FF:SUPERNATURAL-Chapter 12(Updated on Page 41) - Page 12

Originally posted by: Shona217

You know, contrary to 'popular demand', I'm going to encourage you to keep the length of your chapters as they come to you, because as a writer myself, I know how it strikes you, and as you write, when you reach a particular point, you have to stop, to keep the suspense. And so far, you've done a pretty great job with that.
I've recently fallen in love with Supernatural and, well, Dean *blush blush* and you've done such a great job at depicting Arnav as a Winchester that I feel like expecing Sam and Dean to jump in at Shantivan any moment.
That, I believe, is a job well done! Take a bow!
Thanks for the PM, I'm waiting for the next!
-Shona

Originally posted by: Onupriya

U r getting better day by day. And u knw what u make my dean so much alive.I can imagine him telling the dialogues,his expression,his movements. U knw, I crazily luv him. And u'r writing him so correctly. Thanks for that. I wd hav becum upset if u did ne unjustice to his character. Thanks once again.

Originally posted by: pooja102

nice concept but wht is supernatural ..theme ..cant understand

Originally posted by: mz.brar

ohhh i loved the last 2 chapters!
so Khushi's biological parents were killed by something supernatural??
Do the Guptas have any other children?
I love the fact that arnav is trying to have some kind of normal life. But what i find odd is that its Sam that arguing so hard to bring him back to hunting. Arnavs managed to get out of that lifestyle; something that Sam has always wanted, so y would he want his brother to be dragged back in.

Muahhah Dean sitting though a 15 hour flight to India. Omg the poor boy!!(im going to assume that Khushi and the Winchester live in the US.) I can believe that Arnav when as far as Delhi just to get away from his brother(and father)But why did he leave is the real question!🤔

There seems to be friction btw Arnav and Dean that Sam doesn't know about. I think Dean was more affected by Arnav leaving then he lets on hehe.

I was just wondering how r Sam and Dean going to convince Arnav to help look for their dad?(he is getting married afterall) The Yellow Eye Demon(YED) has no real reason to come after Arnav(unless hes a gifted child too)which means that La's still in the equation. Does Arnav have any other family?

Originally posted by: TheWandmaker

Heyy Manal ! 🤗

Lovely Update :D I am glad we have the old Sam and not the one seen in the later seasons in your FF, i like this sam. Sam and Dean are such a lethal combination, their scenes be it of 5 seconds are always a treat. From minute lil things to the times of war, these two are great to watch. And you manage to catch the essence amazingly well and so dearly present it to us.

Now Dean in a plane How can i ever forget! That was Epic! Jensen Ackles was Amazingg! Who could have thought dean hates flying, the reason he loves driving everywhere 😆

Again you manage to write dean really well. Sam was his emotional self, and the logical one analyzing the situation doing the needed :)

Particularly loved this bit.

"But that son of a b***h left!"

"I did too. You don't go around cursing me all time, do you? Then why do you hate him so much?"

Dean didn't know what to say. He didn't have an answer. Words refused to make their way out. His words faltered as he tried to give Sam a reasonable explanation. "I...I...because he..."

As always Sam asks a question to which dean intentionally or unintentionally stumbles in that plain silence, trying to figure out the possible answer, or too stubborn to blurt it out. Wonderfully done Manal! ⭐️

Lavanaya Arnav really reminded me of Jessica-Sam, not saying it's the same, but am assuming it was rather inspired from there, because the entire scene after that takes me to the first episode of SPN. I hope the boys don't break into a physical fight next.

Dean-Arnav, m so eager to read on them,and Khushi too, where is she? what next in her story? Will Khushi journey on her own to the truth and Meet the Winchesters on a mission both of them will be working on?

Or will the winchesters end up saving her life?

Or will it be Winchesters who will reveal the truth to her? Eep me excited! my head is buzzing with a million questions..and all the answers are with you :)

Now am wondering if the next chap will be on Khushi, and the cliffhanger of this chap will continue? :O You wouldn't do that to us, would you? *pouts like a kid* 😆

But am not gonna nag you with that 'Update soon' Cmon you just posted a chap you deserve a day off and bask in the reviews.

And regarding the note, well i think the length is good, i mean length of a chap is the content not the word count for me...and the plot is going easy and good. It's a smooth flow, so keep it up! And i can imagine it's your first, so take your time :)

Well what more to say! You are an A-M-A-Z-I-N-G writer! :)

Thanks for the PM 🤗

Love Zee 😳

PS: It's a small small request, I hope you don't mind but can you write Dean grumbling for a good cheese burger in India 🤣 I so wanna see that, and am sure you can do wonders with such a scene But again ignore if it doesn't seem right to you 😳 No compulsion it's your story afterall And as a reader i should rather stay in my limits and not interfere with your work, BUT i just had to blurt this out. *Goes into hiding* 😕 😆

Originally posted by: nav_bat

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First of all I would like to congratualte you for the awesome way you have tried to replicate Dean's hillarious humour tacts. Trust me I could imagine the perfect expressions on his face. To tell you the truth it reminded me of an airplane demon, back in Season 1, (episode number 3 or 4), I clearly dont remember the specifications but yeah i do know, how Dean is so mad with airplanes. The shaky him the whole time in that episode, and Sam pulling his leg now and then.😆 To top it all off, he was trying to get over his sickness by hitting on the stewardess, wasnt doing any good btw.🤣

Still Daddy's boy is he not? I really am intrigued to know why Arnav leaving was so different from Sam leaving, I can chalk them to have almost identical reasons the way Sam was explicitly mentioning it over and over again. 🤔

Anyways, now I am so sure this is some case like Adam Winchester ones, he turned out to be the Micheal vessel, imagine my surprise back then.🤔 (😲)

Drive to Delhi? 🤣 Dean , is a dowright nutcase, and his dialouge

"Are you kidding me? You want to reach there when you are 80 or something?"

"I don't mind. Besides, I will look handsome even then.", Dean patted his back in self praise.

OMG! I was rofling like mad on that just like the two Winchessters to put up such a coversation.🤣

Laavanya and Arnav out of popular demand, though i think They are really adorable.😳 And the way the Winchesters dropped into the house was typically their way.🤣 I remember in the first epi when Dean had dropped into Sam-Jess live in place just like that, with that signature smirk all over his face.🤣 I was a fan of him just from then on.😃

Arnavs reaction was odd, it seemed like he hadnt gone out and instead they had been the ones to chuck him out in the first place.😕 I dont know, what to make out of him seriously, I havent seen his ruthless side in the FF as yet, I would surely want to see it. and I am looking forward to khushi entering the plot too. I hope her parents were killed by vampys, or Jefferson Starships by Eve (well I personally love em, coz Dean named them.☺️), but really I woudnt mind if some other demon killed it, any would do, if Khushi's joining the Winchesters gang.😉

On a serious note I would rate this chapter on 4.5 stars, 0.5 stars deduction for no Khushi, but still I have to say this is by far the bestest chapter you have written. And I am extremely sorry for being over whiny with the length thing, for a moment I had actually forgotten that my initial chapters in my first FF, were this short too.😳 Keep them the length you wish, it would hardly matter to me now, since I like the story and if I just get enough fill of it, in 2-3 days I would fell contented.😉

You are amazing at blending the two different localities together.👏 Thankyou so much for this FF, I personally wish i had the wits to write something like this too, but anyway I am happy reading for a while.😃

Thankyou for the Pm.

Love,

Batool😳