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Posted: 13 years ago



ohh dont worry is ff k updates quick hongay
humain itna maza araha hai likhny mein k hum 15 chpaters likh chuky hain

kal nhi per parsoo zaroor update keray ga...

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Posted: 13 years ago
amazing part
the past is nice
not liking nupurs mom

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Posted: 13 years ago
HEY FIZA!!😊
THE TITLE OF DIS FF IS ATTARCTIVE N SEEMS APT TO THE PARTS WRITTEN!!!👍🏼
THE 3 PARTS WRITTEN ARE A PERFECT BLEND OF WONDERFUL URDU ALFAAZ N MYSTICAL RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN ALL D CHARACTERS!!!👏
LOVED D WAY MAYANK,SAMRAT N MAYANK'S MOM ARE SO CARING PROTECTIVE ABOUT NUPUR!!!❤️WAITING TO KNOW D REASON FOR NUPUR BEING IN COMA AT PRESENT!!!😲
CONTINUE SOON!!!
PLEASE PM NEXT TIME
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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: kirti123

amazing part

the past is nice
not liking nupurs mom



thanks kirti
glad u liked it
i know her mom is pain... n i hope nupur can find her ways

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Mini4

HEY FIZA!!😊

THE TITLE OF DIS FF IS ATTARCTIVE N SEEMS APT TO THE PARTS WRITTEN!!!👍🏼
THE 3 PARTS WRITTEN ARE A PERFECT BLEND OF WONDERFUL URDU ALFAAZ N MYSTICAL RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN ALL D CHARACTERS!!!👏
LOVED D WAY MAYANK,SAMRAT N MAYANK'S MOM ARE SO CARING PROTECTIVE ABOUT NUPUR!!!❤️WAITING TO KNOW D REASON FOR NUPUR BEING IN COMA AT PRESENT!!!😲
CONTINUE SOON!!!
PLEASE PM NEXT TIME




Hey Mini..
thank u so much for liking it and appreciating the story...
hm so u too is a fan of urdu and thats gr8
thank u so much i hope u continue to enjoy the story further... and nupur isn't in coma she is just unconscious

welcum to my writings

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Posted: 13 years ago

Addab…

Great to see u all are enjoying this ff reading as much as I am enjoying it writing somehow….

A slight correction Nupur isn't in coma she is un conscious…

Any kinda criticism is welcum, plus I have a request for all the readers and writers pls check ur ffs for the plagiarism …. As these days its going to much here even on forum…

So put lines few line of ur ff n google them and check random lines for it… cause shockingly BYLM I found zerox in Bidai forum… so do check…

And new readers Welcome here…

Rpld to u all

Hope u enjoy this

Edited by drfizaahmed - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago

Chapter: 4

Past:

It was the day of picnic and Samrat went to university to join the class.. mayank n nupur had a different plan .. actually mayank has…

Shilpa: ap dono tu university jany walay tha na

Mayank: han bus jarahy hain.. nupur kaha hai..

Shilpa: room mein…

Mayank: ok hum dekhtay hain….

Nupurr…

Nupur: han ajao …

Mayank: he dropped himself on her bed… so kaha jana hai…

Nupur: kahin bhi… per ami k kya hoga…

He glared at her and she was

Nupur: acha nah… chalo ab jaldi… utho… mayank…. abi thik kiya tha mein ny bed mayank

He turned left n right more and spoil the bed sheet more…

Nupur: maaynkkk

Mayank: chalo… ab acha lag raha hai nah bed.. altesst pata chalta hai k is room mein us ko koi ismtaml kerta hai..wah.. buhat khub

……

Nupur: mayank mjhy thori dair k liyan mall jana hai

Mayank: no no… hum shoping nhi jarahy not at all

Nupur: aray bus ek shop promise…

Mayank: kyun

Nupur: chotay baba k liyan kuch tu lo nah…

Mayank: hmm… per mein ny tu baba k liyan kcuh nhi liya

Nupur: mayank tum bhool gay… un ki birthday hai…

Mayank: oh freak… phir tu mall jana hi paray ga… per mein lo ga kya…tum ny kya socha hai.he said with a grin

Nupur: no way hum nhi bata rahy kya socha hai.. woh tum lay lo gay aur pir hum ko dobara sochna apray ga

Mayank: koi baat nhi.. tum kareed loo hum tumharay hath se lay lay gay…

Nupur: huh…

Reaching there favorite place they were sitting on beside the shores…this was a place most of the time he is found.. and whenever they go out she do instead to sit her for sumtime…

Nupur: kya ker rahy hoo

Mayank: Samrat ko tang.. dekho zara janb itny busy hain k aday adhay jawab arahy hain

Nupur: chukled.. Samrat gunjan k baray mein serious hai nah

Mayank: hm… mjhy bhi lagta hai

Nupur: sigh.. ami k kya hoga

Mayank: nupur tum is daar se kab bahar nikalo gi.. yeah jantay hoay bhi k tum jo kuch bhi kro gi us mein hum sab tumhara sath day gay.. aur yeah bhi k tai jan galat hain phir bhi.. yeah ek saal university k tum ny daar daar k guzar diya.. kitna kcuh socha tha tum ny.. yeah kero gi woh kero gi…. Ek bar bhi kuch nhi kiya… asay kasay chaly ga

Nupur: mjhy pata hai tum thik ho… per pata nhi mein chaho bhi tu mjhy se nhi hota… mein khosih kerti hoon magar bus…lar nhi pati….

Mayank: kal ko tumharay sath kuch buhat galat bhi hosakta hai…

Nupur: she frowned aur tum sab hony do gay

Mayank: aur mein us waqt nhi hua tu….

Nupur: kyun tum kaha jaoo gay…

Mayank: mein US chala gaya tu….

Nupur: tum log sach mein US shift hojao ga…. Yaha se chaly jai gay….

Mayank: jao..

Nupur: mar nhi dalo gi tumko aagr tum yaha se gay..

Mayank: yeah… yeah tareqay agar tai jan k sath kyun nhi.. itni batemezi se nhi per thora tu..

Nupur: hum aj pls is per baat na kerain…

Mayank: han date per asi baatein kaun kerta hai.. phir kya bolo.. he leaned to her….

Nupur: KYA…. Tum pagal hogay ho… mein pani k taraf jarahi hoon bye…

He giggled and stood up to… reached there beside her

Nupur: tum ko pata hai aj mein koi 8 months baad aakely kahin bahar aii hoon.. apni marzi se..kitna acha lagta hai…

Mayank: hmm….wasy mein bhi kafi din baad aya hoon….

Chalo..mjhy bhook lag rahi lunch kertay hai phir dad k liyan gifts bhi layny hai…

Nupur: thik hai.. per hum meri choice k restaurant jay gay… aur aj hum Italian try keray gay

Mayank: tum ko Mubarak ho tumhara saap aur aur woh smelly cheese… hum tu apan desi khana khany wala hoon…

Nupur: ek sath dono chesay kasay mil gi..

Mayank: milay gi… ap chalein tu …

The reach the food court of the mall.. and was standing near the counter waiting for there food …. When nupurs eyes fall on a couple siting in the corner..quite intimately… the boy was touching her hand was whispering sumthing in her ear… and she was acting if it was doing waoo on her… any one can see there here just to have fun.. nupur tap on mayanks shoulder and he turn to her in what… she pointed to the couple through her eyes and he raised his eyes brow looking at them and then grin looking at nupur… soon there food arrived and they deliberately took the seat behind them…

Mayank: aj tu buhat maza any wala…

Nupur: in ki aj pata chaly ga public place mein asa kerny k natija..

They were having there food but there ear were completely on the couple..and they were in complete mood of having there entertainment from them…

Boy: tum khabi bhi meri feelings ko nhi dkehti janu..feel tu dekho

There were such an EU couple and the way they were saying all this was making it more yuck

Both of them bit there lips at " janu"

Girl: kasi baatein ker rahy hain ..tum ko dekh ker aur kuch yaad hi kaha rehta hai

Mayank: wah.. wah.. loog pyar ki ghari mein doob ker maar rahy hai aur tum mjhy k kahti hoo sharm se maar jao.. nupur aj kal k zamana asa nhi hai…

Nupur: had kertay hain ap.. apko tu is waqt meri baatien aur ankhon mein kho jaan chaiy tha.. aur ap.. Sharma mein dobay hoay hain….

(Those who know shabnam the old paksiatni actress just imagine nupur saying like that.. n for those who not.. she is saying pretyy in like old actress style.. panting and flickering her eyes………)

The couple do abit alarmed ..did he was saying sumthing on them but ignored it and continue with there talks

Boy: tumko pata hai jab bhi mein tum ko dekhta hoon

Mayank: tu mjhy asa lagta hai k cutis ki field mein goobi k phool khela hai

Nupur: ahhy haay mayankk tumko mein goobi k phool dekhti hoon..yeah sunay se pehly meray kaan path kyun nhi gay… ya khuda and she close her ear with her hand

Mayank: dekho… tum goobi per maat jao feel important hai.. soch cutis ki field mein koi kam chees ugay gi tu ..achi hi baat hogi nah… phool k size ko maat dekho feel k size ko dkeho…

Nupur: how sweet ….tum mjhy ab k birthday per goobi k guldasta (bouquet) dayna..

The couple was like what the.. what kinda a talks are this…

Mayank: done januuu…

Girl: rahany do…itna sa tu kam nhi ker sakty tum mera… she was playing with his fingers.. and he removed her hairs..

Boy: aray tum kaho tu jan day dain

Mayank: chalti hoi train ko ruk ker us mein se ghood jay….

Nupur: tu kya faida.. maro gay thori

Mayank: nupur feel dekho… mein ghoda tu nah.. aur yeah kya tum chahti hoon mein jaan day doon.. tumhain meri feelings ki bulkily bhi qaDAR NHI hai…yaha mein dosty se pasay udahr (mang) lay ker… itnay boldly logo k beech bhait ker romance kerny ki khosih ker raha hoon aur tum ho k tumhara dhiayan hi nhi hai….

The boy was about to touch her hairs

Nupur: hath maat lago..

He immediately put his hand away scared …

Nupur: yeah chicken meri hai is ko hath maat lago

Mayank: kitni kanjoos ho tum .. mein tumhari liyan jaan day raha ho aur tum…. Chicken k liyan lar rahi hoo

The boy was aging about to put his arms around her

Mayank: rukh jao… is ko tu tum bulkily bhi hath maat lagana… he again move his hand.. kahan na hath maat lago…

The couple was acting irritated the way they both were disturbing them..

Girl: kitni disturbance hai yaha…

Mayank: wohi tu.. thik se kuch kerny bhi nhi daytay.. park mein milti tu asa thori hota..

The girl looked at mayank and he was looking at her with a smirk… she gave him a seductive smile..

Girl: mein kal apni ek friend se joggers park mein 5 bajay milo gi..

Mayank: pata nhi loog 5 bajay kyun miltay hai… andheray k bad milna chaiy….

Boy: tum kis se baat ker rahi ho

Girl: tum se janu.. aur kis se… mein tu pata rahi thin a k mein kya kerny wali hoon kal…

Mayank: tafseel mein jana chaiy nah.. asay adhi adhori baatein kitni ajeeb lagti hain…

The boy can see the words by passed between mayank and that girl… and he was fuming..

Boy: chalo hum kahin aur chalty hain… utho..

Girl: magar yaha kya proi hai

Boy: bus chalo…

Nupur; mayank mein choti ami ko batao gi k tum larkiyon ko andehray k baad park mein bolaty hoo

Mayank: aray tu proi duniya k mazay kerny ki ijazat hai ..mein hi bechara rah jay

Nupur: aur tum raat ko kyun milo gay us se…

Mayank: ab yeah tu tum ko pata hona chaiy k andheray mein kyun milo ga…

Nupur: mayankk.. tumhara demag karba hogaya hai kya .. mein tumhari paki aj choti ami se shikayat kero gi

Mayank: acha aur jo tum abhi meray sath flirt ker rahi thi woh

Nupur: woh tum un couple ko pershan ker rahy thy

Mayank: aur yeah hum tumahin pershan ker rahy thy .. huh…

Nupur: mayank.. she threw her napkin

Mayank: gandi .. yeah hath saf kiya hua napkin meray moo per…

Nupur: tumhary liyan yeahi doorst hai…

……

They have the best of time together having loads of fun together..

Mayank: ice cream kahay…

Nupur: naiki aur poch pcoh.. chalo…

He park the car near a road side ice-cream shop.. and went to bring it … as soon as he reached the car he saw tai jan's car cuming form back…

Mayank: nupur .. tai jan….

Nupur: KYA… mayank hum gay … ab tu hum sach mein ga.. shoping bags bhi hai..

Mayank: tum in ko neechy kero … hum baat kertay hai.. tire puncher hogaya tha islyan hum log yaha rukhy hain.. bus itna yaad rekho… ek tu tumhari maa… raider..

Tai jan: ap yaha kya ker rahy hain

Mayank: salam tai jaan.. kuch nhi tai jaan musbiat woh tire puncher hogaya tha is lyan… aur woh garmi itni thi k mein ny socha icecream tu kaha lo…

Tai jan: nupur ap k sath hai

Mayank: ji.. hum ny munasib nhi samjha k unko public transport mein ghar bahij day islyan..ap jahy tu lay jay..wasy hum ghar hi jarahy thy

Tai jan; nhi.. humari meeting hai .. ap log foran rawana hoon..

Mayank: ji khuda hafiz…

She left and he got into car..and breath

Mayank: yaar yeah tumahri maa meri jaan lay ker hi choray gi

Nupur: kyun kya buhat data

Mayank: nhi … in ko mein hi kyun handle kero hamesha… tum aur Samrat tu baj jatay hoo

Nupur: tum se hojati hain na .. tu kerlo… abhi ghar chalo foran.. woh call keray gi choti ami ko lazmi..(for sure)..kay hum waqi uni se ghar jarahy thy ya tafree ker rahy hain

Mayank: hmm

………….

Shilpa: lain bachy agau bhabi..

Nupur: dekha…

Mayank: mjhy pata huamin yeah nhi kahan chaiy magr tai jan is sick..

Nupur: mayank pls…addab choti maa…dekhy hum ny shopping bhi ki…

Shilpa: agai meri beti… gharmi hai nah bahr… yeah bhahi k phone kyun aya tha

Mayank: rasat mein asab ki tarah woh hum per nazail hoaie thi

On the way she appears like a dead notice on us….

Shilpa: mayank tameez se

Mayank: kay tameez se… nupur meray sath hi thi nah…phir itna check kyun bhi.. har baat mein itnay sawal jasay hum zindgai nhi je rahy koi mahaz per hain( mission per) k un ko haar pal ki khabr doo

Nupur: tum jao fresh ho… deemgh per dhanada pani dalo… thik hojao gay

Mayank: tum mera mazk ura rahi hoo

Shilpa: acha yeah tu batao kay kya kiya

Nupur: apko pata hai hum logo ny kitna maza kiya… pehly him beech per gay phir hum ny Italian kahana khaya … jaha apky betay ko ek khubsorat, tazeebyafata (sansakri) larki ny kal 7 bajy park mei bolaya hai

Shilpa: hain mayank aray wah

Mayank: is k deemgh karab hogay hai…

Nupur: aur han yeah choti maa… chotay papa k liyan hai.. ap un ko day daina….

Shilpa: she smiled … tu apko yaad hai..

Nupur: ji hain yeahi bhi koi bhoolny wali baat hai…

Shilpa: yeah naliak hi bhool gaya hoga…hamesha ki taraha…

Mayank: asi koi baaat nhi hai.. mein ny bhi liya hai kuch…

Shilpa: hamsha ki tarah nupur k yaad dilny per….

Mayank: yeah samart kaha hai… janab itny busy hain k sms k jawab bhi nhi dayrahy… wah…

………………….

Present:

Samrat: ami ap nupur ko kahin nhi lay jarahi hai bus… aur baba ap kuch nhi bolay ga ab bhi nhi… tu kya us ki maiyaat per bolay gay

Taya jaan: Samrat…kissi kism ki baatein ker rahy hain ap

Samrat: aur kya kero..lagt nhi hai aplogo ko is ki zaindagi zara bhi pyari aur ap chahty bhi hai k yeah zinda rahy..aur kyun bhi ..hosh mein agai tu society k sawalo k jawab dayan party ga na…prestige k sawal jo hai./

Gunjan: Samrat arm se

Samrat: kya aram se gunjan…. Inlogo ko itni se baat smahj nhi ati k woh safar nhi ker sakti… maagr inko apni shan chopni hai…media mein yeah baat gai k ahmed'indutry k beti emotional trauma se maar gai tu in k kya hoga

Gunjan: Samrat…. Us ko kcuh nhi hoga

Samrat: khuda hi janay aur us k sath ab kya kya hona baqi hai…

Edited by drfizaahmed - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
YA ALLAH!!!
Aj toh apne hasa hasa kar mar hi dala API...🤣🤣🤣
i was laughing like hell...🤣🤣🤣 🤣🤣🤣
yeh update itne maje ka tha ke kya kahein...
Awww...Mayank is sooo Sweet..
agar Mayank nhi hota toh na jane Nupur ka kya hota shayad wahi jo apne present mein dikhaya hain...sigh!
d outing part was sooo damn adorable...
Mayank is ri8 Nupur ko thora toh apne liye awaz uthana hi chahiye...
hayeee...den der food part was too much...🤣🤣🤣
i was literally ROFL-ing on my Bed...😆😳🤣
hay hay kitni bemasharam hain woh ladki...chi!!!
apne BF ke sath baith kar bhi Mayank par dorey dal rahi thi...Ewww! Despo!!!🤢
n Gosh!!! API...i love u sooo much...🤗 aj bhttt din baad hum itna hasey woh bhi dil se bhttt maja aya...By God!!! after "SRTM" dis update made me laugh like hell...🤣
U r sooo good in writing both Emotional n light heart parts...
Hats off to u...⭐️⭐️⭐️
Srsly!!! i sooo hate dos kind of Yucky ppl...jaha dekho shuru ho jatey hain inko toh isse bhi jyada zaleel karna chahiye tha...HUH!!!
u wrote dis update sooo Beautifully as usual!!
i loved Mayank's back to back answers...By God!!!
dey were sooo much fun!!
Nupur is entirely herself wen she is wid Mayank bt jaha woh Hitler aurat a gayi wahi sab gayab ho jata hain...Sigh!!
dekho toh ase call karne ki kya jaroorat thi han!! huh!!!
loved Nupur teasing Mayank along wid my Fav Shilpa aunty...dey were sooo Adorable...😳
i loved it to BITS...😍
bt haye end wala part ne udaas kar diya...
n i agree wid Samrat...
i hope Mayank jaldi se wapas a jaye apni Nupur ke paas usse thik karne ke liye...
n apne bataya nhi aur kitne din baki hain iddat puri hone mein...
m sure MAyank usse pehle hi a jayega...InshALLAH
loved it to d coreee
i love u lodsss API...🤗🤗🤗
Edited by -Anila- - 13 years ago
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R e s e r v e d !

Edited.

Mayank&Nupur are so comfortable with each other. They're friends, they're cousins.. aur shayad aur bhi kuch. But they're really comfortable with each other, its such a sweet bond they share.

The update was quite funny, with a few serious moments. Woh jho couple k saath mazak kar rahe the..tauba.. 😆 Sach main bohat maza aya parh ke.. :)

Mujhe... Tai jaan kaafi pasand.. Unka kirdaar haqiqat say kaafi jura hua hain. Unhe samjhna, unki soch ko unko bohat asaan hain. Aur waise bhi unka kirdaar kafi dilchaps hain, woh jitna Nupur ko dantni hain, bura bala kehti hain.. woh utna he kareeb aati hain Mayank ke.. 😳 Sach kahein toh update main jaan dalti hain, of coursee apne tareeke say. 😆

I especially loved this line of Mayank: Mayank: rasat mein asab ki tarah woh hum per nazail hoaie thi
Lovely dialogues Fiza.. 😆 Tai jaan.. kya kirdaar hain.. 😳

Haal.. kafi hayraani wala hain.. aisa kya hua Nupur ko.. Tai jaan iss ki zimmedar hain yeh toh samjh main aata hain.. par iss sab main Mayank ka kya rishta hain.. samjh nahi aata.

Khair.. Bohat he achcha update tha, bohat maza aya parh kar. 😳 Update soon...

Haan ek shikayat thi.. Yeh kahani urdu main likh rahi hain.. tamam alfaz urdu main hain, toh yeh Past aur Present urdu main kyun nahi? 🤔 boliye...

-SilentPrincess-


Edited by .SilentPrincess - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
edited.

very nice update Fiza.

mayur past was soo nice ... u written it beautifully.

nupur was alwz scared of her mother ... that not good. but i love when she was with mayank. she just forgot all the world that time, n enjoyed wiht mayank.

loved that couple teasing session ... it hilarious ...loved it.

again present is so scary.

dnt wht what God ll reserve for her!!! kya prents hai ... apne beti ki jagah reputation ki pari hai!! hate them!!

waiting for next upte.










Edited by SujaLuvsMayur - 13 years ago

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