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ninand

@ninand

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Posted: 13 years ago

#141

At the unavoidable risk of sounding totally unimaginative and repetitive , I have to say this was a fabulous update.

of course a bit dramatic😉, though his vulnerability under all that nonchalance .. is definitely endearing.

I have not read any of your other works except for those with Maan and Geet, so am very very interested to see how you treat 'romance'.

Exactly. The blush, the heart rate, the works. Their verbal sparrings definitely make for tiny crazy sparks between them, and both are definitely not oblivious to it.

Do update soon.😳

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TeamMcSwarek

@TeamMcSwarek

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#142

I LOVED it
they really have some screwed up families!
cont soon
thanks for the pm

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Craziest_MG

@Craziest_MG

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#143

Awesome part dear...

Now m liking this Maan...

Updt soon

Thanks for the pm.

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Sur_10

@Sur_10

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#144

Heya

I was waiting for your PM.

Go Geet go! You and Devi have such nice strong heroines who can actually bruise the people who cant keep their mouths shut. Love it.

Maan and his father's conversation was nicely written. Surprised that Maan is such an emotional character.

Zinc and Copper? Have I heard this bit somewhere? Maybe read in some crazy fun fact book, they are full of these useless details.

You end your updates very well

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chalobhago

@chalobhago

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#145

Okay i'm going to be repeating this word like every single day now: AMAZING 👏

So Geets father was in the police and collecting evidence against the head of the Khuranas?
I'm sensing some of your thriller skills...Girl dont say Maans father killed his mother - he seems capable of doing so 🤔

So Geet has a bad sister (NT) and her mother wasn't better...as mother as daughter???
Geet is probably like her old man - feel sorry for her, but she still show the strength of fighting when it's necessary.

Liked the way she armlocked Maan against the wall...

Love MG's concern and at the same time anger towards eachother...and their communications

Sookie this SS is full of skeletons as your other one, but with all this drama...wow