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Hi Elenor,

Originally posted by: Geminimanna

Hi Elenor,

Just read the update it was awesome. I really liked the way you described Virat's point of view. He thinks that possession is love and he was right in using all means to get her. He even made a bet and there was some money agains it. Now that is something which clearly depicts his definition of life. He thinks he can get love by hook or by crook. His body wanted her and his brain is busy, trying to find the reasons of her stance against him but he ignored the most important thing, HEART. How can you win someone's heart without giving your heart to them?

I wonder what will happen when Manvi find out about "The Money".

Thanx for the update and plz continue soon.

reeally interesting update ...👏
virat's point of view is stilll not clear ...
he loves her alot he is giving her enuf space understanding her
bt still sumwer kinda demandng a right over her ...

and like tht kinda flirty virat ...
those were kinda cute moments 😊

very well written again ...
and its getting interesting

update soon

Originally posted by: ElenaElenor

Thanks for liking it. I'll be happy to answer it (: The only serials I used to watch were IPKKND and EHMMB and Humsafar- I used to love them and Virman seemed really 'real' and 'fun' to write as there were only friends and I could take their stories anywhere I liked- I could put them in Uni or have an arranged marriage (possibilites) and now I can't remember the last time I watched EHMMB- after the cancer track, it just went downhill for me so now I write the Virman I wanted to see- intensity, passion, romance, struggles and comedy.

I just got to see the update...have u forgotten to pm me 😊

I loved how u point each charater pov in different parts; those part justifies em...i am lovin this os n i cant wait for tge story move ahead...manvi to fall for him

P.s
I just saw i have been deleted frm ur frnd list ...have i done something wrong

Fantastic, Fabulous..I've run out of adjectives to describe your work!!!!! This was no less.

"Virat wanted her since the first day he had seen her... he had wanted to hold her in his arms. He had imagined what it would be like to see her expressionless eyes in the throes of pleasure. He would be lying if he didn't admit to the effect she had on him... she possessed his mind and his body."

phenomenal description virat and his imagination , here in these para i was wondering she possed his mind and body...wat about his heart????

"his ego hadn't responded well to it, for his sake and hers' he had let himself a moment to think things through"

he is trying very hard to win her keeping his ego aside.


"He knew what he did was wrong. The way he had started on their relationship was wrong. He made a petty bet with his friend to ensure that she fell for him but somehow a part of him was glad about the bet. It made pursing her a challenge and he had won- she had been less hostile to him leading up to the confrontation."

i wanna know how virat do's to win bet and manvi reaction to his action.

"Whatever the reasons- he hoped that she would not find out about he had to do to make sure that she was his. If she knew about the money? 'No', his mind warned him to stop going down that road again"


wat virat used his money power to bring her in his life , i guess to her dad??


'Has she left?

he is still unsure with her actiona nd even in thoughts he adress her as his possesion

'Are you going to stay like this or are you coming to bed?' Virat asked, his hands working on the tie before he loosened it and bunched in his hand. 'What?' she asked in surprise- not sure if she heard him right. 'Bed. Are you coming to bed?'

i can imagine manvi facial expression on these lines


Manu, I am not asking you to sleep with me. I am asking you to sleep on the bed',he grinned widely as her eyes widened in shock and then registering the words-flamed anger.

i just laughed out loud hearing these lines.


i just borrowed my friends lappy to comment on ur ff and she was like me gone mad but cant help i m glued to ur writing . pls dont make me wait more update soon

avika😊😛😉
i laughed out loud when i read t

so finally that one set of my exams are over thta i can breath a little...