SS: Part4 Avenging Angel (Arhi, A Princess' Wrath)

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doony

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Posted: 13 years ago

#51

good one.I especially like that you have given Arnav dignity and resignation in his repentance.I wouldnt have wanted to see him grovelling.this is more impressive..

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meenaluma

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Posted: 13 years ago

#52

amazing updatye cant wait for next part

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Marybarton

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Posted: 13 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: Dinarochka
Hmm, I really like the first 2 parts of this OS.

IMO part 3 & 4 are sounding forced. Or maybe I just don't buy this royal/princess take on her story.

Firstly, all the dialogue's by Arnav about her 'aukat' in the first months were just hogwash, just a made up reason by him so that he could rationalize why she 'affected' him so much. ASR is nonchalant & cynical, so why did he care about this 'aukatless' small town girl? Why did he think about her or care for her?Taunting her about her 'aukaat' was like a defense mechanism.

So, now Khushi throwing her so called royal status in his face sounds forced. She'd never do it. It's not in her character.

I see you show her suffering too, for being mean to him. It's in her character. That is good.

As for Arnav now getting out of her life before he further ruins it, reminds of Judith McNaught's novel 'Something Wonderful' when Jordan asks Alexandra for a divorce because he thinks he has ruined her life by not believing her. It's one of my favourite books btw.

Thank you for that. I think it is all about buying into it or not. If you don't buy the royal thing, it will look corny. But then I am writing Fan Fics on a M&B show, so corny banta hai lol. I am going all out and taking liberties sometimes because I have a theory that something like this is in their past. My predictions have been okay so far 😆

Maybe it's me but I find Arnav's aukat talk more serious. People are hard on Khushi for two off hand diabetes comment but they are not as hard on Arnav. I feel somewhere he does believe it even if he supports Mami because it is the very first thing he said to Khushi even before he truly fell for her.

Khushi nowadays is too kind for my liking, though she is pure entertainment. This is kind of what I wanted to happen. I felt sometimes she can get equally cruel, it is in her at the first months of the show. But the CVs have since mellowed her more which I feel is inconsistent. I feel she can love him and hate him a little at the same time. It is their friction, their chemistry. Anyways, long answer, I just wanted to say I agree to a great extent. Thanks for the criticism.

Hmm...never heard of that novel but I might look into it now. Thanks!

Edited by Marybarton - 13 years ago

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darkninja

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Posted: 13 years ago

#54

that was awesome update glad khushi was the one who put mamiji in her place
cant wait for part 5

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Shelly Singh

@punjabi0926

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Posted: 13 years ago

#55

Amazing story line... I think Chachu might play as the cupid. Glad to see Khushi's reaction when saw bruises on Arnav's hand. I love how Arnav loves her enough to keep his sorrow from her. Cannot wait to read part 5! Keep up the good work! 👏

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SankaDevi20

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Posted: 13 years ago

#56

Oh wow! her actual name is darya interesting! Plus the concern they have for eachother, like they always do and don't confess is so like Arnav and khushi! Great update!