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Posted: 13 years ago
nice update!!
samar worried abt karnika n hug her!!
liked all went for outing!!
loved both gave n took promise to each other
but wht bad luck on their way?
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Posted: 13 years ago

nice update..

enjoyed the cute moments of Kasam...

but i really dont want something bad..

hope all goes well..

thxn for the pm...

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Posted: 13 years ago
Cute part and love samar's worry for Karnika.
nicely written...story is going smoothly
cont soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
wow...
lovely part jii,
nivi ma sweetest prt ws wen samar ws tensed for karnika...
so sweet n caring of him.
he will surely prove himself a caring n perfect life partner...
their promise to each other is also very cute...
they trust each other,,,,
thats a really best part of their relationship.
precap is interesting..
n i believe u...ki it will make the story more interesting...
i love twist...n u too dear...
love u.

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Posted: 13 years ago
awesome update...👏
n really liked samar's worried nature towards karnika...
n loved our KASAM moment's...
n twist...let's see what will be it...a twist is really needed for a good story...
update soon...
luv u...😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
nice ud dear...
waiting for the twist...
i hope twist jyada trageic na ho...
ud soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
nic part
like there promises
w8ing for dt twist
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Posted: 13 years ago

Chapter 9

The sky has darkened and it's drizzling and thundering...

Samar (pulling his bike) ' Oh God!

Karnika ' I don't see any taxi here...

Samar ' Don't worry... We will be in our hostels at time.

Karnika ' ok...

It starts raining heavily and they are still near hills and there is no one but noise of the thundering.

They move and take shelter under a shed. They are completely wet.

Samar ' Oh God! I doubt that we are going to be in the hostel at time...

Karnika ' yes, me too.

Samar (mischievously) ' You know? People say that whenever the clouds thunder, there is something going to happen in somebody's life... Something different, something that will change his life forever...

Karnika ' Don't try to scare me, okay?

Samar ' What Karnika! You don't even get scare!

Karnika laughs.

Karnika ' Why do you want me to be scared?

Samar ' So that, as it happens in the movies, heroine completely scared comes in the arms of the hero...

Karnika (smiles) ' You are really mad Samar...

Samar (smiles back) ' Yes you are right. I am mad for you...

They are lost in each other's eyes. But suddenly a group of some bad guys come there...

One man ' Okay... So here are those love birds!

Samar and Karnika give a puzzled look.

Other man ' We will not leave both of you alive!

He pushes Samar and beat him. Karnika gets injured too.

They are badly injured and are lying on the wet road... Karnika has injured her head and Samar's hands and head are bleeding...Then in front of Samar come the man and Aman.

Aman sits down on his knees and holds Samar's hair tightly and slaps him...

Aman ' What did you think? We would leave you alive huh?

The man comes near Karnika who is almost fainting...

The Man (in an evil manner) ' Hello Karnika! How are you?

Karnika looks at the man and is totally taken aback.

Karnika ' Father, you?

The man (Mr. Marathe) ' Yes my dear. Me!

Then laughs and says:

I was waiting for this moment till I married your mother! I wanted her property... But she... she gave you the property! If I didn't get it so I will occupy it from you!

Aman to Karnika' Hello sister... Don't cry, just sign on the property papers and we will leave you and your lover...

Karnika (crying) ' Really!

Samar ' No Karnika! It's your right... don't do what they say. They will surely kill us if you sign those papers...

Mr. Marathe goes near Samar and slaps him.

Mr. Marathe ' You are too cared about her huh?

Aman ' Dad, she is refusing.

Mr. Marathe ' No need to wait, son.

Mr. Marathe to his men ' Kill them.

Two of his men take out guns and fire at Samar and Karnika while they are trying to hold each other's hand.

The men fire all the bullets and they leave.

Samar and Karnika manage to hold their hands and...

Samar cries - I never knew that this is written in our fate but we will be together... soon...

Karnika (crying) ' We will be together...

They die but has their love too died with them?

Precap - Kehte hain pyar ki kahaniyan pyar par hi khatm hua karti hain, Aur agar aisa na ho toh vo kissa khatm nahi hua ab tak...

Edited by Nivi_princess - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
mujhe rona aa raha h...
kyun maar diya unhe...

bola tha na maine property voperty ka chakker hai...
denge people...
i hate her father n aman...beep beep beep beep...
inki tho main kabar inke haaton se hi khodwa kar maar dongi...
khooni, paapi log.

but i m sad that they died...
rona tho banta h, i loved them after all...


main chahti hoon next janam main yeh log pakka karnika ke father n aman ko maare, jooron ki...maaza chakaye unhain...

ab maine aapni friend nivi par ek analysis kiya h...
meri friend nivi REINCARNATION ki bhot padi fan h...
isliye saari vms main bhi reincarnation h...

i really liked the twist...
it was cool...

but one thing i noted,
i donno u hav written it purposefully or by mistake...do let me noe in any case.

samar said-tarini! kya tum darti bhi nhi ho!//////

tarini, i remember dis name...u hav used this in ur vm...

TARINI!...why did he say her tarini...???

wa8ing for them to return and return wid a bang...


Edited by sweetsanyo - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
GUYS OUR NIVI IS A DAMN COOL VM MAKER TOO...

HER VMS, BUT MA FAVORITE...

DO SEE...THEY ARE SHORT STORIES..

RAJAT-MUGDHA FOREVER-



RAJAT MUGHDA FOREVER - DIFFERENT STORY.



GUYS U WILL LOVE THEM LIKE HELL...

rashmi ka aap log iss baat main vishwaas kar sakte ho.
Edited by sweetsanyo - 13 years ago

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