Shikwaa : Pt.3,pg.5(28/06)

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Dhara Singh

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Posted: 13 years ago

#11

Its always nice to get something ew from you Mana !! As long as its Naina who is at the receiving end..I don't mind What Raj gives her !!

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Suhana

@suhana.dixit

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Posted: 13 years ago

#12

Hi Mana

Nice to see u coming up with another new story.😊

Interesting prologue..👏

I am excited to see Raj in negative role.mayb not completely but little bit of grey shade is quite normal or is the male lead completely negative??

I dont know abt Raj being negative as of now I'll love to read the next part soon😃

Edited by suhana.dixit - 13 years ago

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golu_1677

@golu_1677

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Posted: 13 years ago

#13

thanks for another superb fic... we want raj but not totally neg... grey character is fine... waiting for more...

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noaccount

@noaccount

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Posted: 13 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: Revolutionbreez
Part ONE:

Is it always possible to describe the pain??

They say, pain is measured in decibels...but...

Can we really measure the pain given by our beloved?

Can anyone really repair the damage caused when the love of
your life backstabs you?

These were the questions Samidha wanted to ask...

For which,somehow, she deducted that the answer was NO...

And so she screamed out in pain as her tears mingled with the untimely rain...which seemed to be falling,only to hide her tears...

She cried inconsolably...telling herself every second that she wont cry over that cheat...that she is a strong girl...that he doesnt deserve her tears either...

But still..fresh tears pounded everytime she harshly wiped them off...

She was thankful that nobody was around...that she can cry her heart out...

She had put up a brave front in front of everyone...while she was breaking...piece by piece...with every passing second...

Who had thought that the new dimension of life, she had entered amidst shower of blessings and love of dear ones,with all the pomp and glory, will cease it's existence even before she gets adapted to it...?

Who had thought, that the person, whom she had started trusting blindly...will prove her blind...?

But she wiped her tears ...she wont surrender to the cruelty of her fate...

She wont fall apart...

She is a fighter...and besides...she cant add to the sufferings of those two people...only ones,who loved her unconditionally...her parents...!

she needs to be strong...for them atleast...

oh wow, awesome!!!!

loved it!!!

is it a dark story????? r u kidding i would love raj to be in grey shade

plz cont soon and pm me

esha

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Priya

@Sweet-Lioness

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Posted: 13 years ago

#15

ye hui na DDPA ke memb wali baat...her baat par confused hona jaruri hai kya...itna nahi pata ke hum pagalpanti bina confused ho karr karrte hain...

achha kiya jo ise post kiya...HAMARA AASHRIVAAD HAMESHA TERE SATH HAI BALIKE...

first part baht khubshurat tha...matlab ki ek ladki ka pain...kitne achhe se tune likha hai...aur tarif nahi karungi...abhi abhi MS pe karr ke aayi hoon...huh...

Raj ko tujhe Grey shade me lana hai ya -ve banana hai...kuch bhi bana...par pahle...

'Zara samne toh aayo chaliye...

chup chup jalne me kya raaz hai...'

abhi jaldi se next part post karr...aur haan main abhi tak nahi bhuli jo tune mujhe kal raat ko text kiya tha...

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ChhalkiSyaahi

@ChhalkiSyaahi

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Posted: 13 years ago

#16

Hey Mana...

Nice start to the story...!!! Actually a good one...!!!

It doesn't matter whether the lead are RN or not... neither does it matter to me if Raj is having a grey shade to his character or is completely negative... You can cast whom so ever you want... just continue with the story...!!

Luv

Guglu...

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manali

@Revolutionbreez

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Posted: 13 years ago

#17

PART TWO:

" Am thinking of taking anti-anxiety medicines.", said Raj.

" WHAT !!! ", Samidha laughed heartily.

" Naina !! You are heartless !! Meri tension samajhne ke bajaye hasse jarahi ho..."

Raj had gone fida over samidha...He always said, samidha had the most beautiful eyes in this world.

And so he had said once...

" Tumhari aankhein...they captivate me...itni sundar aankho waali ladki ka naam toh Naina hona chahiye...", he whispered caressing her face and then said suddenly, " Toh done !!! Aajse main tumhe Naina hi bulaunga."

Next week was their wedding..and so Raj was getting nervous while Samidha...ahh...Naina was teasing him.

" Umm...Raj...I guess you still not prepared...ahh...to tell you the truth..abhi main bhi iss badlaav keliye puritarah ready nahi hu...you know...shaadi and all...humein kuch aur waqt dena chahiye ekdusre ko...", she said purposely, " Kya hum wedding postpone karsakte hai...please?"

Raj panicked..

" Arey..issmein darne ki kya baat hai...You will get adapted to it soon...thodi nervousness toh obvious hai na..lekin tum...", he stopped at once as Naina burst out laughing.

and he understood that she was joking.

He stared at his feet blushing a little and smiling to himself and then pulled her closer by her waist all of sudden, startling her completely.

" Meri bechaini aur betabi ka faida uthaya ja raha hai, haan?", he asked menacingly, " Iski saza toh milegi...barabar milegi !! "

" Raj..dekho...sorry...!! ", Naina said understanding his intentions very well, " main..woh..Raj please!! "

He captured her lips in a rapturous kiss...

Samidha sat upright on the arm chair with a jerk...

It was dream...but she could feel him all around..as if...as if..he actually was there.

The beautiful eyes..which once held enormous love for Raj , were full of pain and tears given by that very person.

She smiled sadly...When her mobile started vibrating.

" JAAN..." blinked on her screen.

She at once held it and was about to receive it when reality came crashing in...

she bit her lip, to stop the sob coming out.

Finally it was a missed call.

She had put her phone on silent. The continuous ringing of the song

" Look into my eyes..

You would see..what you mean to me.."

This Bryan Adam song started having meaning for her after she met Raj. There's was an arranged marriage...well...Arranged turned into Love, it their case...

But now...everything was past...A DARK MEANINGLESS PAST FOR HER...

Finally he stopped calling..

She was relieved...but at the same time sad...

She was so confused about her emotions...

She was dead Angry..FOR SURE...! Infact she was disgusted with him...

but...still...there was that emotion..that silly emotion called love...somewhere inside her...

She sighed...tiredly and painfully...

When she received a text message...

" Naina...I'm really very sorry for whatever i have done..Punish me jaan !! Do whatever you want...but plz give me one more chance...plz dont leave me jaan...!! I love you a lot...atleast speak to me sweetu...just once...plz...jaan..plzz."

She just left that place, leaving her phone there itself...

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Suhana

@suhana.dixit

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Posted: 13 years ago

#18

Hi Mana

Raj seems to love Naina too much then why did he betrayed her??? Samidha is totally confused..she hates him for wat he has done but some part of her still loves him..

Edited by suhana.dixit - 13 years ago

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pranita1202

@pranita1202

Voyager

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Posted: 13 years ago

#19

u know we discussed abt raj playing negative n all

but after reading the update , it struck me that rajeev himself started his career wid a negative role in "first season of ekta kapoor's show KYA HADSA KYA HAQUEEQAT"

so our rajeev is versatile.so negative shades will definetly suit him

abt the update very intruiging loved rajeev's character shades lover yet seemed possesive but it was her dream.eager to wat is d past story