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mandeep

@mandy15

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#181

awesum update dear:)👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

plz yaar arnav ko kuch mat karna...

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Sanjana

@akhilash

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#182

thanks for the pm.

Awesome, loved it. heart wrenching. Waiting for the next update

thanks again for the pm and have gr8 one

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Jayne

@Jayne

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#183

Good work.

I liked the pace.

Arnav could be a little less 'angsty' perhaps... after all, true natures do not remain hidden for such long periods of time all through day and night... his ego, arrogance, anger are part of his nature... would like to see a glimmer of those still intact.

But I did enjoy the tone of the story. You wrote well.

Jayne

P.S. for Khushi and English speaking, please check out my reply on a post:

http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2907006&PID=55023459&#55023459

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Devilways

@Devilways

Navigator

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#184

Originally posted by: Jayne
Good work.

I liked the pace.

Arnav could be a little less 'angsty' perhaps... after all, true natures do not remain hidden for such long periods of time all through day and night... his ego, arrogance, anger are part of his nature... would like to see a glimmer of those still intact.

But I did enjoy the tone of the story. You wrote well.

Jayne

P.S. for Khushi and English speaking, please check out my reply on a post:

http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=2907006&PID=55023459&#55023459

hey thanks! Arnac is not gone any where... his nature is still there just guilt killing rest of the senses.
Also, read ur link.. I understand what u mean, Thanks.

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music1

@music1

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#185

Heart wrenching update...beautiful..I'm in love with them all over again...

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dumas

@dumas

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#186

awesome update they are both missing each other and still feeling the pain of being with out each other thanks for the pm loved the update very heart breaking

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hararnav

@hararnav

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#187

oh my,,, wats he gonna tell her

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pc17

@pc17

Navigator

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#188

Sigh Devilways...where do you always disappear to woman?! Always after leaving it here...I want more! This was a great update and I love how you have progressed the story. Finally we are getting to the meeting and the repentance aren't we? Aren't we?Please say we are! And update soon please. xxx