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praj.shrish

@praj.shrish

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Posted: 12 years ago

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praj.shrish

@praj.shrish

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Posted: 12 years ago

#682

I have written a poem based on this update. Hope you would like it.

Hating You...

This is another humble day

when I have strayed away

Shining sun bid for dusk

Ashamed of my dire husk

Loving breeze came to rest

As I failed our duel quest

Fathoming me never one knew

Who found, that was you

Embarking through each crust

Taming me in lightening burst

You hallowed with divine touch

Where mortal had left not much

Endearing was never my way

The beast it is as they say

Defying you was an end stick

Alas, It's me who now drip

Unsung grief nesting in heart

Fool ,I hated you, till you dart

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I know what you people might be thinking. This was simply an exceptionally awfuler poem...I know, it is. But can't help at that as you have read it now ..Ramanchi! 😆

I am heartfully thanking my one of the closest friends in IF ,for inspiring me to write this poem, Aashi12. She is really one of gems of friends. Thank you so much Anu for helping me in unblocking my writer's block of few years (For poems). she herself writes very good poems. You can have a look at hers too...Poem

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aashi12

@aashi12

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Posted: 12 years ago

#683

Res

this must have been my lucky day!.. I mean di, your poem made me speechless!..
I read it again.. Then again.. And all i cud thnk was.. "waaaoww"..!
Potraying arnav's feelings is a herculian task! Cuz his emotions are such mechanic and his feelings are too jugdemental.. Yet you came up wid best possible words and lines..
I'm in love wid this poem!..:)

and i'm proud of myself if i helped evn a single% to remove ur writer's block.. Cuz ur brilliant!;)

and the update..! It was a beautifully written!
Arnav's anger rule his actions is what he have often seen..! But the mask behind that anger rarely slips!
Khushi cud sense his insecurity..his frustation., and his irritation wid wat all he saw!
He though nvr intended to hurt her, hurt khushi hard! All he wanted was an assurance , like a 14 yr lost kid, who's looking for home!
But his words were rude and downright insulting ! She has been trying, trying to tell him wat she wants. .! Just his heart , just the stupid organ , wich he feels is good for nothn.., all khushi wanted was his love, which he doesn't even understands!

And right there , he is again lonely, rejected and guilty!
Thats why i feel bad for him.. Feelinf things is not wat he is accustomed to, and suddenly feeling of betrayel, loss and rejection washed ovr him and he lost control!:(..

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Cute6

@Cute6

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Posted: 12 years ago

#684

res

woohhh

khushi kumari gupta going ASR way in giving a piece of her mind huh...😆😆👏

abhi asr kya karega...

poor gurl had to listen so much...

but i loved ur khushi

gave nice answer to ASR...😉

vaiting for next

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Chaitalee Ghosalkar

@Eccentrica

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Posted: 12 years ago

#685

res

This is not a good day...you ask why? I say

I'm not first

I'm not second either😭

Third???💔

I'll wallow in my grief some place else...pehle update pe concentrate karte hai..

Only after I read this update I realized that the day indeed is going to continue being bad, for the ASR in Arnav has reared up his head.

This update reminded me of the scene post Heer Ranjha performance when Arnav accused Khushi of being a gold digger. You made me detest Arnav in this chapter...kudos to you. And I must also mention that you rightfully portrayed a resilient Khushi who is not able to keep her tears back, yet does not back away from lashing at Arnav.

Although readers may not like the update owing to the pain Khushi has had to experience, I believe this chapter was important. Looking forward to how things are going to change from now on!

Beautiful poem as well!

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magss24

@magss24

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Posted: 12 years ago

#686

fabulous update...loved it...feel bad for khushi...arnav is an idiot...

coming to conclusions without listening to wat others say...how many times will he hurt her...let him suffer for some time...but pls dont separate them...waiting for the next part...

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Amiarisme

@Amiarisme

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Posted: 12 years ago

#687

what started as a sweet promising update turned in to the bitter reality check that was needed.
my only thought while he was blaming her was please khushi dnt run away in pain without explaining yourself and thank god she told him wht tht idiot needed to hear.
i hope this stupid man comes up with something gr8 to woe her.