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Posted: 12 years ago
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thank you all for your comments and likes...they encourage me a lot...and before writing the update let me tell you the next update will be really late'this is because Durga Puja is here and then im going on a holiday'so it will not be possible for me to post the update'sorry in advance!!!so here goes the second part...hope you guys like it!!

Lost In Love

Part 2

As she opened her eyes she could see Rey's face in front of her. He was smiling at her. But then suddenly his face disappeared and everything went black again. Suddenly flashes of all her memories started to appear in front of her-the day she met Rey at kindergarten, their first fight over the swing in the park, the first time they shared their lunch, the first time they danced together, the first time they went to a pub and got sloshed, the first time she attended prom with Rey by her side. Then everything went black again. She could hear Rey's voice calling out her name from somewhere very far. But gradually his voice came closer.

"Sharon, please open your eyes. Sharon!"

Sharon opened her eyes ad saw Rey sitting in front of her. He was looking kindly at her."Hey, Sharon, what happened? Why did you faint all of a sudden? Are you feeling okay now? Do you want me to get something for you?" asked Rey in a concerned manner. Sharon saw she was in her room lying on her own bed. And Rey was sitting just next to her. Gradually things started to clear out. Rey had introduced her to his girlfriend Kria at the airport and then she has fainted. What happened after that?

Rey saw that his friend was confused. She looked so cute when she was confused.

Rey: Hey, Sharon, don't be confused! We got you home from the airport.

Sharon: We? As in you and Kria?

Rey: Yeah, and'

Sharon: and who else? Someone else was there too?

Rey: Yeah, he was the one who picked you up from the car and got you in your bed.

Sharon (suddenly loosing her temper): Rey, you let someone else pick me up? You let someone else touch me? I just don't believe this! First, you stop keeping in touch with me and then suddenly appear in front of me with a weird girl calling her your girlfriend! And now this! What is wrong with you?

Rey: Relax Sharon. He is not a 'somebody'. And Kria is definitely not weird. And hey remember you are talking about my girlfriend, so watch it. Sharon. She is the sweetest girl ever! You will understand once you get to know her. And about me not keeping in touch, I am sorry Sharon. I had just realized that I was in love and wanted to devote all my time to Kria at the moment. I hope you understand. Come on Sharon, say something now.

Sharon: What am I supposed to say? You got into a relationship, that too the first relationship of your life, without letting me knows. Earlier you used to date a lot of girls but you never got into a relationship. And how much do you know this girl, what's her name, yeah Kria? Not even two months, right?

Rey: That's true but I have known her enough to fall in love with her! Sharon sometimes you just know its right. Kria is the right girl for me.

Sharon: Really? She lives in New York. I thought you never believed in long distance relationships!

Rey: Kria is shifting to India along with her family. She is joining our college too.

Sharon: What? Why? Nooo! Rey, please Kria cannot be your girlfriend!

Rey: But why?

Sharon: Because I am saying so.

Rey: But the fact is she IS my girlfriend!

Sharon: Nooo!

Rey (mockingly): Somebody is jealous!

Sharon: No I am not!

Rey: Maybe its just that you have fallen for me which is why you are jealous. Is it so Sharon? Tell na, tell!(He kept on poking and tickling Sharon)

Sharon: Stop it Rey!

(rey let go off Sharon)

Rey: Fine chod raha hoon. Tum bhi kya yaad rakhoge! Now get ready, we are going out for dinner. I am waiting for you downstairs. And no, you have to come! I am not listening to you!!

Saying this he ran out of the room leaving a dumbstruck Sharon behind. Rey's words kept on repeating themselves in her mind. "maybe its just that you have fallen for me which is why you are jealous." She closed her eyes to compose her troubled mind.

"Yes, I have fallen for you. I love you Rey. I have loved you since the first day I met you at the kindergarten. Why did you do this to me? We have always shared our 'first times' together. So just like you are the first person I fell in love with, why couldn't I be the first person you fell in love with? Why? How could you do this? How could you fall for Kria leaving me behind all alone? This is so not fair! You forgot all about me? Am I just another friend for you? Did you never feel for me, even for a moment?" Sharon questioned. She couldn't control her tears. Today when she heard Rey addressing Kria as his girlfriend, it felt as if her world was in the edge of death. She had lost control of her body. She had fallen. She was totally lost now. It seemed as if her world had become a new strange place, where she did not fit in.

Her string of thoughts was made to stop when her phone beeped suddenly. She picked it up and saw the message-

"Miss Rai Prakash, how much time do you take to get ready? If you don't come down within 15 minutes, I will leave.

-Rey"

That was the first time Sharon took just 10 minutes to dress up.

Precap:

'But Sharon kept sitting totally awestruck by this Greek God.

Kria: Sharon, meet Swayam, Swayam Shekhawat. My best buddy'

So how was this update?I hope you people liked it. I am eagerly waiting for your likes and comments! And for pms please buddy me up!😊

Edited by idiot_box - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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i'm sooo happy dat i'm commenting first yaar kabhi kabhi hi esa hota k kisi ko sabse pehle ye wish karne ko mile sooo i'm so happy for dat🥳


hey amrita so sweet update yaar & jisne use uthaya wo ladka swaym k alava or koi ho hi nai sakta so happy swayam ka entry ho hi gaya😃😃 hope ye sharon ka hook ya crook wala nature rey & kriya k life me jyada probs creat na kre knyu ki thode to hone hi chahiye😛😉

& hope ye swaron jaldi se sath ho jaye & inka story bhi abb kouch alag se hi start hoga soo waiting for dat & plz ye sharon ko rey se pyar he ye MU jaldi short out kar lena

Thank u so much for PM😃
Edited by beeny - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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WOW...Amyyy...loved the update...it was just AWESOME...i loved the way u build foundation for SWARON ...she loves Rey...Rey loves kria...she is in pain..she is jealous ...she is sad..as she couldn't complete her 1st love...could feel her pain...through ur words...Loved SHAREY convo...HE is the one who carried her to home...she didn't like the fact of a stranger touching her...she is going to crave for his touch one day...m sure...Rey was as usual like a cool breeze...i hope he will play cupid here...for his best friend... loved the precap...dieing to read further...the GREEK GOD enters ...WOW...plz plz update soon😊
Edited by dips098 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#74
Loved the character sketch :DAwesome update amrita !!
describtion what sharon is feeling knowing that her best friend she has fallen for has a new girlfriend was very well written.
eager to read abt sharon and swayam first meet .
will be waiting for the next part , update soon..
thanks for the PM.
Posted: 12 years ago
#75
Sorry I am late 😭

It was simply fab

I loved the way u described the convo

I liked the fact that he love only kriya


Waiting 4 the next part

As Swaron will meet 😳


I love u for this update

Update soon
Edited by enrique - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
#76

Originally posted by: enrique

Sorry I am late 😭

it's okay hai ji!😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Beautifulll update, yaar aw sharon is in love with Rey, well it is just infatuation hogi, when she sees the real hero of her heart she will rethink everything. I am so glad it was swayam who brought her back home and carried her to the room. Def Swayam is a greek god, with his sharp nose and supersweet smile Hope she falls head over heels in love with him and forget Rey. Well yaar it is one mast update, you are a mindblowing writer, thanks and update fast dear😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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AWESUME . . . AWWW POOR SHARON SHE THNKS SHE LOVES REY BECOZ SHE DIDN'T KNW WHAT IS TRUE LOVE. . WAITING FR D NXT PART SWARON MEET
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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice concept!
really loved it!
waiting for the swaron meet eagerly!!!
plzzz update soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey Rasmalai I am so sorry I was not able to read the character sketch and first update when you had posted but as you know i am not active this days so it took some time to read and comment and i hope tu muje maaf kar degi...dekh main janta hu tu Rasmalai jaisi mithi hi hai to maaf to karna hi padega and bengali logo ko gussa nahi karna hota aisa rule hai..heheheh (muje bhi nahi pata sach me aisa koi rule hai ya nahi) so I have read character sketch and both the updates in one go...
So first of all outstanding character sketch the are close to orginal character yet there is amy touch to them so i loved this character sketch and now i have high hope from you for the story and from the two updates i have read it seems like i should hope for even more now...
You are an outstanding writer amy my rasmalai girl...the way you began update with sharon getting ready and in good mood...from the way you described her reason to be so much happy...well there only i thought this girl is in love with Rey??? or its just the best friend thing shown to much seriously??? but anyways rey came and gave her shock by introducing her girlfriend and man the shock was really hard for sharon to bare with and she fainted...how can you stop at such an cliff hanger there amy???
Thank god second update already posted tha so utna struggle nahi karna pada...ye you finally revealed here that sharon felt jealous about that she actually explained it to rey...but Rey was in no mood to take that all seriously and he still seemed to be joking...but sharon was damm serious she was jealous of Rey and Kriya relationship and was totally shocked that kriya was getting transfered to india and joining their college only...well this took sharon to another thinking world where she confessed that she loved Rey from childhood when they met...and it was beautifully writen that self confession part...and than a msg came from rey which made her get ready in 10 minutes for the first time in life...
abhi tum soch rahi hogi maine abhi tak swayam kyu nahi aaya vo kyu nahi pucha...well swayam actually update mein aa chuka hai but abhi introduce nahi hua hai right??? usine sharon ko uthaya hua tha na jo rey ne use bola and sharon actually barked Rey for letting somebody else touch her...
and Whats that again hold on to a cliff hanger???? how could you do that???/ uparse madam ne bola hua hai durga pooja hai so no updates...thats really not fair uparse ek confusing teaser de diya which is suggesting that finally swayam introduce hoga...
Thanks for the PM...do update super soon...
Pratik

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