~ You're not the only one ~ ArHi FF Ch12NewThread - Page 68

Your title seems to be haunting me everytime I read your updates, it scares me with the thought that these individuals are not going to end up with the ones they love. It seems that they are all going to compromise and then in the end when the loved one does come back they are going to deny all entry. I jist have a feeling that is going to happen! also this pain was written magnificently. The way you desvribed Arnav was excuisite& You opened up such a vunreble character within one chapter beautiful! Yes my thoughts on the fic the ones I have just mentioned above beforet the Arnav part are going to remain like that till you auprise me ;) but I just feel that for all of them its going to be a little too late and somehpw they are going to get trapped into everything and one thing will lead to another! I dont know why dont you prove me wrong? gaaah but the chapter was amazing. I dont like nisha but I like the victim portrayal you have made of her. I just pray that somewhere in all this someone will see sense!


Do update soon

-Aashifa

Rae.. sorry for the late reply dear.. am still on vacation but you have me addicted so reading this is a must.. 😆😳

Okay chapter 5/6

Loved it.. how beautifully you portrayed the atmosphere that once was and what past events have made of it... I am annoyed by Naniji's behavior of all of the individuals I would have expected her to make that attempt to comprehend the girl that always put others before herself.. so far am liking Anjali tormented by memories who although grasped onto her fairytale is not oblivious to her chotte's pain the void in his eyes that continue to search for his soul..I especially loved your portrayal of ASR's anguish beautifully done could feel his pain at wanting her to shatter his illusions.. not finding the courage to stop the women that completed his every breath.. felt for Nisha as well.. the poor girl has no idea what she's getting herself into.. as you can see Loved it to bits update soon.. :)

So sad...two people put together and both wanting their past love that they ha thrown away...god there;s going to be a lot of tears and heartbreaking updates by the looks of it!!!

How much he wished he could defy everything and change that moment when she had looked at him the last time with a small hope that he would stop her. How much he wished that he could stand up for her but he couldnt...no one would let him - his responsibilities, his family, his past.

Originally posted by: Shruti_P

aww arnav realised his mistakes quite late hon

because she was not only the victim of Shyam Manohar Jha but also of Arnav Singh Raizada.

this line made me...😭

the anguish of arnav was very well written👏

and nisha is going to stay at RM and even on that he is remembering khushi aww😭

great update continue soon

PS update ab main kya karoon? plzz Rae

sorry i should not say here but cant resist myself😛

Originally posted by: Hot.Pink.Heels

Oh dear! That was so painful yet beautiful!
Seeing the unbreakable Raizada laid bare was strangely intriguing!
I'm glad u gave us a glimpse of the agony and pain he is suffering without Khushi!
Oh I wonder why he didn't stop Khushi when he found out she was innocent?! Guess we'll find out soon?

Awesome update!
Continue soon :)

Originally posted by: Firebolt

"How much he hoped she was happy and satisfied and well without him there to corrupt her life.

Too bad she wasn't there to listen to any of his cries."

That is such an Arnav thing to do... So he let her go... but still hasn't let go of her.. from his heart i mean... that's not very fair towards Nisha.. Then again Nisha has some what the same disposition as well.. this is a business transaction for them.. nothing more.. a mere convenience..

Since you asked for feedback here are my two cents where your writing is concerned

I am definitely liking the way you're writing... the tone... the shift between the POVs are all done very nicely and smoothly... You got Arnav's anguish bit really well... and Nisha's hesitance and feeling of being cornered were brought about very well...

A word of caution though introducing your own characters is good... very good in fact... But when you put out a work of fanfiction then your appealing to your readers' love for IPKKND/which ever show... So too many new names not a good idea... Though i am loving Nisha and i am sure i'll love Shramn too... but other than that my only suggestion would be to pick knows names while introducing additional(i am loving the leads!)characters.. that will reach out to the audience more, IMO.

Cheers

-Shri-

Originally posted by: Inked

The girl whose dreams he had crushed and whose soul he had broken and who he had left as hollow as she had found him.

The above seemed to encapsulate the impetus/catalyst--and in his earlier comments, I feel he is trying to right a wrong--with a new woman. He doesn't want to crush another woman. The first episode where he wants to send her a car and she refuses, he doesn't impose it on her as the old ASR would have. I wonder if that is the lesson from his life with Khushi: give a woman space.

But, I STILL don't want him to be without Khushi.

(Maya drumming fists on table and howling indecorously!)

Originally posted by: Psychedelic

This one broke my heart Rae. I really feel for Arnav. :(
How selfish is it of their families to do what they think is best for them. Nani is refusing to see what is right in front of her. I wish Anjali had the will to do more for her Chotte than just bend to Nani's wishes.

So her grandad is Italian and her Grandmom acts as translator. Nani's dialogue about how caring Nisha was literally made me cringe. Not because I have something against Nisha but because we have heard this in so many different ways and so so many times about Khushi.

Nisha has Daddy issues? Whats all this about redemption?

Looking forward to more of Khushi. :)

Originally posted by: Krani

The pain in both Arnav and Nisha was so well described that I could almost feel the awkwardness, the fear, the helplessness...it was brilliantly written!!

Great update! :)