ACP OF THE YEAR ch1 pg7 dec 11th - Page 4

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Fiza jaan you are truly amazing.. i just love everything you do 🤗 keep up the good work
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Please please

Continue soon!!!!! It was a great start!!!!! I loved it!!!!!
Please update soon!!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Sounds interesting...It's superb... Do continue soon...:)
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Waiting 4 chapter 1... upload soon!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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The concept is amazing ...
Loved it ...
Waiting to read more ...
Cont. soon ...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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finaly manage to read the update..sorryy for late Di..love the character sketch..

the first part was damn good..reminded me the fight of Rohan & Abhi of SOTY..

update the next part AsAp.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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chapter one
5 years later
in a newly furnished 3 bedroom penthouse with gated secerty near a decent neighborhood
for higher middle class

the rays of the sun hit his face he woke and saw his beautiful wife at her dressing table getting ready her hair still wet

he sat up on the bed good morning jaan he said

she looked at him through the mirror good morning jaan she said

she was fixing the back of her dori

riya jaan come here na ill help you he said

ji nahi help kam romance ziyaada hoga i'll manage she says smiling

kya jaan please come here i promise i wont worry you at all he says witha naughty sparkle in his eyes

she comes to him and he pulls heron teh bed and pins her down and kisses her

ab mera morning good hai

she blushes badmash get ready late ho ra hai ab get uo ill go get ariya ready mom ki ghar drop kar na hai na na maan na hai tumne chorne theek hai ek aur kiss do phir
ek thapper chaiye? she smiles he moves off her im onlymoving since are lil angel needs
kitne achi mama hai uski... im lucy to have teh 2 most beauitfuil woman in my life he kisses her cheek

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30 min away across towen ina posh classy hi fi area in a huge mansion with witha a beautiful gate 10 + bedrooms 3 halls, large beautiful kitchen ,a office ,libaray, entertainment room, home theater,pool
front of house
back of house

she was in her robe and had her twoel still on her hair she placed his coffee on teh side table
she opend teh towel and let the water droplets hit his face he opens his eyes

and she whispered wake up sleepy head she plays with his hair , good morning my rowdy rathore , you look even sexier when your shirtless jaan she said and leans in puts her chin on his chest and rest her head there this is my favorite alarm clock hearing your heart beat
only then i feel like my day is started she says and leans in to kiss him

haatao , move late ho re hai and what nonsense is this huh subha subah yeh romance and all huh i hate this lovey dovey crap you say every morning.

she moves away and has tears in her eyes baby i just

you just what? huh ? ek tho im already alte and my coffee beacuse of this stupid romance its all cold he complains

im sorry baby ill make another one till then get ready

no need waise you always mess up my coffee , HP HP, Tarun , itne servants hai par sab kaam chor damn it ,HP he yells

ji saab ...

kahan the huh mere liye ek coffee abhi says rathore

ji says hp

ab dehk kay re ho move

suddenly Preet crys

fiza tum mera tho theek se care nahi kar the tum kaam sa kaam humare beta ko ja ke dehko , muhje pasand nahi ki humare beta ko seravnts ki pass hota jaao
dehke ho sameer enough , say what ever you want but dont question me as a mother understood .

and haan i care for you rathore you dont care for me she says

really i do care just look at this ... yeh mansion, expensive jewels, cars servants yeh sab kya hai tere liye hi hai yeh sab

yeh sab i dont need damn it , aap kya pyaar chaiye

and haan im am a good mother and wife and thank you for this good morning

preet crys again... preet baby mama is coming she runs to his room

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outside there bedroom
madam itna care kar thi saab aur chote baba ka says champakali

haan saab itne lucky hai itne achi wife mile hai , pretty hai , she loves him, cares for him aur kay chaiye ...she does everything sab wants

rathors cell rings before he goes to teh bathroom

what the hell is it shree kya kaam hai says rathore

sir aap ne kahan tha na kabhi bhi koi info mile tho bola na

there back in town

kaun?

riya and arjun 2din phele shitf hue yahaan aur etf aaj join kar ne wale hai

what the ...they are back ...etf aaj ...ok good suno mera ek kaam kar na tum

ji sir bole

go to the marc jacobs store and ask the to pack the lastest hand bag taht they have naya style , haan pink roses 2 dozen with lillys bhi aur ek huge teddy bear jo im sorry is written on it and a crad that says sorry romantic wala and haan i want all this delivered exactly 5- to 10 min of them coming to the etf understood it should be delivered in front of them

and haan jaldi he cuts the calls

yeh sab is just to show them how happy we are to prove riya that kitne badi aglati kar liye woh uske saath shaadi kar ne ... aur abhi se fiza ki saath i should be nicer and loving warna she will know ki im doing this to show them

he goes and gets ready

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at the Rawte residences

she is ready she is wearing this

and getting her daughter ready
you look beautiful jaan nazar na lage he took kajal from the corner of her eye and
put on her behind her ear

he picked up his lil angel and kissed her mommy chale he said

she nodded

they leave to her parents house

hi papa says riya

im good my riya beti says her dad


come sit

aww give me my lil princess he takes ariya

thank you papa for keeping her with you guys jab hum kaam pe hai

no not at all mera bacha

anything for my girl he then looks at arjun annoyed

so riya beta have you moved it comfortably penthouse kaisa laga

thank you papa it is beautiful but aap kyun diye papa

haan papa sach iss ki kya zoraat thi says arjun

chup just quite zoraat? huh zoraat thi damn it meri beti ko shaadi ki waqt kuch nahi do
im a self made man id ont like all this

5 years kya diya hai meri beti ko huh ek chota say apratment ..middel class life huh
meri beti jo har din shopping kar thi thi ...barnd name designer things she use buy ...sab kuch she left kyun tere liye ...har kaam khud kar thi yeh not even a servant u can afford

papa please main apne biwi beti ko support kar sak tha hoon we are happy in our life \
i never was or am after money or living big i just want a decent happy life for my family bas
im a hard working honest guy who always trys my best to keep my family happy .samhje ya samajo

oh shut up kya samhjana hai muhje huh ...kar na tha dena tha muhje this is for my Daughter and grand daughter and taht too tere daar se meri riya didnt want a house a mansion what she was use to uski khene se i boughtthat small penthouse ...at least ab kuch stander hai ...woh cote se down marke se apartment se better jo dehli mein tha tera

papa please stop it arjun ko aap aisa nahi baat kar sak the hai

baat kar bhi kaun chata riya says her dad

jaan we are late chalo he takes her hand bye baby says riya kisses her beti they leave
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at the rathore mansion

ragu mera mooli parathe khana hai jaldi do let ho re hai

she quitely brings him his parathe and yogurt and his favorite achar
and sits down and doesnt say a word

ragu aaj parathe achi hai he says

saab madam ne aaj banaiye says ragu

he takes her hand and kisses it

she pulls her hand away

preet beta please open your mouth mama late ho re hai

good boy dehko juts alittle more left

jaan please na im

ragu main na im very bisy muhje na ek achi ma ki jaisa apne bete ko feed kar ke khud i have get ready i dont have time for this what was the owrds haan she covered her sons ears and looked at her husband this lovey dovey crap she moves her hands finshes feeding him wipes his face and picks him up and goes in the room

she gets raedy she is wearing this

he comes in she is doing her hair she parts her side bands to the left side puts her hair
in a high poney tale touches up her lipstick

there perfect she says and grabs her bag
he was watching from the door way
ready ho ? he says

she rolls her eyes haan

nahi tho kuch missing hai

kya nahi tho ? she looks in the mirror touches up her kaajal and lips fixs her hair

nothing is missing ab chalo
he grabs her hand and takes the sindoor box and fills her maang
as he fills it she closes her eyes

he kisses her forehead

she opes her eyes and moves away

chalo late hai

jaan abhi kuch missing hai he says

what is it now huh ?

your khushi your smile he whispers in her ear and kisses her neck

just stop it sameer and moves away and faces him woh tho na i lost many years back

and now you notice its missing ...typical you dont care so why this sorry drama huh everyday you do this just like every morning i do my romantic bullshit na

sach yeh hai sameer you dont love me or care for me

so please yeh sab na bas karo now lets go we are late

mom aap aagye yeh lo aap ka laadla

fiz beti kya hau sab theek hai na upset lag re ho phir se koi baa ya fight t hua kya says her mom

kab nahi hota mom late hoon preetu nani ko worry nahi karo bea good biy bye jaanu

she goes in the car

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they reach etf office

good moring boys she says
hey ms theeki says shree

dasu lag re ho says chotu
tahnk you she says and looks at the case file

shree asso yahan says rathore

kaam hogaya na ?

haan sir ek larka hai sab hai uske pass as soon as they enter with few min delivery hoge

good says rathore

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just then arjun and riya enter teh etf buliding arjun has his am around her waist

there is a sudden tension in the air

omg Riyaaa she runs to her says fiza

hey fiz says riya

how are you im good and you been so long they hug

while the men stair each other down teh girls go to there hubbys

jaan hi bolo na whispers riya

he has a mouth too muhje kyun bol na he whispers

haan jaan arjun ko greet tho karo whispers fiz

greet tho acha karoga jaan dpnt worry he says while gritting his teeth

jaan please says fiza

men still look like they will chew each other apart
any way fiz you look great but tere micro mins kahan hai says riya

hahah thanks woh hai par i dont wera that offten ma hoon ab na thoda minis longer
hai she laughs

haha oh la la your a hot mom shaadi kar kiye bache bhi wow

haan yaar aur tum tum tho shaadi kar liye na aur bache hai kya

haan ek beti aur tum


oh how sweet beti lucky you muhje bhi beti chiye thi mera ek beta hai

naam kya hai beti ka ?says fiz

ariya she says

wow pretty naam what does it mean

actually woh mera aur she stops

arjun ka naam na combined says fiz

she nods its very sweet

acha mera chor tere beta ka kya naam hai

preet she says

aww lovely name preet ya ne pyaar

haan mere aur mere husband ka preet she says
tho shaadi hui kis ke saath bolo na aur tum invite nahi kiye


suddenly 3 delivery boys enters with the things

Mrs. Rathore ki liye delivery hai

she is shocked she smiles but then is upset about the fight

wahan rako yeh sab... chotu show them

jaan dehk tho lo na itne pyaar se maine yeh sab please

she ignored him

jaan please

muhje abhi nahi dehk na hai she says

haan riya kya bol re thi

arre yeh sab chor tum aur sam wow i am so stupid of course you were fida for him

aye haye gifts and all what a way to says sorry how sweet

that i am kyun jaan says sam and puts his arm around her waist

wiase main jo bhi kar tha hoon i do it style after all tum se tho sika main riya

she looks confused
what why so confused kya style tha break karne kyun kissing behind bu back says rathore

oh hello biwi hai mere izaat se baat karo aur larki se kyun baat kar ra hai huh
talk man to man says arjun

jab kiss kya tho girlfriend thi meri aur haan ill talk man to man koi kte se nahi baat kar tha main says rathore

Rathore tu na haad cross kar ra hai says arjun

haad us din tum dono cross kiye he punches arjun

arjun socks him back
both woman have there hands on there mouth in shock

precap:

it's been so long please jaane do ...itna easy nahi hai says rathore
exactly says arjun
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jaan please maaf kar do says rathore
yeh office hai jaan and suddenly yeh sab kyun? ha? yeh show kyun?
you knew na riya and arjun are back says fiz

nahi pata tha muhje zor ka jahtka hua ahi muhje says sam

you never done this before tho aaj kyun

because i cross the line aaj subha your a great mother and wife im sorry

ab open it na

omg marc jacobs hand bag she is shocked ariya watching this
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arjun please mere dont act this way says riya
no riya just see how he eyes you tum mere biwi ho says arjun

arjun please undono ki shaadi hoge hai aisa nahi hai she says
ex boyfriend ki lawyer ho kya he says

arjun what bakwaas is this she says

sorry jaan but dehke ho nahi hi tum ko kahbhi khush rak sak nahi uske biwi ko he only is buying her his love material things se bicahri
i wont be suprised if she left him to says arjun
rathore heard this
you dog how dare you mere married life main interfere mat kar grabs his collar






Edited by Fiza28 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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ariya ki shaddi hogayi hai
,aur cute sa baby hai ariya so sweet
aur fiza aur sameer ki aur
preet usske beta hai
rathore is showing love towards fiza
because ariya r back
precap sounds intersting
continue soon

Edited by shrutisweety - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awesoem beginning...really liked d breakers in love stories...

for rathore n fiz...dey demself are at fault...i mean rathore more...
n in ariya LS...riya's dad is interrupter...!!!
very unique cncept...!!!
really liked d concept of fight ...d way dey do in office...on years after meet...!!
precap seems interestign waiting fro d part whr fiz realises n understands teh reason behind rathore's this feelings!!!
waiting fro d nwxt update..plss update soon!!!
Edited by purecure - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Wow Ariya s so romantic... Rathore😡 wats wrong with him??? i liked the way Arjun spoke to riya's dad nd Rathore... Riya's dad s rude... so our super cop understood Rathore s showing off... nice part... continue soon...

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