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Rose

@--Rose--

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#11

Wowww Its a very BEAUTIFUL story dear:-):-):-):-) Sammy and Shona:-) awww so cute:-):-):-)

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Shishir Darsh

@marauder

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#12

At first when the OS began I thought it would be based on some film's story. But I liked the twist you gave to it and how you have woven the story into the story of Swayam and Sharon as we know in the show. The whole effect nothing sort of magical and the whole SwaRon story seems much more epic and grand. Brilliantly done.

There were many brilliant moments. But for me the two which shines out was I liked how Sharon brings out the topic of Sammy to Swayam. I liked the honesty which you have shown in their relationship. And the entire portion was written just beautifully. Moreover the earlier childhood portion even though small has established the bond of SwaRon nicley. So the entire portion seems even more awesome and sweet and pleasnant to read. And moreover it also justifies Sharon's character. So a double bonanza for the readers.

And the next portion which was standout for me was the way Swayam finally revealed the truth. It was indeed beautfiully done. And was seriously emotionally rich portion of the updae. Seriously loved that portion. Well but these all apart all the update was also just magnificient and the last paragraph just romantic in an awesome way. Overall another fantastic work.

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Aruba

@sweetcherry95

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#13

superb os

beautifully portrayed

loved it when sharon disclose about her inner feeling regarding her childhood

Edited by sweetcherry95 - 12 years ago

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Satnam

@Satluvsd3

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#14

wooowww dips you are an awesome writer actually didnt hace time in the start but then i made time and read it was wonderful...😉
will read your other works after exams
but truly it was awesome!my eyes were moist when he showed her everything n when finally declared that he's her SAMMY!!
nice job!!👏
keep writing!!

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Snowey

@Snowey

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#15

Deeps super awesome OS.

Starting form the childhood memories to the present day SwaRon conversation it was a pleasure read. Sharon not holding back anything and telling Swayam everything and how he finally reveals the truth to her was very emotional and nicely written. The ending was amazing to say the least.

Thanks for the PM.

P.S - love the pic that u added :)

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Phantasm

@Phantasm

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#16

A sweet OS Deepika!!

Aww on Sharon and Swayam both remembering each other as Shona and Samy. So cute.

I loved the flow of this update, from Sharon confessing her love to Swayam(which is a rare thing😳) but still feeling guilty of betraying her Samy. Little did she know that Samy was her Swayam.😳

The last bit was again awesome.

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Meera

@MirageSwaron

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

This was beautiful as ever Deep...sorry for late response.

It was a nice pleasant read and traced the depth of the feeling they mutually shared, at least u showed Sharon and Swayam as equals in terms of teh luv they held for each other...the developments in their lives since they seperated as childhood sweethearts was relatable, and most imp this OS did not play a blame game or victimize Sharon's nature...it gave a deeper understanding to the reason why she was teh way she was and thats what i luvd most abt it...thanx for teh pm

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tanuka

@Tanuka_TanHa

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#18

EDITED 😃

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pooja123456

@pooja123456

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#19

wowww...amazing update!!!!!
do write more fanfictions
thanks for the pm!!

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Himani

@OceanicRockStar

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#20

di awesome os yaar...tell me one thing from whr you get all these amazing concepts...wow just wow...sharon revealing her first love to swayum...than swayum revealed her that he is her sammy with those pics in that room...luvd it di...you beautifully shown their journey of love fron innocence to passionate one...thanks for the pm di...and sry for being late...