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Posted: 13 years ago
#21
Heyy omg i love it please continue it... and payal is soo cute and funny hahahhaha thank you soo much for the PM

'aadi itna koi darta h kya apni wife se''he looked at her n shout-''just shut up'' LOLZZZ omg poor aadi lolzzz 😆😆😆😆
Great start 👏




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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: tejjo

dear will update tommorow ok

yeah i m waiting...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#23
Thanks for writing/sharing RTMC SS!!!
loved it very much!!
aadi y did u married payal if u din't liked her!!
i liked her very much!!
reading novel when he is shouting!! n claiming her right on not only wordrob but room n her hubby too!! and got kiss from him!!
gr8 going girl!!👍🏼
n dialogues are very funny!! enjoyed them while reading!!👏
''aisa lagta h puri family ke kapde yahan leke aa gyi h''under his breath...he turned n rubbed his hairs...then he sat on couch angrily...🤣
loh yeh bhi cum nahi hai

payal-''kahan na sorry''he saw her n said-''kab kaha sorry tumne''

payal-''abhi to bola na''wrinkled her forehead🤣

i am loving her

he turned n said to himself-''ek din mein pagal ho jayunga is pagal ke chakkar mein''

tum toh ho gaye ho already!!

she came more closer-''mein koi or boyfriend dhund lungi i warn u''he looked at her angerily-''do what u want''he sat on other side of couch..she went more nearer-''but tumse smart or handsome kahan milega''he again slid a little she came more closer...

haa really tumhare jaise handsome n smart aur koi nahi!!

aadi-''dekho payal mera dimaag kharab mat karo''she came more closer...-''wo sahi kab rehta h''he pulled her back n sat on bed..she followed him n sat next to him...he slowly slowly moved to other side and she followed him continuously...as he moved little more he fell on floor she burst into laughter-''aadi itna koi darta h kya apni wife se''
🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
sach mein aadi ka dimag sahi nahi hai!! he proved him pagal to payal!!
aur honeymoon pe apne wife k saath hi jaate hai!!
thanks for sharing!!! loved it very much!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#24
thank u guys for liking n commenting on my ss...loved ur comments truely by heart😛
so here is the next part...hope u enjoyed it

part 2

at evening aadi returned from the office n he was tired...his mother n father went to london with some work with his sister...so he n his wife were all alone in this big house...he went to his room n shout-''payal what are u doing..kya h yeh sab?????''all the clothes n messed up on bed(only her clothes)she looked at him n smiled-''hi aadi tum kab aye...mein apne kapde pack kar rhi hun honeymoon ke liye''

aadi sat on couch angrily-''tumne mujhe btaya kyun nhi ki kal mom n dad london chale gye...aaj unka phone aaya tab pta chala mujhe ''but she was busy in her clothes...he red with rage n throw her clothes-''mein tumse baat kar rha hun deewaro se nhi ''

she put her clothes while talked to him-''aadi mom ne hi mana kiya tha tumhe btane ko agar tumhe bta dete to tum unhe jaane nhi dete isliye...''

aadi-''of course mein unhe nhi jaane deta kyunki mein akle tumhe nhi jhel sakta''n went to washroom...she smiled n picked her clothes one by one when she heard the door sound..he came out from the washroom n said-''ek minute tumhe kisne kaha ki hm honeymoon par jaa rhe h''

she smiled shyly-''kisine nhi matlab hmaari nyi nyi shaadi hui h to honeymoon par to jayenege na jab couples jaate h shaadi ke baad hum bhi chalte h na...3 din ho gye h hmaari shaadi ko or hum ek saath kahin nhi gye''

he growled at her-''go to hell...mein kahin nhi jaa rha hun samjhi tum''n went again inside the bathroom...she picked out the clothes from the bag sadly...

after sometime he came out n shocked to saw the clothes on bed-''yeh sab kya h''she made a childish face n said-''tumne kaha ki hum nhi jaa rhe h to mein kapde wapas cupboard mein rakh rhi hun''

aadi-''tumhe jaane ko kaha kisne tha jo yeh sab nikal ke rakha tumne''she looked at him-''mujhe laga ki hum pakka jayenge sab shaadi ke baad jaate h na isliye''he want to hit his head or her head on wall he control his anger n sat on couch silently for sometime...she came with his dinner n smiled-''aaj ka saara khana meine bnaya h...bhot tasty h khaa ke dekho''

he growled at her n saw at his dinner ...chappattis are looked like not indian map but like sri lanka's map...he looked at chappatis n then at her n said-''yeh kya h''her smiled faded slowly-''first time bnaya na isliye aisa h agli baar globe ki tarah gol hi bnaugi pakka''

he started to eating it...not eating it just gulped it...her food tortured him like hell...she sat next to him n saw him-''tum akele hi khaoge mujhe nhi khiloge...mene abhi tak nhi khaya''

aadi-''khaana kisne bnaya tumne na to khane ko kisne mana kiya tha''she came closer-''oho aadi ab hmaari shaadi ho gyi h or milke khaane se pyaar badta h''

aadi control his anger-''tumhaare pass do haath h na to yeh lo or khud khao mujhe koi pyaar nhi badana mujhse tumhaara pyaar bardaast nhi ho rha h u got it''he leave

she mimic him-''mujhe koi pyaar nhi badana''n start eating-''subah se kuch nhi khaaya meine or ise fikar hi nhi h meri''while eating quickly

aadi stretched n bed n shocked to saw her on next side-''tum yahan kya kar rhi ho'

payal-''so rhi hun ab so bhi nhi sakti kya''he stood up n said-''utho yahan se abhi ki abhi yeh mera bed h or mein akela sota hun ispar''

payal -''to tumhaari saari cheez ab aadhi meri h yeh bed bhi...or kal raat ko hum saath hi soye the''

aadi-''wo by mistake hua tha samjhi tum...abhi utho yaha se jaldi''he throw her pillow n blanket on floor...she stood up n picked up both thingsn moved towards the couch-''i hate u''

aadi-''me too''

she slept on couch..after sometime he heard some very weird sounds actually sound slleep///
he looked at her n pat his hand-''tum bina shore kiye nhi so skti kya mujhe neend nhi aa rhi h''

payal-''to mein kya karu mujhe sofe par aise hi neend aat h''

aadi-''thik h utho yahan se or jaakar aadhe bed par sona ''she grinned n quickly stretched herself on bed-''thank u''

aadi to himself-''nautanki''he put the cushion in between-''mere pass mat aana tum...she nodded n slept

after sometime she looked at aadi he was in deep sleep...she put the cushions aside n moved closer to him...he was the most handsome person in his life...actually aadi was her life...she kissed her closed eyes then his cheeks...she put her head on his chest n embraced him from side/...soon she also slept in arms

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he wake up n saw her on his shoulder...she opened her eyes lazily-''gdmg aadi''he said-''gdmg...meri shirt chodo mujhe office jana h''

she looked at him n kissed his cheek-''i love u ek gdmg kiss to de sakte h na''

he pulled her -'tumse mana kiya tha na yah aane ko tumhe samajh nhi aati koi baat''

she smiled n said-''office jaana jaruri h mat jao aaj mein ghar mein bore ho jaati hun''

aadi-''to tum kya chahti ho yahan ghar par rehkar tumhaara entertainment karu''

she said quickly-''waise idea bura nhi h''n laughed...he stood up n went to washroom...she went to kitchen to prepare breakfast...

when she return he was shouting badly-''payal...payal''she picked up the towel n gave to him...he came out after sometime-''are u mad towel bahar kyun rakh tumne''

payal-''mein bhul gyi thi''she smiled n said-''chalo ab jaldi se ready ho jao meine breakfast bna diya h''

he gave her a angry look n said-''just shut up...''

he was getting ready when she came closer to him n curled her hands around his neck n winked her eye-''bhot handsome lag rhe ho''she pulled her hands n combing his hairs she hugged him from behind n said-''aadi mat jao na office mein bhot miss karungi tumhe''

he again pulled her back-''tum dur nhi khadi ho sakti mujhse...tumhe itni baat samajh nhi aati ki i don't like u''

she snatched his comb-''i know ki u don't like me but i love u''

aadi gave her some papers n said-''aaj shaam tak ispar sign ho jaana chahiye''she tore the papers in front of him n said-''aadi mein tumhe divorce nhi dungi''he moved towards the doors-''i have 5o copies jitne fadne h fado but sign to tumhe karna hi padega''

she said loudly-''me puri 50 copies fad dungi ''he didn't listen her n leave...she sat on bed silently
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he returned from the office n went to his room...she was sleeping on his bed very happily...he came nearer n pat his shoulder...she smiled to saw him-''tum itni jaldi aa gye hum kahin jaa rhe h''with full of exictement

aadi-''tumhe or koi kaam nhi h gumne ke siwaye''while loosening his tie...she came nearer n said-''mein koloun...he stepped back-''no thanks mujhe kholne aati h''she made her face n said-''chai piyoge???''

aadi without looking at her-''nahi''n sat on couch in relaxed posture...she came nearer n said-''kya hua bhot kaam tha office mein''

aadi-''han mujhe sar mein dard he to apni bak bak band karo''she went towards the cupboard n put a medicine-''yeh lo kha lo thodi der mein thik ho jayega''

he closed his eyes n said -''nhi khaani jao yahan se''

payal-''to baam laga dun usse bhi thik ho jayega''

he nodded she put baam on his forehead slowly...he felt more tired...she wiped his sweating with her saree n put her hand on his forehead...she smiled to saw him sleepy...she came closer n kissed his forehead...he opened his eyes n saw her innocent face...she was smiling n went nearer to his lips...he placed his hands on his waist tightly...she kissed his lips softly he too kissed her lips then he pulled her more closer n kissed his neck ...again she want to kiss him but suddenly his phone rang...he pulled her back she looked at him-''is phone ko bhi abhi aana tha i hate ur phone''

he put the phone aside n started his laptop she came nearer n said-''u love me''he growled at her-''mujhe kaam karne do mera dimaag kharab mat karo''she sat on couch angrily n to tease him started tv with full volume...he looked at her angrily-''iska volume kam karo''

payal while smiling-''phir mujhe sunayi nhi deta''he red with rage n throw the remote ..

payal-''aadi ab isme meri kya galti h wo tv mein itni jor jor se baat kar rhe to''she came closer to him while he stepped back-''dur rho mujhse''

she smiled-''kyun mere pass ane se kuch hota h tumhe''

aadi-''just shut up''went to his bed

payal-''ab tv ka volume full hi rahega remote to tumne fek diya''

aadi-''tum apna volume kam karo vrna mein tumhe bhi utha ke fek dunda''she laughed n said-''accha h isi bhane tum mujhe touch to karoge''n again laughed

he was irritated with her laugter-''pure din faltu mein kyun hasti rehti ho pagal haste h aise''

payal-''hasne se khoon badta h tum bhi hasa karo...waise tum bhi hasa karo acche lagoge tum last time kab hase the...jahan tak mein tumhe jaanti hun tum mere samne to kabhi nhi hase...koi tragedy h kya hasi ke saath''

aadi-''tumhaare pass itni faltu baatein aati kahan se''she laughed again n caress his hairs..he pulled her hand-''mere balo ko hath mat lagaotum''she kissed his cheek-''ab thik h''he stood up from the bed n sat on couch angrily...she smiled while sitting on bed-



pls suggest title ...i like o piya given by sonali n vivah given by khushi di...u also suggest some more title pls😃
Edited by tejjo - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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😳reso jii

hum phirr aa gye...😳

~~EDITED~~
di, if pr tho main roz widout fail thi
aapne mujhe phirr bi miss kiya,
oh thnx...

ap didiyoon ne mere bhav chada rakhe h...
sab ki sab kitna pamper karogi tho main bigad jaonga na di!.
chalo bak, di ho tho bak bak bhi suno.
main payal se jyada achi bak bak karti hoon.
sachi...

payal kinni excited thi honeymoon ke liye...
but, adi is vry rude, bechari k saare armano pr pani pher diya h...
kaisa pati h yeh...
ek tho bhaag walo ko hi aisi mc si jaise, oops! payal jaisi sunder hot, beautiful biwi milti h
n yeh god gifted wife ko divoce de rha h...

payal ne khana banaya, srilanka map, chalo, india se tho jyada gol dikhta h, koi baat nhi

but algi bar india map hi banana...kyunki

''hindi h hum,
hindi h hum,
vatan h hindustan hamara, hamara...
saare jahan se acha...''

mummy dad london gye h, bechari payal romentic hone ka try kr rhi h, but yeh dhosth pati, kina rude h...

jab dekho payal pr chilta rahata h,
jiss dinn payal ka sabar ka bhand tut gya, uss dinn, akal thikane laga degi...

india biwi bhot sahen shel hoti h,
lekin jab unka dimaag phirr jata h tho maa bhawani bann jati h...samjhe,
saare screw tight kr degi tumhare...
aaye bade- honeymoon pr nhi jana!.😡

acchi khasi kiss chal rhi thi, yeh phn khan se aa gya...kambakhat...

tv scene, maaze aa gye, yah phirr kahun tote udd gye by god...
sooperbo di
sachi bhot psand aaya ud mujhe...

topic kya rhkhoge..
dono hi acche h
coz, dono hi di's ne diye h

mujhe nhi pata, khud hi soch lo di..

but pakka, ss khatam hone se pehle rakh lena...

yah phirr kuch comined rakh lo- yah phirr khushi di se inspire hokr
''ek VIVAH aisa bhi'' main thoda change karo...

ab aayega ismain sonali di touch

''ek piya aisa bhi!''

credit goes to sonali di, khushi di, n ma brilliant brain.
Edited by sweetsanyo - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweetsanyo

😳reso jii


hum phirr aa gye...😳

ok ji waise bhi i miss u bhot der se on if yr
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Posted: 13 years ago
#27
the update was good...👏
but why he hate her so much...????????...n divorce...???????...
shaadi hui nahi ki divorce...why...?????...
he is behaving so rudly with her but still she is so calm n silent...??????...
n if he didn't like her than what was that...i mean that kiss...??????...
continue soon...
luv u...😊
Edited by ridzzi - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#28
wierd couple both are
Luvd the update
update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
#29
its superbb...payal is too bubbly...and aadi ki to baat hi kuch aur h...
lv this part
yeah i thought sumthing abt title..the best which i thought was" humtum " but u hd already used it...so i thought sum more lyk-kaththa meetha or kuch kathi kuch meethi or crispy love...
i'll think of more nd will tell u next tym
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Posted: 13 years ago
#30
nice yaar...
ye adi ki problem kya hai yaar... bechari payal kitna excited thi 4 her honeymoon... but uss pagal, rude, bevkuf adi ne poore mood ka kchra kr diya...😡
payal,"kum se kum chuoge to shi"😆😆
god she great yaar... hats off 2 her...
adi to bechara to ab fs gya...
pagal itni mst wife mili hai to bhaav kha rha hai...
luvd it...👍🏼

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