Arhi FF:Mirage Note pg 158 for next thread link - Page 48

just read all the parts ...got to say all the parts were awsome loved em...continue soon

Loved the updates. Poor Arnav, I felt bad for him when he was reliving his nightmare. Scars may heal but memories never fade.
So Lavanya's falling for Arnav?? Ooh that's not good if she's friends with Khushi and Arnav isn't impressed that khushi didn't give him a chance to explain?? Well that's what you get Mr when your rude to someone who saved your life.
Can't wait to read the next few chapter. Thanks for the pm.xx

Originally posted by: curledup

OK! I can't find my last reserved post so I decided to just comment anyway! *scratches head* hey don't look at me like that, you will have more pages and comments as well 😆

OKAY SO FIRST OFF I am in love love love love love with your work, it is absolutely beautiful 😳 really, you have flow! 😃 I normal stalk but I decided to post 😳

So chapter 1:

KILLER SUSPENSE OR WHAT? 😲 he got shot? nahi! but his torso, with blood 😍 << OK something is wrong with me and he isn't rich in this one is he? 😃 but still a cynic I am guessing? 😲 nahi! maat bano aise! oh no, that's what khush khush is for. Looks like bua-ji isn't any different. Man she peeves me off sometimes. Honestly. They way you described that paragraph actually scratch that, the entire last bits were beautifully written! Ever since she found him, her hands the white dupatta against the red red blood. And then she pulls it out 😲 Looks like they have been through so much together already. This is amazing. And then when his voice softens I went all gushy. This was an amazing start. 😍 But will they meet again? 😕 She picks up the bullet? aye hai! prem Ki nishani already 😍

Chapter 2:

Buaji- GR! she is just, gr ring! but who is the doctor? 😲 and he saved his life? what has arnav been involved in? 😲 suspense is killing me no no don't worry I am not actually dead. But if you don't update soon I might 😆 I'm joking 😆 don't get mad and she is already praying for him? I am gushy gushy. Your updates so far have gotten me all emotional then shocked then gush gush! man you are one capable writer! 😃

Chapter 3:

AWW aren't Khush Khush and La two opposites? but I suppose that's what keeps them together 😃 ARJUN IS NOT YOUR PRINCE CHARMING! 😡 and also the way the friendship is dictated is amazing <3

Chapter 4:

ITS AAKASH! woot woot! somewhere in my mind I thought it was him. I love the role Aman plays, its nice, its like Arnav isn't as alone as he considers himself to be. And I'm guessing Arnav is now a gunda? this reminds me of the title 'guns and roses' I love Arnavs protective ness, he isn't as steely as one could perceive.

Chapter 5:

LONG UPDATE! wohhoo! why can he not remember her? *Sad pout* I am actually pouting at my screen 😕 I am one demented child. Anyway, he has her white dupatta, she has his bullet. This is *Sigh* definitely a reminder of 'guns and roses' Two star-crossed loves indeed. Shyam 😡 😡 SICKO! SICKO SICKO! << I am swearing here 😡 I bet he plotted against him! stupid sicko! Thats right Arnav, I love it when he says the hell to pay for thing. Its like I can picture it in my head. DOES HE DIE? WHOS SHOULDER? IS IT ACTUALLY HIS? 😲

Chapter 6:

The glass? *phew* I feel better! It would've been intense if Khush khush found out the guy she was praying for killed her best friends dad. Awe nanav! don't feel sad, it isn't the first time its going to happen 😆 loads of hits and misses with khushi. what are they going to do with La? MOO! AWW they are all going, that's so cute! maybe they will meet? 😉

Chapter 7:

HELLO HI BYE BYE! he can't remember her? what? you stupid stupid stupid! 😡 😡 sorry. Amazingly written! SIGH! his dreamy voice and he can't take his eyes off her? wahaay another sign amongst many 😉. RIGHT! now this pedo oh wait- khushi can look after herself! boy am I proud! GUESS WHAT? I DO KICKBOXING!! I thought I should just add that, been doing it ever since a workshop was introduced in P.E and been doing it since 😆. hah aha lusting after your behen! another amazing chapter, you have captured Khush Khush's character beautifully, as well as Arnavs awe!

Chapter 8:

AWWW NANAV! *RUNS TO HUG* its OK! khushi is on her way 😆 she shall make it better! I hope 😉 and if she doesn't then...well lets not think about that. cold showers eh? wonder how many more he is going to take in the future? 😉 boy I am one messed up 16 year old. HAW arnav sweating and hot *gulps* *deep breath* yes I need to control myself! now coming back to him, is he flirting with her? oh no! then she will be conflicted when khush khush falls for him. specially if they kidnapped! SHE CRASHED INTO A HARD CHISELED BODY? woman you really want me to die 😆 awe she is so cute. especially with the rabbits 😉 << yeah with a wink that sounds terrible.

Chapter 9:

whoa he was jogging too? 😆 SHE RECOGNIZES HIM! o mg I am jumping in my chair. that tension between them too I can feel it. whoa! awe she is so cute, take everything. AWW! 😳 AWW even more, the way she says his name and how he steps back. no vulnerable-nuss for Arnav. NO NANAV! awe that is so adorable. Its like innocence meets cruelty. Beautifully portrayed! NO nanav no flirting, you are ruining your chances with khushi! don't do it! 😡 having said that, Arnavs character is amazingly written, :D

Chapter 10:

NOAH! someone is a stalker, that's way too many coincidences! BUT I loved this one. And its 10 to 10 pm here and I'm tired. So I will comment on this chapter when you put the next one up 😉 Till then have a good day matey!

-Aashifa

PS: COULD I make you a banner? for your fic? 😃

awesome updates..
carry on..
thanxx for d pm..

i read all 5 together so it was AWESOME SUPERBLY GREAT...

I shall make you a banner now :D

a fabulous FF! hw i Looove yr updates!

Thanks for the PM. Very nice updates. Looks like Lavanya is getting interested.

thnx for the pm.loved the update...