I OWN YOU IN EVERY WAY -2 -THE DARKER SIDE Thd 2

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sushan

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Posted: 12 years ago

#331

i would prefer first option

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KSG_luv

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Posted: 12 years ago

#332

Awesome go with your original plot as it'll b something new for us 😃

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mon4u

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Posted: 12 years ago

#333

1st one is fine. Don't make it too dark yaar. Feeling very bad for Khushi.

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TheoryPerson

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Posted: 12 years ago

#334

I dont mean this in any gutter mind way, but I think you should continue the plot as planned. I guess it makes it a lot more interesting than what would normally be expected which in this case is Arnav not "getting to 2nd base" 😉

Loving this FF a whoollee lot so please dont deprive us of updates for too long... 😛

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ss2012

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Posted: 12 years ago

#335

Option 1. You are right track.

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known

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Posted: 12 years ago

#336

pls cont with ur concept sound amazing

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prerna.sharma

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Posted: 12 years ago

#337

Hi Madhu,

According to me, i think you should go with the first option, where she submits herself to Arnav with any protests and they complete the act for her father's sake.

so for me,its the 1st option:)

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Avani

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Posted: 12 years ago

#338

Originally posted by: ak_maggi
first one ofcourse... if LOVE happens between them anyday. we wil not be able respect Arnav if he forces her n does IT... she shudnt react to watever he does ( wel this too is equally worse but not R**e)...she must act like some non living thing... no emotions...even if he does it he shud feel dat vacuum of not having her coz itsjust her body not her!

all her emotions shud be reserved to others minus him... i want him to know d difference bn lusting someone n loving someone...

n i dint like Akash commenting Khushi or any girl having sex for money is cheap! dude ur so called BHai does it... oly bcz he doesnt force some1 doesnt make him any less cheaper!!

Second bold part: Akash is basically a spineless person. being judgmental and taking his brothers words inspite of knowing his brother is a casanova...n seeing ther girl (khushi) gave him a very different first impression.

First bold part... Thats the exact thing i've been getting at. How in the world is any girl supposed to respect a person who forced her??? the point is not that she herself submitted to IT (this only happend due to her own helplessness). How will she ever find a way in her heart for forgive this person EVER???

That said, ...love this next comment.

Originally posted by: dumas
go with the first one i too don't want to see her get rape asr redemption will be a bitch when is starts know she had no choice to submit which will be like rape with out the violence

Regadless of which way u decide to go, Madhu, it is ur story n i m a mere reader. Pls do not change or decide to amend the plot on readers account. U are a very talented writer...n honestly i have yet to come across material u write that is meaningless. Evey action or monolgue or even movement has a reason.

My only concern with either plots is, Khushi's point of view. I've read a few stories which again are dark in which i've seen Khushi being treated like a scrap goat. Literally taken by force and yet fall for the beast and runs to him for help. That shows no self respects for a character. N we all know Khushi is very dignified and old self respect to high esteems. So my only request would be, pls b4 showing her falling for him or even anything like that...take all this into consideration.

I highly recomend u to go ahead with ur original plot (not sure which one it is) and continue the story how u perceieved it.

Again, if i were to say something it would only be because of how a particular chapter made me feel and being in Khushi's shoes how it would make me feel. In now way i intend to bash ur writing or ur story telling way. I shall only voice my opinion as an ardent reader.

Incase u felt bad then pls do let me know n i shall refrain myself from commenting on the forum and will continue with sending u pms.

Sorry for the long comment.

Edited by highonshows - 12 years ago