OS: Apshakun (Ill-Fated One) WRITER's NOTE PG 15

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DMGFan-2b-not2b

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Posted: 13 years ago

#111

I'd like to think that they've just kissed but knowing Hidi serials, an innocence lost, jilted at the alter, pregnant with the man's child, left to fend for herself, object of people's taunts Khushi is what makes a serial sell right? So thats what you'll get! Well hopeully not, though I dont really see the purpoe of showing this unless thats the intended track.

Honest to God if ASR wins over Arnav, Khushi should walk away from him forever, because there are some things that are just unforgivable! Alas this is a Hindi serial, theheroine will pine, suffer and then melt in a puddle of goo the moment the man cocks a finger! GAh!

If I thought ASR was an unforgivable ass for how he treated Khushi immediately after the wedding, if the above scenario happens, then I dont think even an anti-hero would be an apt description!

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trivedishraddha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#112

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you made me cry. .it was Damm touching. . .am still not able to move . .
plz continue and give it a happy end if you can. .i would love to read more from you. .
plz plz plz do pm me if you continue.. .
Shraddha.. .

Edited by trivedishraddha - 13 years ago

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urm21

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Posted: 13 years ago

#113

brilliantly written, very moving. please sent me updates or any new story. thanks

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Anamika100

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Posted: 13 years ago

#114

What the...whatever made you write before even the episode about possible consummation aired? Are you clairvoyant or what?

The sheer agony that I felt from this scenario can not be described. I just want to reach across and take that poor girl in my arms and comfort her. As the fire in the Havana kind was snuffed out, her life became an arid wasteland and you communicated that so brilliantly. Wow.

Edited by Anamika100 - 13 years ago

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Satina

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Posted: 13 years ago

#115

nice job! thanks for the pm!

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nermic

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Posted: 13 years ago

#116

You made me cry. Really hope nothing like that happens in the show. But you deserve a thumbs up for writing so well.

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neverbefore

@neverbefore

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Posted: 13 years ago

#117

That was utterly desolate. 😭 In fact, I'm a bit traumatised by it! How could he do that to her?!!!! 😡

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Vindhy

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Posted: 13 years ago

#118

Oh My!!! that left me with a lump in my throat... in the depths of despair...! cleverly written!

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Anon

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Posted: 13 years ago

#119

This was ... amazing. Absolutely bloody AMAZING.

That one word imprisoned her for the relatively short remainder of her life - just that ONE word, that initially the wedding guest who was "not a particularly important person" had uttered stuck solidly, maligning her entire future.

A beautiful depiction of her isolation and desolation, I truly applaud you for writing this OS.

Although sad, it was better that neither child nor mother survived - there would have only been hardships that they'd endure, with that one word stigmatising them wherever they go. Like you so beautifully wrote: "The girl ... was bearing a child who no-one would bear" and that would have been a truly sorry existence.

And once again, that hideous word followed her right until her last breath; although there was no malicious intent behind Sister Beth saying the word, it still represented a world of rejection and sadness for Khushi, even as she was breathing her last.

But I'm glad, so so SO glad that she seemed like she finally found peace as she died - "... heard her hoarse voice call out a greeting to a mother and to a father who were not there". Finally, she can simply be without restraints, without judgement.

And I'm really glad that HE found out that she had died - I really hope he repents and writhes with the guilt that he should be feeling. There's absolutely no justification for what he did. She LOVED him and that's how he repaid her. Hmpfh.

I KNOW this will not happen in the show as it's been clearly shown that the CV's simply cannot depict something this poignant. Sad, but true.

Once again, an absolutely fantastic piece of writing 👏

Edited by MsIPKKNDManic - 13 years ago