Tumse hi...(rt mc ff)updated{epi 5 on page 27}

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Hi friends!!!🤗
As you all know that I have an immense fondness for the magical couple RT MC,I thought of penning down something on them.I dedicate this fiction to my sweet sis rashu(sweetsanyo) who insisted me on writing something on our favourite couple.The basic idea of this story is the production of her smart brain.Hope I'll be able to entertain you and if it turns out to be a nightmare then I am really sorry for that.
Okay...now enough of my speech😆.
I am not giving any character sketch now.They will be introduced as the story progresses.


Tumse hi...


tumse hi shikwa,

tumse hi shikayat,
par yeh bhi sach hai,
tumse hi mahobbat...















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INDEX
epi 1- page 1
epi 2-page 8
epi 3-page 15
epi 4-page 21
epi 5-page 27

Edited by prahelika - 13 years ago
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Epi-1


India...


It was early morning.The rising sun had spreaded its blazing luminous beauty along the eastern horizon.The vast mustard field spreded its golden-yellow cover on the ground hiding its view from the sun.The little flowers were swaying their heads as if prancing in delight with the rhythm of the gentle fragrant breeze.

A pair of delicate,fair and soft hands were caressing them.Her lips curved a little only to form the sweetest smile one could have ever seen or ever wished to cherish while feeling the innocence of those little golden blossoms.The soft rays of the sun were reflecting back from her smooth ivory skin making it shimmer even more brightly.Her jet black,silk-soft hair streaks were glossing and scattering in the light morning breeze.

She laid down on the velvety sheet of grass carpet closing her eyes and facing the sky as if soaking as much energy from the crimson sun as her petite figure permitted.

"Muskaan...where are you?"A girl of around 23-24 years of age was calling out while searching for someone and stepping forward hastily.

Muskaan snapped open her eyes.It sounded like her elder sister,Simran.She quickly raised from there and sat on the grass cover looking at the direction where her sister was coming from.

"What are you doing at this hour of morning di?You know I love to spend this time only with me."She said lazily though it sounded like a bit annoyed.

"I have seen a beautiful dream on the previous night.As soon I woke up in the morning I ran to your room."Simran explained excitedly

" You were gone as usual.So I came looking for you here.But why do I feel that you are not very keen to know about whatever i dreamt?"she added disappointedly hanging her face down.

"C'mon di.I am only irritated at the fact that you are acting like a hysteric since the day your marraige has been fixed.I mean..ever random girl gets marraied at some point of their life.So what's the big deal?"Muskaan tried to make her understand her own reason.

"Yeah...of course you'll say that now.After all,I am just like a random annoying guest in our house now and shall be gone by a month.Then why will you care about my emotions now?"Simran retorted remorsefully.

"God! Every day same drama"Muskaan nodded her head in a hopeless manner while these words escaped her lips in a very inaudible tone.

"What?What did you say just now?"Simran asked her suspiciously as she was sure that her little sister was not mumbling some very good words for her.

"Err...nothing.Now vomit whatever is in your mind off."Muskaan pulled simran's hand swiftly making her sit beside her and then both laid down again facing the sky.

"All right.Now listen carefully.Yesterday he came into my dream."Simran said dreamily.

"Umm...who did come di?"Muskaan decided to have some fun out of her sister's monotonous,boring,overtly expressive dream.

"It's Sameer.Who else could it be?"Simran was irritated at the abrupt hault in her ever-so-exciting story."Now don't interrupt me.Otherwise the story will loose its charm."

Screw this charm.Muskaan thought making a very unusual weird face.

Simran started again"So where was I?...Oh yes..he came towards me riding on a white horse and..."

"And he kneeled down in front of you...asked for your fair hand...you give it to him shyly...he slipped a diamond studded platinum ring through your finger...and you two continued your horseride and then happily ever after.Story finished."Muskaan completed her description making her voice sound annoyed and bored at the same time.

"Gosh!...exactly the same events occurred in my dream."Simran inquired in astonishment."How do you know all these?"

"First answer my one question.What kind of unique brain you got that never get fed up of imagining the same situation over and over?"muskaan complained making a adorably grimaced face."This is why I call you hysteric...di."

"Look,who's talking!What do you know about romance,huh? You are the tedious one here not me."Simran snapped at her quickly.

"Well...if reaching the limit of the height of perversion makes you romantic then i would better be off with being unromantic."she was no less than her elder sister."And I have my own kind of choice but that is not really mindless like yours."

"Okay.Then tell me what kind of life partner do you wish...my intellegent sister?"Simran quered her in evident interest.

Muskaan's mind wondered for several seconds.She looked at her di who was waiting in sheer amusement.

"Umm...he should possess a pure heart,should be a good human being who would respect his elders irrespective of their status.He won't have any bad habits like smoking or drinking.He would never look at any other girl except me in that way.He would not look down upon our culture and ethics.He may not be a wealthy in a materialistic way or so much good looking...but should have a golden heart where I can make my own place."she disclosed all those in one breath almost.
It could be clearly seen that her deep black eyes were lost somewhere.

"Hmm...not bad."Simran remarked at her sister's desire.

"But what if you fall in love with someone who is exactly opposite of whatever speech you gave right now?"she asked her in a teasing tone.

"Why do you think at the first place my head is filled with the same stuffs like that of you?I have always been independent regarding my thinkings.I'll judge him by myself and then only I'll love him."Muskaan nodded thoughtfully.

"Once you fall in love with someone and all your rationality will disappear into thin air.No matter how many negative points he has you just can't stop loving him."the offended girl responded to her as wisely.

"In your dreams."Muskaan grimaced irritably and got ready to got up from her leisurely repose.

"Well...let's just wait and watch"Simran snarled at her.




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when Hisar,the humble village of Hariyana was filled with light,activity,energy and happiness,on the contrary London was captured in ear-dumping rubbish noise.
india was in light and London in dark all captured for mindless things,with no desires,actually not living lives, simply existing and pretending to be living...




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London...


"you need not to wait for him,Maria" Mr. Samar Pratap Chauhan told her in utter disappointment.
The sheer hopelessness in his voice was almost tangible.

"But sir...he may return after a few hours.I can wait for him during this time.You need not to worry sir...I'll make sure he eats something before going to sleep."Mrs. Fernandez acknoeledged with curtsy.

"That is so nice of you to care for him so much,you know"Mr. Cauhan replied gratefully "If only he could have a little respect for you..."he sighed after thinking of the impossibility.

"Please don't say like this,sir"Mrs. Fernandez said quickly "I always look upon him as my own son.He's very young.I'm sure he will mend his way once he realizes his wrong deeds."

"There you go...always defending him..no matter how much arrogant he's towards you."Mr. Chauhan said in amusement.

She gave a gentle smile at the humble taunt.

"Do whatever you wish to do,Maria.But i doubt he'll come back tonight at all."He affirmed in frustration.It's been 12:30 am."




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The flashing lights would be unbearable and dazzle any sane person's sensitive eyes present in that huge hall.But thankfully the nightclub was congested with a mass of drunkard,partially crazy,wild youngsters.Some of them were sitting on the sofas idly and drinking until there foodpipe was full.Some couple were enjoying some private intimacy at the public place.And a huge bunch of people were tapping their feet with the hard rock music on the dance floor.

Some of them were dancing hastily.It can be easily interpreted that they are not really trained dancers and just enjoying the cheerfull night.The rest were shaking their legs in a very skillfull way.But the most fine movements and steps were giving the man,rather a boy,who was not only at the cetre of the floor but centre of the attention of other people present there too.There was a certain energy radiating from his body movements a if wiping off all his distresses and worries.Others were clapping at his excellent performance with joyful noises and shouts.

"Avyukt!"another boy shouted amongst the massive crowd.

The boy,who was enjoying every bit of the intoxicating moments and prancing to his heart's content in the middle of the floor,stopped on his track and his chocolate-brown eyes flickered as if searching for the source of the call that included his name.





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Edited by prahelika - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wah wag wah for me
dekho dekho m yha sbse phle 😎
mera to jwab hi nhi
ab to pakka ye ff ROCK kregi pakka ji pakka 🤗
luv u di
ek or ff
balle balle 🤗
muskan se sanyo yaad aa gai missing PRC
chlo ye sb chodo
kya baat h muskan bhut jaldi uth gai
lgta h di bhi jldi hi uthti hongi tbi muski bhi jldi uthi
vaise ache bachche jldi nhi uthte like me 🤗
uthna bhi nhi chahiye 😛
vaise jo maza sone me h vo subh subh uthne me nhi
chlo bhut ho gai meri speech sone k upr ab next ud me ok
ye simar such me bhut boring h ek hi trh ka spna roz roz 🤣 oh god
muski jhelo apni sis ko koi ni kuch din ki hi to baat h
muski ki speech abt her dream boy 🤣
bt avi to uska thik ulta lgta h 😆
ek baat to shi khi simaran ne jab pyar hoga to uski gltiya nhi dikhengi
awww avi dance karing 🤗
waooo m flat on u avi 😳 🤗
m in my LALA LAND
avi rocks [:D/] [:D/]
di u to rock [:D/]
m to fan ho gai aapki
luv u so much di
ab hme jldi se next ud chahiye (order😛 )
😎
Edited by princesspriyart - 13 years ago
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😆so lets start with ma punch line, dedicated to di.- MA DI ROXXX...🤗...
i really din knew ki u can write so fab, earlier...
but di jabse maine aapki writing padhi h, by god...u really made me a fan of urs.

u r awesome...mindblowing...⭐️...

maine kaha tha na, u will rock...n see its true...

ab aap bhi rtmc ff writer's club main aa gaye ho...
so party again...🥳...


meri di ka naya ff aaya h...


dhol tho jarur bajega......


bhangra bhi hoga...


meri di ne ff likha h...🤗...

your description abt the morning scene in india n nite scene of london is sooperbo.

just could see it while reading...👏...

luved ur dialogues...to the point and damn freaking...especially muskaan's.
i really loved them...😳...

belive me, maine sach main yeh poora ud vapas padha tha, coz i loved it, though maine nite main bhi padha tha.😍
but maine vapas padha, kyun na padhoon, meri di ka ff h...😍...

it really feels so awesome di ki i m commenting on ur ff,...😳...

aap nhi sanjhoge...sacchi, mujhe kudh samajh nhi aa raha ki mujhe kya ho raha h...
its really strange, n i m serious...😃...

matlab aap jab mere ff par comment parte ho nah!, bilkul vahi feeliing, but thodi si jyada usese...🤔...thodi aur jyada, 🤔thodi si aur jyada...🤗...thodi si aur bhi kar lo...🤗

dis story is gonna rock...

so ab ud par bhi comment sun lo-
morning scene desc. ws so magical, 😍muski's entry is so perfect, can't be better than this...u were all perfect here.

simran is really hysteric😆, really don't she gets bored of seeing the same dream again again🤣...her monotonous brain.

muski is a early raiser, hmmm...🤔
hope muski ki sangat mainmain bhi sudhar jaon,.
but prazi di mere saath jyada rahti h...tho ho sakta h, ki unka influence mujhapr jyada h, tab tho main suhdne nhi waali
writer hi kudh loyal to sleep h, tho main kya karon😆
avyukt a dancer, haye mar javan uski har ada h khatilana...
chaa gaya di yeh ud...chaa gaya...

we all will love to have dis,...😳...di u will be rocking...👍🏼...

muski n avy rocks...😎...

love u di for writing it, mujhe pata h u will make this story dazzling, i believe......

love u di.🤗

ud soon.(yeh tho har writer bolna padta h...😉..)
Edited by sweetsanyo - 13 years ago
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Res...

Edited...

Ok first I would say that I'm sooo happy to see a new RTMC ff...😃

Thanks a lot for sending me the buddy request and now I'll wait for the pm...

Thanks again... Continue soon 😳
Edited by aysha1989 - 13 years ago
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one more...RT-MC FF...🥳...thanx for sharing...🤗
loved the way u started it...the way simran called her from behind...
the whole scene reminds me of sanyo's entry...it's a little bit of same na...😍
n simran...dreamy,dreamy girl...our poor muski is annoyed with her useless talks...but not able to say anything...big sis hai na...hum tumhara dard samajh sakte hain...muski...😳
simaran is telling muski about her dreams...which she already knew...😲
she knew the whole line which simran is going to say...n she herself said the whole dream...😆
n the lines she said...describing...her so called mr. future perfect...
every single girl on this earth will say the same when u ask them about their dreamboy...
that he should be perfect,respect others...but when they fall in love...😍
saari list dhari ki dhari reh jaati hai...😳...then they didn't need any mr. perfect...they love them as they are...muski ke saath bhi yahi hoga...dekhna...😉
what ever she said about her dreamboy...avyukt is totally apposit of it...
but as says opposite attracts...so lets see when,where n how they are going to attract...towards each other...😍
really liked the intro scene...dancing in middle...
n the centre of attraction of whole night club...n dancing with full force...good u described it very well...ekdum hero wali entry...😎...(i mean bigde rahis wali entry...😉...)...👍🏼
well the starting is really good...n the title name...amazing...👏
thanx for the pm...n i m in ur pm list...
n all the best...for ur journey to this ff...👍🏼
update soon...
luv u...😊

Edited by ridzzi - 13 years ago
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yeah !!!! RT MC ff !!! 🥳
thnx n congrats !!!
d story is realy intrstng !!!! 😃
i luv their names !!!!
u descrbd d scenes beautifully !!
likd d sarcasm n ur choise of words !!!
do PM me when u write !!! 🤗

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Fantastic start

plz add me to ur pm list nd update soon
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wowww 1 more RTMC ff

Yipeee
main pagal hi na ho jau aaj kal har jagah mujhe RTMC dikh rahe hai

back to ur writing
it was so awesome
loved reading the starting

continue soon
n yes mere comments chote hi honge so dnt think ki m not reading it seriously i do read every RTMC ff seriously but i hv short of time so always give short comments


:)

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