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okay , i m all ready to join-''DHANVI COACHING CENTRE'' for writers to come...
di u were just amazing here.
love the way showed her mingled feeling, evens veer's.
he hold her hand and she felt a thriller in her.
she is scared no doubt, n may her ignorance towards veer is pulling him closer to her.
she ws looking at the nite sky n veer came to apologize, that good.
the dialogue-''evn the nite sky is adorned by u, u hav came to take away ma sleep!'' i feel this ws different n close to me, i read it thrice...i donno for wat reason,but i liked it.
so both of them are running in each other's senses.
grandma's prediction-chandini to fall as easy prey to destiny, and has come to save someone.
grand ma thinks a lot, NAHI !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ACTUALLY even ma grandma thinks a lot, she tells its me who bringing good fortune to ma family, god noes hw cud me useless thing cn bring fortune to anyone, me myself is haivg bad time with these rubbish exams...can someone buy me fortune????
back to story, i fluctuate a lot...
so he was restless not finding her around...
this one i had a a perfect premonition abt it, he is gonna be like this...
happy that is here in DARGEELING.
the way she reacted to his presence in house was obvious, i liked it very much reading this part...
she could already feel his body close to hers...
she was right too.
he came to her room and undid her hair clip...
well mugzz looks sweet in open hairs...
first time he hold her hand, she removed it(starting...)
now she could not resist his warm n gentle hold(the ending para...)
two phases of a relation in same ud...
''her dreamy eyes looked at interlinked fingers of his n hers,'' that was good, n he lost in her beauty, ...
they move towards lounge with their finger still entwined...that means chandini feel this part rite somewhere...
but i could again feel something worng is gonna happen, when chand's grandma will see veer,
she can feel awkward abt veer, grandma will sense the danger in him?????????????/
well waiting for her reaction.
hope u dont get bored reading ma long lectures..di..
now-a-days i m always first specially in this story, hope i cont. it for long time...
really loved the way u r narrating it di...
love u for this...
ud soon di..
wanna nor grandma's rxn, her wanna see chand introducing dargeeling to veer...
love u di
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