Shades Of Grey- CHAPTER 12 (PG-143) UPDATED!! - Page 34

B, my first comment for this story, putting my reasons on the table for the delayed comment, again my apologies not that I didn't want to, just was not sure of how to word myself. I was a bit skeptical about two people working on a story, not that it is wrong, just whom to credit is an issue, would credit you both no doubt, but the styles are different and I am finding it difficult to get the hang of it, it is a short coming at my end, not yours. When I read your work, I have a different mindset, I have read Gargee's work too and like it as well, so trying to overcome the mind block, hence the comment, will try giving a detailed one, have to make up for the 5 chapters thus far.

I love simply love Khushi's character in this story, thank you so much for fleshing her out this well. She is such a strong personality, smart, intelligent, subtle and I can go on and on. She is so sure of herself and her feelings and also understands her situation well, she is in love with Arnav, her friend, mentor, guardian and a soul mate, he may not realize the last bit now but he is and sooner he gets it, the better it is for him. Khushi is such a wonderful soul, it's difficult not to like her, everyone drools over Arnav, but in essence it is Khushi who is the soul of the story. Every single character pales in comparison and a perfect foil to Arnav's darkness. She is so good; this may throw unnecessary light on Arnav being bad. She is feisty as well, loved her business sense and herself respecting attitude, wanted to be something more that Arnav's "mentee or prodigy" nothing wrong with that but, shows she has ovaries of steel. I almost stood and applauded her scene handling the two wimps, god help me, men like W-T should be @^%$*^(%&^%^%%#$##&%$*^%^ and more.

Arnav, what do I say, that guy is just IMPOSSIBLE, running away from things that matter the most to him. Khushi is the most important thing Arnav, please understand, for heaven's sake, please understand this simple fact, do you want it craved on stone. COWARD is a word that I often want to use for him, he his always running away, not sure if others agree. He is running away from his feelings, people who matter and situations which need desperate attention. What are his methods to escape, drinking and hanging out with women, sorry sweetheart, wine and women do not solve problems, temporary relief maybe but no solution coming your way. He does feel for Khushi and now he does not want to define it, that I can understand, but ignoring it will not make it easy on him, forget her, she is strong unlike him. He is proud of her and her achievements, means the world for him, will stick his neck out for her too, but not give her what she wants, coming to think of it is she asking for too much. What if Arnav really does not have it in him to give it to her, to love that is, the kind Khushi seeks.

I have read the chapters a couple of times to do some justice to this story owing to my short sightedness; sorry again, I mean it. The writing is interesting and has me hooked; keep looking forward to the updates every day. Each update has a lot to offer and is building the story brick by brick and a beautiful structure I see in the future.