in the last half were a transient balm to the anticipation. Nothing like good old rescue mission for damsel in distress, when telling a story! ((: I did wonder though, not contend only wonder, why the title of this chapter did not include a reference to La? Yes, I did confess my bias!

Hope to be back soon for the next installment of chapter(s),
Philla

atlast some1 is trying to be kind to her:)
hope arnav hears her part of d story and give d love tat she deserves and doesnt let go of her hand forever:)
amazing update:)
update d next part soon:)

Finally they met cant wait for nxt

First sorry for late comments

Originally posted by: Philana

Re:Ch14 - I can suppose a very resolved bordering on objective psychology at play in the way Lavanya deals with Khushi, but there's something about the familiarity of reactionary behavior, as from the others, the absence of which in Lavanya's case bothers me some. Not in skepticism. Just, making peace with the constitution of such a character, you know? She's not "shallow to the extent of being onedimensional" as Khushi now perceives, but she's also not stoic or saintly to a fault, I like to think. I might as well admit, she's the most intriguing of characters to me at the moment, because I don't know what I expect to come across in the layout to her rationality.

Philla (extra 'l' wasn't expected:)), I too did not expect Khushi to be one-dimensional, though you can not ignore the character traits which are portrait. I guess we often want to see growth and change in a character but then there are times where we just don't want to learn from our mistakes. I now wonder if the author is deliberately making her character undesirable...

Your post was intriguing..

, biut

Originally posted by: RockBarbie

Thats probably the summary of the entire story. Now they just have to heal, forgive or forget and move on.
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'Just', RB? is it that easy to forgive or forget and move on?

I'm not sure if that sums up your story- it is a crucial, critical part of the story, but beyond that lies the crux of it all -- the whole moral minefield of the choices one makes or has to make and how one deals with the consequences of the chioces one makes. Then there is trust - in oneself, in the others and the relationships one has with the others.

Khushi made a choice 7 years ago and has hence made another choice now, she and the others have had to deal with the consequences of that choice and are now dealing with this current choice in the best way they can.

But has she trusted anyone or even herself in either of her choices?

You know, RB, I think your Khushi is the most complex and challenging Khushi I've ever come across, there have been one or two others, complex versions, but yours is the most challenging one of all.
She sits like a pudding in one's head, I haven't been able to get her out of my head since I first met her. I wonder if she is entirely your creation or if she writes herself, creating and evolving into the person SHE wants to be irrespective of her creator?

She reminds of me an adoloscent who knows she's been adopted and is now out to prove to her adoptive parents that they cannot love her like they would a child of their own flesh and blood- she's bent on proving herself right, so nothing they can say or do will convince her. In a way she's daring people to love and accept her after all these years and yet is bent on proving they can't, so when they just give up she can turn round and say - there, i knew it. They're damned if they do, damned if they don't. And in the process she is hurting herself and inflicting hurt on the others.


Having said that she is also happens to be the only truly 3-dimensional Khushi I've encountered in any of the FFs I've read and I have met some fantastic Khushis in the FFs I've had the pleasure of reading. And I have read plenty of stupendous FFs, but this Khushi is quite a unique creature. She has very little give, hasn't she?

You know your Khushi best, so I will totally accept that I am completely wrong in my reading of her and if my remarks are completely off the mark.

In any case, I can imagine you're going to throw the mother of all twisters when everything as we know it will swing around 360 degs, like Chapter 13 did. And all that I have said about Khushi will be a total misreading and misunderstanding, nowhere near what the truth is. So your revelations about her will probably come down like a heavy lead hammer on a house made of a pack of cards!

Whatever be the case, I will accept whatever your story gives us.


As of now, I am glad olive branches are being offered in the right spirit and being accepted, albeit hesitantly.😊

Edited by Japonica - 12 years ago

Originally posted by: -Aarya-

Philla (extra 'l' wasn't expected:)), I too did not expect Khushi to be one-dimensional, though you can not ignore the character traits which are portrait. I guess we often want to see growth and change in a character but then there are times where we just don't want to learn from our mistakes. I now wonder if the author is deliberately making her character undesirable...

Your post was intriguing..

Aarya,

No? I mean, about the extra 'l' ((: So, I was named after my father's great grandmother, and her husband - as her beau before he married her - addressed her so in some letters that came to me among other legacy. I liked it enough to take it on; think the extra 'l' adds a caress to the sound of it, don't you?!

Re: one-dimensional - oh I was talking about Khushi realizing only just that Lavanya isn't at one dimensional as she may have imagined. That on account of a drastic change of attire.

I'm not finding any characters in this story one dimensional. Categorical, sometimes, one dimensional, not really!

I hope you mean "intriguing" in a good way! ((:


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Japonica,

Thank you! I'm sure the story will continue to engage and surprise ((: I like the idea of being held up in anticipation and beat myself over the speculation of it all 😆

hi

i jus loved that road crossing too much awesomely written 😊