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Durga

@mrk-1

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#201

last update you made me cry ..now here ,, definetely i gonna kill u for sure ...

i loved the end ..

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-bansi-

@-bansi-

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#202

Loved the update a lot...!!!
loved all the flashback scenes n the present ones too..!!!
it was simply beautiful...!!
so finally they r one..!! 😳 😳
loved the whole part..!!

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Lily201

@Lily201

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#203

I don't want to attack you with juttis but shower with flowers -it was so well written - even the pain was given such finer details but we need a part two with happy ending- you see whether i ends on a haapy or bitter sweet note -it needs a tone of finality or closure-but I've told my preference😃

BTW lovely title-it drew me to give it a shot while reading😳

edit-oops forgot to read the other part -will do so now!!

Just read it- I loved it even better-it really highlighted emotions of a childhood association

Edited by Lily201 - 13 years ago

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Downhill

@Downhill

Inactive

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#204

haiii..aatma ko shanti mili...after seeing the happy end to this OS..
i am a sucker for happy endings...
but loved the Fb portions...it was so wel written, detailing all the important events of their life, how love blossomed, how maan was being nurtured by geet's parents after his parents' death, and how they filled the void...and how he reciprocated their love by forgoing geet...
nandu is a saviour...and had it not been for her, things wud have been entirely disastrous...
loved this OS immensely
keep writing
love u
and where is my JTLAB upate..
and hope u gave a rocking presentation😉

reva

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preethia

@preethia

Sparkler

Posted: 13 years ago

#205

finally u redeemed it at the end...

but the moments they shared from the childhood was cute and nice...

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khwaishfan

@khwaishfan

Elite

+ 9

Posted: 13 years ago

#206

Hi Shikha...Read part 2 nw? Y no pm? Will wait 4 pm. Loved it..Maan getting his Geet! U tortured us! Loved the fb n Maaneet's relationship. Dev is different lol.

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reni

@leverne

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#207

thank god u united them..👏.though i believe that family does come beofrelove but i just couldn't see their pain of seperation as u have written so beautifully...
PS: can i get my jootha back...the one i threw at u last time😉...sorry...😳

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Saba

@Eccentric.Being

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#208

Hey Shikha,

Thnx for 2nd part. Loved it.

Past was engaging with the friendship bond between Khuranas & Handas & amiable attachment of Maaneet.

Liked how Maan was quite lively before all this marriage fiasco.

Events turn in marriage ceremony was sudden but it ultimately got us what we desired so no complains.

Dev humorous comments made me laugh.

Maan got official possession of his gift at the end.

About ur note; totally agree with u. fictions are not always just the story ur mind created, It can be true & if not then it might become true one day.

"Afsanon ki duniya mein sabhi kuch Jhoot nhi hota

Dil or bhi uljhay ga, parhiye na kitabon ko"

(In the stories, not everything is lie/fantasy

Ur heart/mind will be even more troubled after reading the books)

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Papon Tabassum

@paponecon

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#209

really really touchy...too much touchy...when maan was 9, the maans POV was awsome.i was crying then...and after MBA...OMG...although its reminded me hum apke hain kaun but but but its really touchy...really felt the pain...i dont know when this types of situation come out what the loved ones do?u love somone madly and on the other hand ur parents is ur life...ofcourse parents is the first priority and no one must leave his/her parents in any circumstances...dont forget they give u ur life and after god they r ur second god and who give them sorrow they always get same pain because life is like a circle... but how will u survive without ur love...i dont know...i think those who r sufferer god creates them with extra strenght...nywy thanx for happy ending...

Edited by paponecon - 13 years ago