-Immoral WORLD-3- PART 41 pg 128 - THE END - Page 51

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Originally posted by: FIRESafiReFIRE

updating the extended parts ^^

hw mch actually js't took pills i hv 15 min max...will i'll be able to read them ???
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Originally posted by: FIRESafiReFIRE

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IMMORAL WORLD...
Part 38

its extended to quit few parts... everyone is thinking its a rush ending.. :(
but its not... it suppose to end like that.. but as you all want me to.. me extending it.. with much details as possible...
and i better see the like here... otherwise.. it demotivates me.. me updating so much.. and i barely see any like...😕
thanks you all...
still updating...


His heart ached. It teared him apart, not understanding what she meant. Why she was behaving like this.

Geet stepped out when Mia came running... Flowed by her 1 and half years old son troy. He could barely walk, tripping, falling. Seriously a nuisance. Geets eye looked for sia. She wondered where she was. The toddler came running, shouting mama! Mama! Geet smiled and picked him up... While Mia stood there arm folded at the back.
Mia "mama, hame bhi utaoh na!"
Geet "abhi nahi beta. Have you seen sia?"
Mia "nahi... Au toh hamesha aunti ki sath rahithi hi..."
Geet smiled and walked down the stair while little Mia stood there looking at her mama. Maan came along and picked her up...
Maan "little Mia ko ka chahiye?"
Mia "mama... I want to be with maama...

Maans heart ached with her each word, oh how he wised the old geet to be back. Why she was so cold... But that was his only inner feeling. She never behaved coldly. She never complained, she always loved each one of them equally then why he felt so lonely. Why each moment, he always crave for her one look. Sweet love, why there wasn't any happiness binding inside with the word geet. It couldn't be any more painful then seeing her happy but not with him.
Her one word out of bloom tears his heart apart. Maybe it's his fault, it's been 4 long years of him trying to undue everything, undue the pain. It kills him sometime, it never leaves him alone.
He walked towards geet, sia and anny. How couldn't she understand the pain. He sees his sister dying every second, every moment, with the memory of that no good brij. How can't she not see how he is dying. What was his mistake that how everything covered him within, he selfless did carried way, yes, loosing his moral was a big mistake but he never intend to. Never, how could he? He came close by, but geet barely noticed, barely felt his presence...
He wasn't sure what was hurting more, her being so careless towards her husband right at this moment or the fact how she treated there kids. But was it just his illusion?

As the day went by, geet put all three child in sleep, making her way to her bedroom. Maan sat in the dark, thinking, thinking how have everything went, thinking how and where everything have gone wrong. He have done everything, everything as possible to make her happy, everything she ever wanted then why he felt thus distance? Why his heart felt so empty even Knowing geet is here, with him, forever. They have family, they have kids... They have everyone...
She turns the light on...
Geet "ap ayhia? Everyone was wondering why you are not there for dinner!" maan slowly stood up... Turned around, and came close...
Maan "did you wonder the same?" his voice was rather a pleading manner. Want to here a yes...
Geet "umm..."
Maan "what if I didn't come?"
Geet "that's mean you don't want to have dinner!" she simply answered in her low voice. Barely hearable. She continued with her work. Walking towards the wardrobe then taking her white nightdress, still the same one! Hmm...
Maan "wouldn't you insist me?"
Geet "ku karti? Apko khana hoga toh ap ay jange na!" it hurt maan allot. Oh how he wished this wasn't his geet, this wasn't the geet he loved. Every direction he looks it could only be immoral world. It hurts... It hurts allot.
Geet "apko Khana hi? I will go and get some!" she adds, she have noticed his restlessness, but not understanding it why exactly! Why he was so restless! Why so worried? "ap tik toh ho? I will get some dinner for you!"
Maan couldn't take it any more in frustration he pulls her close, pinning her to the wall...
Maan "what's your problem?" that voice sounded so familiar... It's old, the rough voice... In this 4 years he haven't raised his voice. He never spoke in a high voice. This feared her again, it clearly became visible. He worried, she panicked, what happen?, she again was scared to ask him question! Now she have 3 life with her. Maybe he will be nice towards Mia and troy, because they are his kids but what about sia? What if he! She dare not ask question... She dare not say anything... Her lips shivered to speak...
Maan "tomari problem ka hi?" he couldn't take the frustration, he couldn't explain exactly what his heart felt, how it felt. It hurts, and that's all he could think off... It cries for her.. And that's all he know...
Geet "ap hame boliye apko ka chahiye? Ham puri- puri qusish karnge- puri karneki!" she mumbled as those words came out. Her fear was there, and he could clearly see it. Something he didn't like... He didn't want that fear in her eyes... His heart ached with pain... He just couldn't...
He softens, cupping her face... Helping her to calm down... Helping her not to shiver, not to be scared of him, it's like his own plan have backfired, he have created something in him that is fearing him within now...
Maan "tum aisa ku bolrahi ho?"




a tear dropped down his eyes, oh how much she hated that... How much the girl inside her wanted to hug him, sooth him, how much she missed that geet who trusted her blindly, her hand came up, holding his cheek, yet not fully showing her self...
Her fear was still visible... He freed her instantly, walking backwards...


Immortal love
John Greenleaf Whittier


Immortal love, forever full,
Forever flowing free,
Forever shared, forever whole,
A never ebbing sea!

Our outward lips confess the name
All other names above;
Love only knoweth whence it came,
And comprehendeth love.

Blow, winds of God, awake and blow
The mists of earth away:
Shine out, O Light divine, and show
How wide and far we stray.

We may not climb the heavenly steeps
To bring the Lord Christ down;
In vain we search the lowest deeps,
For Him no depths can drown.

But warm, sweet, tender, even yet,
A present help is He;
And faith still has its Olivet,
And love its Galilee.

The healing of His seamless dress
Is by our beds of pain;
We touch Him in life€™s throng and press,
And we are whole again.

Through Him the first fond prayers are said
Our lips of childhood frame,
The last low whispers of our dead
Are burdened with His Name.

O Lord and Master of us all,
Whate€™er our name or sign,
We own Thy sway, we hear Thy call,
We test our lives by Thine.

The letter fails, the systems fall,
And every symbol wanes;
The Spirit over brooding all,
Eternal Love remains.


LOVE YOU SHURITY FOR THIS ^^
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Edited by FIRESafiReFIRE - 14 years ago
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yesss i m first to press like n comment...

seriously i also felt dat was nt d proper end...i mean i m soundin filmy...😆😉😆😉
jab tak sab happiesss nahi ho jata iska matlab picture abhi baki hai meray dost...😃😆
lvd dis part a lot...i mean it was so touchy potray of remorse,guilt,frustration...along with the feeling of
lonliness...missin someone who is always close but quiet a far from ur reach...😭😭😭
lvd it seriously...
nw i m going to bed...r u again goin to update later at night...
do it di...i'll read them first thing in the mrng...
omg itna bade comment ...nw i surely deserve a promise of update first thing in the mrng...
lv u ...
continue...
chao
Edited by lively-piia - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
Awesome update!!!! I was waiting to read it before sleeping.
I really don't know why Geet is like this, she insecurity towards Sia is understandable, but uskeliye baki dodnomse kyu door ja rahi hai, I felt hurt the way she treated Mia, its a big NoNo
Maan is not able to take her indifference anymore, I too feel its high time that they openly speak and clear all misunderstandings.
Waiting for further developments...
Edited by maanhar - 14 years ago

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