HELP! swaron SS!(update page 18)

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ABI

@ABBY92

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Posted: 13 years ago

#21

I loved it...the way you described Sharon's feelings in the beginning was perfect and the end bit where Swayam reveals that he saw her with Shivam...the way she reacted to that was awesome and you stopped at the right moment...I'm so excited to read the next update !!!

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Tanishtha

@JugHo786

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Posted: 13 years ago

#22

m kinda confused... agar kriya sharon ki sister hain (tumahe os main) toh kriya ki khabar swayam ko nahi sharon ko pata honi chahiye rite?
leavg dis, everythg else was gud... n how can u leave it lyk dis...
pm me nxt part?

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Radioactive.

@Radioactive.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#23

Awesome SS re. I loved it. Oh I can't wait to read more. Please please pretty please update fast.

Oye, mujhe Pm kyun nahin kiya?!

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nish22

@nish22

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Posted: 13 years ago

#24

Cheeekooo AWESOME Work!! Write Jaldi Jaldi na?!

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pratik vyas

@pratik54000

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Posted: 13 years ago

#25

Really amazing unfolding of story...awsome thinking...i loved the way sharon lied and caught in her own trap...looking forward for next part it would be fun...please notify me when you update if you have sufficient conviniency...

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kriti

@-CheekuBeetch-

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Posted: 13 years ago

#26

Chapter 2:

Sharon held him by the collar , swayam stood there absolutely numb. He was staring at her like she was an alien.

Sh: you better listen to me Mr. Shekhawat! I am not that sort of a girl, i am Sharon Raiprakash! Understood? Who am I ?
Sw: shshsh..Sharon Raiprakash.
Sh: correct. I don't know what you saw, but today you have to believe me , whether you like it or not. Uss raat Kuch nai hua tha, he was the one who kissed me , on my cheek! Jab woh aur paas aya tab meine usse dhakka de diya tha.
Sw: kyu?
Sh: kyu? Kya kyu?
Sw: kyu? Dhakka kyu diya?

I pushed him because the guilt was eating me up, I pushed him because I didn't like him , I was only there with him to make you jealous, to prove that I didn't care about you, that I could move on, I didn't love him. I pushed him because your face danced in front of my eyes, all those moments , even the fights all the things that we have been through flashed in my mind! This is why...

She wanted to say it out loud, but she couldn't , she chickened out. She released his collar and looked at him uncertain of her answer.

Sw: say something! I am not a psychic , I cannot read your mind!
Sh: I have nothing to say. I don't need to explain anything.
Sw: yes yo do! Look at me Sharon, and answer my simple question.
Sh: I don't want to.
Sw: Sharon? Sharon Raiprakash , the diva, is scared? What a pity. He tutted.

Her head snapped up to glare at him. She held her chin up and answered with confidence.

Sh: I am not scared.
Sw: then tell me the reason.
Sh: I have to work, bye!
Sw: don't change the topic!
Sh: this topic is closed!
Sw: this is not a forum and you are not a moderator to close the topic!
Sh: oh just shut up!
Sw: you answer me!
Sh: there is nothing left to say!
Sw: ughhh! I hate you!
Sh: I love you too. She said with a smile.

The smile dropped off her face once the gravity of the situation hit her like bricks.
She looked up at him with innocent eyes, like a child would. He couldn't move, he was stunned.

Sh: I ddd..didn't mean it like that..
Sw: yeah..I understand.
Sh: let's just finish the work.
Sw: alright.

Both of them turned to the table and Sharon resumed her work , and sat down on the same spot. On top of the table!

Sw: why are you sitting on the table?
Sh: it gives me more space...she shrugged casually focusing on her work.
Sw: haan...I can understand, ab weight put on kiya hai toh obviously space toh zyada chaiyega hi na..
Sh: excuse me! Mein moti nai hu okay!
Sw: ho
Sh: nai hu
Sw: ho
Sh: nai hu
Sw: ho!
Sh: nai hu!
Sw: HO!
Sh: NAI HU!

They were moving closer and closer as they mocked each other. By the time they reached the last 'ho / nai hu' there noses were brushing against each other. Sharon blinked her eyes and quickly moved back, and swayam mirrored her actions.

Sh: mein moti nai hu..
Swayam gave a low chuckle and replied in a sing song voice.
Sw: tum moti nai ho..maybe a little chubby-

Sharon smacked his shulder as hard as she could, trying to make him flinch or wince. But to her embarrassment she frantically started shaking her palm which now turning a little red.

Swayam threw his head back and started laughing. He was laughing so hard that he had to sit on the floor, so that he doesn't fall. He was having a hard time in catching his breath. Finally he stopped howling with laughter and sat up straight on the ground.

Sharon was sending him death glares as he kept snickering silently.

Sh: dikhte to bade patle duble ho, par itne strong kaise?
Sw: jaisa humesha dikhta hai , waisa Hota nai..
Sh: Typical swayam! Her baat mein philosophy ghussa dete ho na tum!
Sw: what can I do..I am just brilliant that way...and I am not kidding! I really do have muscles , I go for jogging every morning and I work out too..
Sh: oh puh-lease! Muscles hote to dikhte.
Sw: you don't believe me? Fine!

He rolled up his full sleeved shirt to reveal his shoulders. He wasn't kidding, he really did have muscles and they were pretty impressive. Sharon gaped at his arms, not expecting such a sight.

Sw: bechara sweeper, kal subah subah usko tumhara drool table se pochna padega.
Sh: aa..bb..abb...I wasnt drooling, I am just saying that you do have muscles.
Sw: yes! aise hi tumhe itni Baar girne se nai bachaya hai meine. He smirked.
Sh: tumne mujhe kab girne se bachaya hai?
Sw: bhot Baar! Let me give you a few examples, remember when Bharat and vishaka had smeared oil all over the entrance of the class room? That too, twice? Then in the college trip , on the boat? In the corridor when you dropped and broke the watch that I gave you? Then--
Sh: I get your point!

After this , silence creeped up between then. It wasn't an awkward one but surely it was eery. Sharon decided to brake the silence finally.

Sh: idhar aao, look at this CD. I think she might be capable of joining the team even though she needs a lot of practise.

Swayam moved towards her and sat down on the table too. He adjusted the screen of the laptop and started watching the cd.

Sh: swayam ye kya kar rahe ho? It is a plastic table, it will collapse-

Before Sharon could finish the sentence , both Sharon and swayam went crashing down as the table collapsed. Swayam quickly Held Sharon securely on top of him , so that she wouldn't hurt herself and wouldn't collide with the floor.

Swayam's back hit the hard ground and a gasp escaped his lips. He had tried saving the laptop too, but it had already shattered into large metal chunks. The papers were flying everywhere. Sharon had shut her eyes tightly. She slowly opened her eyes to see a very pained looking swayam.

Sh: oh my! Swayam are you okay? Why did you have to save me too and take extra weight? Bolo kahan lagi?

Sw: I am fine Sharon, bas thoda sa dard ho raha hai...theek ho Jaega.

Sharon slid down from his torso and kneeled on the ground. She put an arm around swayam to help him sit up straight. She was rubbing soothing circles on his back with her palms.

Sw: I am sorry, I didn't realise that the table won't hold that much weight. Tumhe lagi toh nai?
Sh: nai, but tumhe lagi hai..swayam chalo abhi!
Sw: kahan?
Sh: bas chalo!

Sharon stood up first and then helped him. She gathered all the papers. When swayam tried to help her , she sent warning look at him and he stopped.
Swayam's eyes moved to the broken piece of metal and a guilty look crossed his face.

Sw: Sharon, I am so sorry, I broke your laptop! I swear I will get a new one.
Sh: no need, anyway this one was too old, I was going to get a new one.

Sharon quickly grabbed her bag and led swayam to the basket ball court where her car was parked. She opened the door and motioned swayam to get in.

Sw: what? I am not sitting in your car!
Sh: do you expect me to let you go home on your cycle? No way! Just get in, I will drop you off.
Sw: absolutely not! I will not sit in the passenger seat while a girl is driving!
Sh: sexist much?! Just shut up and get in, no arguments.

Swayam grumpily sat inside and slammed the door shut with extra force just to show her that he was upset and was throwing a tantrum.
Sharon rolled her eyes as she switched on the ignition and started the car.
She mumbled under her breath and shook her head in disappointment:

Sh: drama queen.

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Thank you so much, for such a nice response! :)
Here you go with the second chapter! :)

Note: I might update tomorrow, but I won't be updating for the whole of next week, reason being, I am going on a holiday! Mumbaaai! :D

How was it? Okay so you might be thinking that the name of the SS is pretty weird, well in the next chapter you will understand the significance.

if you haven't got a pm, i am extremely sorry, but mentioning it your comments wont help, cause you will have to send me a buddy request on my pm account not my original account.
Please note that I WILL NOT be sending out pms from this account so please add : kritiffpm

- thanks for reading :)
Kriti! xD

Edited by kritid3lover - 13 years ago

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Shailja

@---Shailu---

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Posted: 13 years ago

#27

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*Unress*😃

Wohhooo 1st one to comment !!!!😉

*Dhinka chika*

I totally loved ur SS dear...😳

Abhi i read both the parts...😆

Sorry i wasn't aware of this SS..

Nd also wanna tell that some error prob is there in lyke button so don think i didn't press the lyke button...😕

I loved swayam's concern towards sharon...the sweet little fight...the nose touching moment...the weight part...swayam falling down wid sharon...sharon helping swayam...nd also...the scene where she told that no one dances like kriya...No Replacement...!!!😳

Hayyyeee...i loved each nd every corner of ur SS !!!!!😍

Pls do continue sooon.😃

nd do PM me from the evry next time u update...😳

~Sweets

Edited by mEgical_arsha - 13 years ago

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manasi

@manasie23

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Posted: 13 years ago

#28

awesome... par sharon ne vo sab zorse kyu nai bola... n tum moderator nai ho... hahahahaha... n then moti ha moti na ke chakkar itne paas aaa gaye i tell u dono issi ki rah me baithe hote hai... n then they fal *tham* haiyye swayam ko lag gayi :(( n sharon dropping him home... haaayyyeee

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Sawyer_Tom

@Sawyer_Tom

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#29

Nice update. Really enjoyed the part where Swayam was acting like a drama queen.🤣 Their little fights were also cute. Update SOON!!! And thanks for the PM. You write very well by the way.