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khusiarnav

@khusiarnav

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#741

Needless to say how much i loved the update!!

apologies for late comment... got stuck up and i hate to comment using phone😆

Anyways... it was a treat hon!!! awesome... right from the start to end... khusi's week stay, arnavs jealousy, everything!!

Last chapter was hot!! I could totally imagine Arnav shirtless... "panting" 😳

and that last scene... i wish i could paint or sketch!! I can visualize that scene... Arnav sleeping holding the shirt and the hooded women at his window.. that owl and the moon!! just awesome... loved loved it!!

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penrith

@penrith

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#742

how can anyone write like this... its simply smooth and enchanting... i am amazed at how well your story flows

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Idealist11

@Idealist11

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#743

Woot!! Its getting hot in here! Lol. So yeah that was kinda exciting at the end there, lol. Looking forward to more as usual. Also, im interersted in seeing Nani's character development too and unraveling the mysteries of the castle and its inhabitants.

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hellgirl

@hellgirl

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#744

maaza aagaya...👏
wow khushi is in second week of her stay...
that sward fighting scene was well written...akash is a good defencer and arnav is attacker just like their character ...poor khushi arnav is really out of contrel...well his anger is world famous...*sigh*
lavanya and khushi r doing well...
and wait did we all saw relief in his eyes that means he is worried for her...*mentally patting myself*
thae little update is awesome*although it is not at all little**wink*

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serialmaniac

@serialmaniac

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#745

Well well so the dark lady knows that arnav khushi is destiny...maybe thtas y she visited khushi as a child...there is a prophecy somewhere about these two meeting.

But the question remains...what is arnav's curse?

Hot wax resembles hot tea on arnav from the sertial. Oh great so many arshi scenes!!!! *fainted away till next post*

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shass

@shass

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#746

There are times whn am left speechless n in a strange blissful,awe-struck state ; n i dnt feel lyk saying nethg coz i cn neither find da words nor da will to say wt i feel,aftr i hv finishd reading ur beautiful work..bt thn am haunted by da thought of upsetting u n i hv to muster up all my strength to pen down my thoughts.. its one of those days...
coming bk to da update.. SHEER BRILLIANCE!!⭐️
None of da symbols u used went un-noticed.. did u hint at da past too,dear Lin?vl she be da one to discover it first? or am i ovr imagining thgs?😕 bt if am goin in da ryt direction thn u evn hinted at da future.. hw da othr day v wr discussing shadows n darkness n today,khushi enters Lord Arnav's world, as i alws referred to his room n library..n lit it wth hr vry own hands..hw she'll b da one to hold control of his wrecked lyf n restore it to its ryt place..😉 the ice is breaking slowly,b/w khushi n lavaniya.. she hs startd to befriend all,save one; she hs bewitched him completely!!..who on da othr hand finds it impossible to ignore hr,tries evry trick to get hr attention n luvs to hv respect n care ,by hr, perhaps.. bt fails to not only acknowledge it bt understnd it too n it leaves to catastrophe evry single time.. he doesnt lyk hr being too close to da 2nd lord n all their previous cordiality,ddnt go un-noticed..finally cnt stand hr trying to run away frm hm n drags hr deeper into hs world,only to find hmslf, getting more n more vulnerable in hr presence n for da time being all he thnks of doing is,let go of hr..bt at evry othr occasion whn his possessiveness vl b provoked,he'll keep cumming bk,to claim wt he unknowingly considers his😳...since da strt of da story,i felt it ws hr eyes.. the windows to hr innocence n purity of hr soul..sumthg he actually fell fr..sumthg he,perhaps,thnks does not exists in da world.. sumthg dats da most beautiful n precious thg fr hm.. n dat explains why he hs strtd to demand dat she looked at him,ofcourse he undrstnds wt she's goin thru/thinks, coz he cn read hr eyes..he knws dat hr fierceness interests hm n challenges hm in a way,dat a brothr's cautiousness does not.. beautiful portrayal of ur characters dear friend,luvd their actions,reactions,strengths n weaknesses..aftr all dats wt dis story is all about ..❤️

Edited by shass - 12 years ago

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saga_twilight

@saga_twilight

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#747

S0 s0rry cudnt c0mment earlier(c0llege calls)
Beautiful update Aqua I like the way h0w y0u g0, sl0w and steady...and y0u never f0rget t0 menti0n Arhi c0ming t0gether, if it d0esnt fit in 0ne, y0u have multiple updates!!!
L0ve it!!!

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sharme

@sparklystarstud

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#748

here is my next installment of comments... sorry for being late... actually... being TOO LATE liny... i cant wait for this month to end and be free for some time...

Chapter 41

As I pointed out earlier... in the sense...lonnnggg back <in my prev comment>... you are full of surprises my girl!

General has been cursed just like the Lord... the village girl has the healing heart which can cure their curses... but her heart will belong to the First lord always as time runs... and that will make the beast in the General go crazy for attaining her... Marvelous concept! Keeping true to the logic...

So he's a werewolf.!!! So is my first lord by any chance a vampire... or is he a werewolf too...!!!

OMG! I had been calling my lordy lord as voldy lord... remember in HP, both Voldy and Harry carry the same curse... one cannot live while the other survives... now either my lord or the general should have the girl love them to be cured... one cannot have her when the other holds her heart! YIPEE! **dun dun dun!!!

Chapter 42

The starting part was adorable... Khushi feeding the cake to Ram who munched on it happily... Hiyaa!

Working at the industry...uh huh!!!

Why do you put in sooo many question marks n doubts abt things... ok.. I know the answer...

To keep us guessing until u reveal the truth nah!!! So what are they doing inside that industry...

Does it contain more of my Lord's secrets...!!! Or is it something else entirely...I WONDER!!!!

Chapter 43 & 44

He has no heart yet a mind that's haunted by the only face he WANTED to hate... So hurting her is the only choice... Poor lord! Hurting her means hurting yourself and the so called your non-existent heart...which still beats though, unheard by your ears'!!! Beats for finding its match... the heart that will heal you!

Tiny happenings...oh really!!!

I can read the hidden encrypted words my dear... Tiny as in pretty HUGE!!!

God save the girl...!!!

Chapter 45

Chocolate making... sword making... now silk weaving joins the list!!! **heheee

I had once been to silk weaving plant... it was one of my most horrible experiences... cause I have some kinda phobia to all creepy crawly worms... they disgust me the most!!!!

And looking at all those silk worms eating their way thru those leaves... I threw-up, almost.. bt then rushed out of the damned place as my head started spinning... was haunted by those nightmares for a couple of weeks after that!!!!

Okay...enough of my self-rants!!!

There goes the dumb peacock with beautiful dove by her side... to be frowned upon by the monkey lord in there... Hmmm... nt monkey lord...definitely no...coz he's My Voldy lord!!!!

Chapter 46

Lovely... water splash...water fight already!!!!

OMG!!! I didn't think she would shook him by his collar... bt that's just a tiny thing done in revenge to the guy who tried to kill you...

Ah ha! So Lady La is the "interruption"... **ahem!!!

HILARIOUS!!!! Imagining the water pouring on the dumber's head from the umbrella... Lolz 😃

AMAN!!! Can you post in a picture of him ??!?? so that we'll try imagining the poor guy!!!

14 days'!!! Cant wait to read them... wanna see how Voldy's ring looks like...next time when he comes, remind me nah!!!

Chapter 47

I cant believe that GENERAL WHACKO wrote her a letter... Sooo CHEEZZZYYY!!!!

Hopefully she doesn't write back to him...

Chapter 48

Clean the room!!!! What the hell is Voldy thinking... He is out of his minds...

Oh!!! He's planning to make her feel discomfit... But still, it's a silly plan owing to the fact that he's too disturbed by her innocent presence... Lolz😆

Clean the horses!!! What the????

Chapter 49

Measure each gold silk stack!!!! Creating jobs for her to do...

Im dead damn sure Voldy has gone loony now... All becoz of this simple village girl...

Home now coffin... I feel bad for the worms even though they irk me and for Khushi who was forced to do degumming...

I can just imagine how she ran back and forth collecting the wet n semi dried clothes... Lolz!!!

It happened to me once...

NO WAYS... She wrote him back... stupid stupid girl!!!!

Chapter 50 & 51

GREEN HEART!!!!

OMGEEE... nani came out of her room... And went inside voldy's room...

He was looking out from under the bed... heheheee 😆

Oh!!! I know very well which is a healing heart...GREEN HEART!!!

Sooo... basically he is heartless... and needs a girl with a healing heart!!!

WHAT IS HE????

And I think that dream meant he was going to hurt the very girl he is thinking of now... Cruel general!!!

Chapter 52

Evilly eager Master...ROFTFL!!!!!!!😆

Ah ha!!! Tippedi tappedi dooo... the vision in RED!!!!

Awesome portrayal of the entire scene liny... Could see it unfold perfectly before my eyes!!!

He wanted the original... He has fallen and that too, pretty hard by the looks of it !!!!

Chapter 53

Oh no!!! Horse-back sounds bad...

And I was right... So this is how she finally quits from the job inorder to save her own life unlike the guest-house incident in the show...

Yippee!!!!! Gracie gone CRAZY!!! And now he is after her on his Shadow!!!! Lolz...😉

Chapter 54

AAAhhh!!!

The way Shadow leaped along with the rider astride and the lightning in the background...CLASSIC!!! 👏

Dark knight in shining armour!!!! He just swished in and swooped her up from the accursed Gracie...

Delighting TRANCE indeed...**naughty voldy!!!

She's not only messing with your sanity dear boy... but with your heartless soul as well!!!

Yes Arnav... How dare she try and make you ... feel like a frying man and she's your only Oasis...** doing a victory dance** he almost said IT...

No no young miss... how dare u call him detested while he was your savior! You could be dead right now if it was not for him...hmmm... Well, you wouldn't have been in that fatal position if it was not for him either... But I won't take it when you insult my Voldy!!!!

Chapter 55

TUG!!! Tug indeed... Lord Akash is flooored!!!!!

Nothing... oh really Miss. Gupta... wonder whats going on in Voldy lord's mind this instant...

seee... i read till C55... now on to the rest!!!!!😃

~~~ sam xoxo

Edited by sparklystarstud - 12 years ago

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Jammy-

@Jammy-

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#749

Hey Aquiline, I started reading this morning!! FINALLY!! :) Please bear with my musings! Head down to my little rant! I'll be completing it soon, I promise! ;)

Prologue had me a tad bit confused! by chapter one I was super intrigued! Khushi feels immensely out of place! Love the support Payal gives her!

Chapter2- "sadly looked at the door of his room where he would now be devouring the food to calm his..." HIS what? yes I yelled at that line because damn I was so engrossed!!
An exit for the lady in the dark, hmmm interesting!

Chapter 3- So Payal introduced Arnav- the first Lord, Anjali- the sister, Aakash- the second lord, and Shyam - the General, Anjali's husband!
'what a lordy Lord' How ironic!
Loved how you described the Mansion from khushi's point of view.

Chapter 4&5- Aahhh! Khushi being Khushi!!! One of the best chapter so far! Because even though the era of this fic is different, the characters remain the same. Which brings me to Payal, Anjali and Arnav!
Payal- the ever cautious one!
Anjali- The ever friendly sweetheart!
Arnav- The laad Governor!!
Their first meet was excellent!!! Intense!! Fireworks all around!! The best part was how Khushi can read his eyes! Just too amazing!!!

Chapter 6- It brought tears in my eyes! Amma assuming it's Garima, welcomed the child with open arms! Wondering if Khushi will ever accept her as her mother! I love Payal even more now, she knows her little sister a little too much. Knows that if she directly heads for the room then there is something wrong! My heart is filled with immense love for the bond that the Gupta family share! Also for the bond that Anjali and Arnav share- Saw a glimpse of it in Chapter2.

Chapter 7- "You've fallen many times before. What kind of a fall was it that you would turn...so strange and broken?"- A line so simple yet so meaningful! Some fall's are harder then the others! I love this Chapter! The talk about the Rose bush! How insightful was that! We often are mesmerized by the beauty of the Rose that we tend to ignore that it is protected by thorns! It's a beautiful conversation between the sisters!!

Chapter 8- ok I am confused! Khushi and Payal are describing Arnav right? The lordy Lord?? So how come Khushi is scared of meeting him? What would Arnav be doing at night, on the way to the mill?! And why did khushi say I saw him but he didn't see me??? What and Who is she talking about? Arnav???
Coming to Arnav and Anjali, I love the conversation between them. Says a lot about the bond they share! I am also reminded of the time where the Characters were introduced,in the show! Brilliant writing skills!!

Chapter 9- Preparing indeed!! Preparing for the accidental meet?!! Oh, how I am excited for them to cross each other's path again!! <3

Chapter 10- Ahhh, we got our first unconscious Rabba ve! Reminds of line our Khushi recently said in the show, 'Bas pata chal jata hai! '

Chapter 11- Two people wishing for their siblings happiness! Khushi wishing for Payal, Anjali wishing for Arnav!! A siblings bond is soo beautifully described by you!
Ahh, so this khushi likes 'peanuts' that's interesting!

Chapter 12- Urmmm sorry but I had to say this, Amma acted cowardly! If she felt so angry and bad about what Lord Arnav said, why didn't she give him a piece of her mind there and then? Why wait for him to leave and then vent out your frustration? Anyways we do know how Arnav is so I guess it's ok!

Chapter 13- Ah, a second meeting!! A feisty khushi is what I adore!! I love how she replied back to him! She discovered yet another side to him! He is not only heartless but he is also a non believer! Lord Arnav is getting on my nerves by the way! He is rude to everyone, all the time!!! Not a huge of fan of thr mighty Raizada, at this point of time!

Chapter 14-' laad governor' is upto something, eh? I despise how everyone is so fearful of him! Huh! Lordy lord! Told ya, not a fan of him, right now!

Chapter 15- Anjali is a sweetheart! I love the fact that Lordy lord is haunted by a 'beggar's eyes! Huh! About the changing comment- wait till you ,change, Lord Arnav!!

Chapter 16- The visitor is surely the General?! I like the way you have described little details of the surroundings!! Brilliant writing!

Chapter 17- I could totally imagine the festival!! An excited khushi and Payal, Hardwork of Master Shashi and Garima! The last line is scary as well as exciting!

I could go on and read the rest of the story but damn I have got work to do! I hope you don't mind me splitting my comments like this! But I thought by the time I reach the end my feelings will change so I decided to pen down my thoughts along the way!! I hope it's ok. If not, then let me know, I'll comment when I am done reading all of it!!

For the record, this is one piece of fantastic FF has got me hooked! This fantasy world is very intriguing. A alternate universe! Thank you for introducing it to me!

I could have read the 18th chapter to put an end to my curiosity, but I really should be going if I want clear my test!

P.s- Symbolism and I don't go well! I can't comment on something I am not sure about but my memory is good! So if something pops up and reminds me of things, I'll let you know! Again Great work with this Fic! I loved it!!

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sharme

@sparklystarstud

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#750

here are my final installation of comments... u outdid all the other the chapters you have written so far Lady Lin... u have spun the enchanted tale in an enthralling way that i cannot stop myself from reading it... will be in the Cave of Arhasian Comrades this saturday for sure... finalllyyy im coming back to my favorite place...

Chapter 56

Kiss anywhere' But not on the lips!!!! Now what does that mean...

Ofcourse... BLOOD RED!!! Vampire!!! You are still not revealing what he is?!?!?

And the horse incident is the parking lot rain incident... hmpf!!!

And the grainage will be the guest house incident...alright... BRING IT ON!!!

Chapter 57

Caught the cat in the act... heheee

Tell me something I DON'T KNOW!!!!

Oh you stupid girl... who told you to go deeper into the forest and just end up giving more trouble to my voldy... now he's going to get her!!!!

Little red eyes, pawing after her... and OH! The tree was HIM... my Voldy... TELL ME SOMETHING I DON'T KNOW!!!!

Beautiful Yearning Hungry young man?!?!?! Where in the world did that come from!!!! BLIMEY!!!

Raw hunger??? For her ofcourse... **face palm

Now... why does he sound like terribly handsome Vamp talking to his prey!!!

Destroy her inch by inch... and kill yourself in the process... Oh God!!! When will he ever understand!!!

This girl should watch her tongue...

Fiery kitten... Oh oh ho!!! You are actually talking to the lioness herself Sire...

Hands... COLD!!! What is HE...???????

Burning body... yet Cold hands... what are you pointing to liny!!!! This thing is putting me on edge...

Neck... maiden skin... taste!!!! This is freaking me out...

Beautiful description of the little encounter I dare say Lady Liny... Voldy lord fascinated by the young maiden's moonlight kissed skin...

Lady Liny... Pardon my language... but what the effing heck happened right there...

Animal instincts... him kissing her neck... Fire-works were expected... but still...!!!

WHOA!!! My comment for the longest chapter is long indeed... this chapter has left me confused, yet wanting for more...

Chapter 58

He brought her home... and I was wondering about her neck after all the kisses he rained upon them...

Thank god he covered her with the blanket!!! Sooo... is he a VAMPIRE Lady Lin???

Chapter 59

So she dreamt of the fateful night... Interesting!!!

Seriously girls... bed-bugs!!! **facepalm

Chapter 60 61 62 & 63

Yes girl!!!! That's it... that's the anger...GO GET HIM!!!

Squashing him and stamping him to the ground... I wonder from where she lands up with such crazed ideas... Marvelous!!!!

NOOO...not the Roses!!! Oh... thats why the roses distracted her, cause the object of her anger is standing near the lake...

No No No... going to him in this maddened state with hiked up anger was the most worst decision Miss. Gupta... especially when the man in question was standing by the lake... you should have listened to your Buaji... uh oh!!! MORNING BATH!!!

Oh yesss!!! Good of you Fortune that Anjali and Nani saw her...

Fashion-struck flamingo!!!! I love you Nani ji...

I wonder how Rahim Chacha's face would have looked when he saw his master literally dragging the helpless girl to the brim of the lake... HILARIOUS!!!

EPIC WAR... ofcourse... Love was always the warring of hearts when it came to these two fools...

Khushi... staying in the same house as him... that sounds like the on-set of the next catastrophical storm..

NO!!!! thought sooo... dramatic two letter word!!!

OMG!!! He spoke THAT much in a single breath... and oh yes my voldy... you just thought about that village girl once again...

Fool... she will stay at the castle as well as capture the rightful place in your heart as well...!!!

Chapter 64 65 66 & 67

Oh no!

He's having dreams too... my poor voldy!!!

Why is he soo clingy towards his Di... he should realize the worth of his own life...

And no Lady Anjali... Khushi is not only coming to perfect out Lady La's ruffled out feathers... but also subdue your brother's yearnings for a soulmate!!!

Wondering what kind of image the Second Lord would have created in the mind of the un-suspecting servant... Akash is ridiculous when it comes to Payal...

Well... that was a twist from the actual track... Khushi going to stay at the dark castle... she's scared of the dark... and sleeping alone nah... wondering what that might lead too... probably few midnight encounters with The Beast!!!!

The future was about to touch old wounds and create new ones... Well put words!!!

Sooo... Nani loves her already...

Coffin for a room... a big no from me cuase im kinda claustrophobic... can't even ride an elevator without a person to cling on to!!!

OMGEEE!!! I didn't think Voldy would dare enough to confront her... well... more like frighten her when there was a chance of any1 walking up on them... good god! Him and his nerves... poor girl!!!

NOOO... not the hooded-lady once again... so this is what she wanted to happen from the start of the story...

Ah ha!!! Will be there next Saturday for sure... Cave of Arhasian Comrades... and don't forget to add in the famous Chocolate liquor too in one of the barrels...

BOOK OF THE COMRADES' CHRONICLES!!!! I love the sound of it...

OMG... dingle found the replica of the Castle... I found one too while roaming aimlessly in Arhasia... but dunno whether this is THE CASTLE... coz it is not high on a cliff!!!

Chapter 68 69 70 71 & 72

Oh!!! Lady Mamiji calls her "Rags"... should've seen it coming...!!! wonder what she'll call her soon-to-be DIL Payal...

"little beacon of faith" indeed... she brings in light and happiness wherever she treads into...

Wicked Khushi... taunting the ever-silent Lord Akash... poor guy!!! Can't even voice out his queries after the girl holding his heart... unlike his Voldy mouthed bro!!! **booh

She can never relax now... can she??? Especially when being in the enemy's territory itself...

Him looking at her in inexpressible delight... ofcourse!!! He just won't show it though... ** wonder if he'll feel tiny bit the same when I finally see him this weekend after our circle's meet... I miss him dearly...

No... this doesn't sound good atall... them both being left alone was never the best thing considering how thick both of their hot-heads were...

"Look at me"... what in the world is bothering him now... all this while he wanted to get rid of her, and now he can't stand her indifference!!! Poor bloke...

See... I told you it would end in catastrophy when they both were left alone with that ever bickering minds...

Hate the man more than she could ever hate... now dear maiden... I want to tell you how wrong you are and how ardently you'll be loving this very man... but Lady Lin might just kick me out of her Circle if I dared to utter a single word about this to you... wish I could meet you one day and be a friend for you just like being the friend of your First Lord...

Ah ha!!! Sword-fighting... finally something I love and wish to see while Voldy Lord is in action...

Lord Arnav's swiftness in initiating the blows kinda shows how he always makes the prime decisions and his confidence... and Lord Akash's swiftness in defending, shows the kind of practicality with which he leads his life... the difference between the brothers!!!

"Someone willing to fight with a thirst to see me defeated"... that's your cue to step in maiden...

Evil...aren't we Voldy... attacking the un-suspecting girl who just came to collect water!!!

Lord Akash.. teaching Khushi sword-fighting... I just want to see the look on Voldy's face when he hears of this... PRICELESS!!! **hopefully...

Jealous are we My Voldy Lord... **heheee

Yes my young maiden... Defeat the Lord and be defeated!!! Lolz...

For a minute, Khushi talking about poetry reminded me of Elizabeth in Pride & Prejudice...

Oh yes... Khushi could be Elizabeth, Arnav could be Mr.Darcy, Akash could be Mr.Bingley, Payal could be Jane, Anajli could be Georgiana, Shyam could be Wickham... though the thing that might differ is Mamiji sounds like Mrs. Bennet... OMG!!! Where did I stray off... and that too to Pride & Prejudice... Good God!!!

Wordsworth is my favorite tooo...!!!!!

The Tyger... and that too to the dispassionate Lady La... talk about Fashions to the Flamingo girl...

The architect in me could clearly envision the setting of the Castle, and the word addict loved your descriptive words that gave form to my visions with almost HD quality...lolz!!!!

Seriously... after all the things he could have said or done to her after the candle light encounter, he asked her about her intentions with Akash!!! **facepalm... how thick is his head really Lady Lin!!!!

Im just sitting here spell bound at the little romantic yet classic Rabba-ve... and he asks her this!!! BINGO to you for rendering me truly speechless for the first time...!!!

Once again... their hot-headedness ruined the potentially enchanting moment and resulted in burnt sleeve and chest burns due to hot wax...

He gave her his shirt... im currently breathless...

Awwwiiieee... cutie cuddly Voldy Lordy slept clutching the shirt...

Oh no! not again... this hooded Lady spoils my share of fun by freaking me out with her insistent presence at the ends...

Hopefully I will sleep without her haunting my dreams too...

And try not giving Captain Sandman any chance at catching me around the inn anytime... just warn me if anyone came to see him lurking around there PLEASE MY BELOVED LADIES... he would drag me to the dungeons of dreamless sleeps which I hate the most... cause I can meet my Voldy Lord only in my dreams nah Lady Lin...!!!!

signing off for now...with a promise being in the Cave on saturday along wiht my snuggly teddy...

~~~ sam xoxo

Edited by sparklystarstud - 12 years ago