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Posted: 12 years ago
#91

Originally posted by: princessSonia

yaaayy di

finally u updated...
m so happy...
Manveer scenes wer so sensous...
super Hot...

hot kyun na ho akhir Uday is a hottiee... n manyata is d beautiee...
lolz i knw it was nt good...

Dadi is so sweet...
adore her for this...

tht B****Y Akash...
hate him...😡
oops sorry for the language

par kya karu akash ko dekh ke meri satak jati hai...


Thankzz Sonia first time u said something in the comment box except res 😉

Chalo you are my lil sis...forgive you for the language...and hugging you for this awesome comment 🤗

That Aryan deserves it after all !!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#92

Manveer love making was passionate & beautiful.She didsnt mind if it was only his lust bcz she cud feel comfort.But uday was rly in luv with her.Life without her is worse than death 4 him.I'm touched by his luv.

My fav lines r:

at last like a hungry lion he took out all her clothing. Her body danced with the rhythm of his love, her anklets sang like bees and she dragged him with pure affection. his body became her only cloth. Her body is covered with her wine like sweat

It's not d eroticism which struck me,but d beauty of poetry which is evident in these lines.plz don't giv a tragic ending.I want Manveer 2 b happy

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Posted: 12 years ago
#93

Originally posted by: jasminerahul

Manveer love making was passionate & beautiful.She didsnt mind if it was only his lust bcz she cud feel comfort.But uday was rly in luv with her.Life without her is worse than death 4 him.I'm touched by his luv.

My fav lines r:

at last like a hungry lion he took out all her clothing. Her body danced with the rhythm of his love, her anklets sang like bees and she dragged him with pure affection. his body became her only cloth. Her body is covered with her wine like sweat

It's not d eroticism which struck me,but d beauty of poetry which is evident in these lines.plz don't giv a tragic ending.I want Manveer 2 b happy


There are many favorite lines of my own in this story

But those you quoted I brought it from my blood...

Yes its not only erotic...for me its sacred, passion...and the passion is no less than a prayer to my God

Sorry I became bit more emotional 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
#94
awwiiee...cute update di...
awsomee...
my fevrt part
King Udayveer pinned her against the wall ignoring the fact there is presence of a third person, "Yes I am in love with you Manyata. If I can cross mountains, risk my life to spend a night with you; then Imagine what will I do in your love."

i want happy ending
happly everafter...
plzz...update soon
cnt wait for next part
thanx for PM.

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Posted: 12 years ago
#95
we want a happy ending she suffered to much to get a sad ending loved the update and one of my favorite lines were when King Udayveer pinned her against the wall ignoring the fact there is presence of a third person, "Yes I am in love with you Manyata. If I can cross mountains, risk my life to spend a night with you; then Imagine what will I do in your love." that was so beautiful loved the update thanks for the pm awesome update
Ashish KapoorPriyal Gor as Manayta in Dekha Ek KhawabAshish Kapoor and Priyal GorPriyal GorAshish Kapoor

Edited by dumas - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#96
Hi Dii ... I guess I'm the last to comment😭 ! Part 3 was superb👏👏👏!!! It was perfectly written and was an absolute treat to read.
Senapathi Aryan Rai ... Good Lord! What a character😡! But I enjoyed his part 😆, especially when General Seth gave him a splendid tongue-lashing. That was awesome. He deserved it. He spoke so rudely & dispicably to Mrinalini ji.
Mrinalini Ji turned out to be a true Dadi to Manyata😃. I loved how she sent Manyata away with the King. Then , of-course ; towards the end ... her OSCAR winning act in front of the Senapathi and the General was commendable.
Jainandini finally spoke up. I was so happy that she told of her misdeed , thus giving Dadi a chance to warn Uday & Manyata of the upcoming danger.
Lastly ... the highlight - the LOVE-MAKING ; scene was extraordinary😳.
After reading that , I have this to say :
... but apart from that ; it was also :
My favourite dialogue :
"Yes I am in love with you Manyata. If I can cross mountains, risk my life to spend a night with you; then Imagine what will I do in your love."
I will give you ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ (rating) ... for just that 2 sentences.
Loved the update,
continue soon (please)
As the other's said ...
... I ALSO WANT A HAPPY ENDING😃😳!
Thanks 4 the PM😊.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#97

Originally posted by: ...navina...

Hi Dii ... I guess I'm the last to comment😭 ! Part 3 was superb👏👏👏!!! It was perfectly written and was an absolute treat to read.

Senapathi Aryan Rai ... Good Lord! What a character😡! But I enjoyed his part 😆, especially when General Seth gave him a splendid tongue-lashing. That was awesome. He deserved it. He spoke so rudely & dispicably to Mrinalini ji.
Mrinalini Ji turned out to be a true Dadi to Manyata😃. I loved how she sent Manyata away with the King. Then , of-course ; towards the end ... her OSCAR winning act in front of the Senapathi and the General was commendable.
Jainandini finally spoke up. I was so happy that she told of her misdeed , thus giving Dadi a chance to warn Uday & Manyata of the upcoming danger.
Lastly ... the highlight - the LOVE-MAKING ; scene was extraordinary😳.
After reading that , I have this to say :
... but apart from that ; it was also :
My favourite dialogue :
"Yes I am in love with you Manyata. If I can cross mountains, risk my life to spend a night with you; then Imagine what will I do in your love."
I will give you ⭐️ (rating) ... for just that 2 sentences.
Loved the update,
continue soon (please)
As the other's said ...
... I ALSO WANT A HAPPY ENDING😃😳!
Thanks 4 the PM😊.


Awwwn thankz for that!!! 🤗 thankz for everything

But tragic queen wants a happy ending I really have to think about it!!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#98
please update the last part
please pm me
i want to know if it is a happy or sad ending can you please tell me only that much plzzz
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Posted: 12 years ago
#99

Originally posted by: annesha18

please update the last part
please pm me
i want to know if it is a happy or sad ending can you please tell me only that much plzzz


wait dear i'll update the last part soon 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: panchaali


Awwwn thankz for that!!! 🤗 thankz for everything

But tragic queen wants a happy ending I really have to think about it!!!!

You told me "my guess is faltu" when I said that this OS will have a sad ending. Which meant that I was wrong!
Now , why are u asking what type of ending we want?

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