Res for SwaRon os...
Nivi 🤗 What do i say about this swaron os... well first of all you made me read two os in a day that to one of kriyansh which i already have commented and second one SwaRon which is just beyond all my expectations...I think you would have now understood what i want to say or i mean by this...
Actually while writing comment on Kriyansh one thing was in my head that this is an outstanding stuff and just after than I read SwaRon OS and what do I say you made me think now which one to call better...so here you go, i give up i cannot say which work was better than other...so i liked them both equally...
Now coming back to the SwaRon os you choose a concept which was provided by Savage aka Kankshita who is considered and is one of the best when it comes to writing so it was a tough ask to pull first of all but i read her comment and she was more than pleased with this effort that means you struck the goal here...all the praises are surely going come to you...and as i told you i am not an arts student who knows english so well... i am Chartered Accountancy Student and can understand numbers more than words 😆😆😆 ... anyways but the thing is the english language that you use is just on another level dear... i mean its a level where Kankshita, Nidhi, Sudha and all greats write so you are up in that league for sure...👍🏼
First thing that struck my eye was the title "FLUCTUATING ARDORS" which i guess mean that variable emotions of true instense love... so my eyes like glued up and i was expecting a serious intense story...i had had a mind set of that...
But My God it turned out to be a real entertainers which kept a 230 watts smile on my face trough out... i was into the story indulge like never before... i really didnt her anysound around me during the 20 minutes i read this os...actually my water pump in the tank was on and water was actually flowing out of my house and my neighbour literly riped my head of being so careless and wasting this much water...but i really had no idea what was going on in that 20 minutes because i was totally into this os and enjoying it...
The OS started of with The Diva Sharon Rai Prakash was in her Volcano mood and which was a danger sign to all... and they were waiting for swayam ( who was late as much unreal to swayam but in the story the prince charming is under a heat now 😉) and sharon was shown almost ready to punch off his head... and rest thing rey and kriya completed by asking her about what made her angry... well actualy apart from volcano stuff i liked the idea of celebrating navratri... are you a gujju by any chance because ye navratri ka idea bapu ek gujarati ne avi sake...
Anyways swayam came and you described the entry beautifully, i guess most of the girls would have gone in to a short trip to dreamland to check out how swayam would be looking 😉...
He came and was confidant that he would handle his volcano ( it nice that he is boyfriend but overconfidance now was not good for his health was my thought while reading this)...and you have made him look like a charmer in the os...
After that you let go events very smothly where the meeting was going on and swayam smartly conveying sharon via text message that he wanted to meet her...that was a smart swayamish trick.. and than their point of meeting was also very nicely covered up how swayam came from behind and knew this could only be sharon...it was just perfect..bingo is the word for that description...
After that a swaron convo or say sharon upset and swayam trying to convince her...and in the process swayam actually managed to ask her for a date awesome way actually to bring this date proposal...i liked this part personally...
And than sharon's confusion for dress was sweetly shown and mean while you gave us a glimpse of KriYam convo which is hardly available to read in many works...so i enjoyed KriYam convo...KriYam are actually most under rated friends but they have a repo of friendship that was equal to ShaRey in spite of the fact that ShaRey were childhood friends..
After all things finally sharon got ready in gown and than tubelight realised that she can not sit with gown in cycle 😆😆 it was really funny yar... and swayam as always manged to strike out her thoughts by surprising her with a luxorious car he brought... and than that swayam adjective to sharon was just out of the world it made me laugh like hell...
Finally Date Spot came... i wish there was much description provided about the place but whatever provided was also cool.. here also a cute SwaRon talk was going on... Swayam was doing all sweet things for sharon and was making me very happy...than suddenly a twist came...
Man Swayam just managed to give her shock of lifetime... and i can relate to sharon there as how she reacted to that... i mean anyone who loved so deeply any person would react like that only..
But than came this swayam proposal which was just out of the world...it was most shocking yet most happening proposals i have ever seen in my life... thumbs up for coming up with such an brilliant and creative proposal... i was just not able to control smile reading that proposal... it was so sweet yet so adoring how i wish i was a girl and someone propose me like that...
just amazing how sharon was happily reacting to proposal, the I LOVE YOU exchanged between them and kiss was just awesome.. the kissing sequence was just a perfect way to end the os... and it was the moment of the OS... that really summed up an one of the most outstanding works SwaRon I have read here on this forum... though i am not that popular that i have read all the SwaRon works ofcourse not i am just saying that whatever i have read this is one of the best...
Amazing Work Nivi...👏👏👏👏👏👏👏 spledid job you have created a magic with this story for sure...
Thanks for PM...
Pratik...
P.S, SSShhh finally did commenting on both of the OS...now i am actually inactive this days as my CA Final exams are approaching now.. so i will be back and active from 19th November.. so what ever works i have failed to comment on will do it on 19th of november for sure... and ya both the OS were splendidly written there was nothing to critisise actually... or i can say that you not left a place for me to critic any thing...bow down to you...
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