MG[SS]-Just a Dream or Two Behind You [IMP Note - Pg1 & Pg71] - Page 31

Hey Jazz,

Read all parts & Fantastic story. ⭐️

Chapter 1:

Rain is inspiration for Geet to write & bound Maan in her charm already.

I never thought that beautiful rain that we enjoy will bring some different aspect of thinking but ur SS made that possible.

Chapter 2:

Characters portrayal was so nice. It's the scenario where

"Hain kwakab kuch nazar atay hain kuch

Detay hain dhokha yay Bazigar khula" fits so well.

Now Maan knows the name & her whereabouts.

Chapter 3:

It seems that many entertain the theory that thinkers & feelers are not much different. Geet in one look knew the faade Maan plays; Stark contrast of speaking eyes & impassive face.

I like Dadi. She is lively character who has power to immerse other in life vitalizing activities but Maan is exception as always.

Chapter 4:

Rain brought relief for both though reasons are different. No it's not impasse to me. It was beautiful. For the first time Maan was stumped & that gives way to many possibilities & realities.

Chapter 5:

Poem was beautiful.😊

Maan finding the ways to fulfill Geet's dream was so nice while Geet is pouring out her pain. It's so sad that still there are parents that treat their own child differently just on the basis of gender discrimination. This made me thank Allah once again that my parents are not like that or I would have blown my fuse.

Pinky is such a sweet friend. Her apparent anger shows her care for Geet.

Chapter 6:

Back seats are always the good seats if u are inattentive in class.😆

Geet's intuitive feeling of cognizance about Maan & then her worry for MD's wrath was stark opposite & liked it a lot.😆

Maan was observing her all that time, wonder if others noticed that.

Formal introduction felt like a dead give away from Maan's end though fortunately or unfortunately, situation was saved.

Pinky's reason to get Samosas 😆 & good that warning came late. U know what I mean, Right. 😉

Chapter 7:

Jazz, I love your writing style. U wrote it so magnificently.

First, Geet's self-analysis; the homey kind of feeling with stranger & then the agenda on the backside of her poem bawled me out.

Loved "The dark may elude the mind to a sense of calm, but there is always a danger that calm stretches on to numbness."

Maan's thoughts show his sensitive side that is enclosed in outer shell of blank & hardened expressions.

Continue Soon.

@Shikha; Thnx a lot for PMing the link of wonderful story. ❤️

Its amazing that a bus stop where people wait for a journey to start is the place where Geet and Maan's started their journey in life, of course unknowingly.

Will this path to their destination be a smooth or rough one, I leave it upto you to tell. I just love the fact that he will be her fellow traveler without her really knowing his true identity, at least for now

Ok, you can ignore the bakwaas I wrote above...I'm sleep deprived 😆

Great Update, loved it 😳

Everything that a Word can contain.

I was clean bowled by the very title.. words can make wonders.. and i know exactly what they can do to you by experience..

I am not comfortable with words, written or spoken. I can only use them for an agenda. They elude me as an ally. But I can understand the reverence you hold them in. I am nothing but a stranger who happened to chance upon this dream of yours.

And stranger I will remain to the reasons why it landed at by my side. To find it flung out of your life is indicates the helpless yet reluctant attempt to give up your dreams. Many would simply burn it, thrash it, tear it up. But you could not bring yourself to do so. You simply let it drift away not wishing to take away the life you breathed into those words. It speaks volumes of the person you are, and that person is not the one to give up so soon. It is my belief that even before my words reach you, you would already be back on the path you chose to tread.

I wish I could have said more, written more. But these few hold my belief in you. Every word contains all that it can and more.

I can't explain what i felt reading these lines. If there was a reply Geet wanted to say, i suppose this would be it..

Stranger you call yourself..
but why don't i fell the same?
Why are you, who knew nothing yet me seem close to my heart?
I never expected people to understand me.. but you did.
Today my dream came true and strangely more than the happiness i experience right now,
I am content with the fact that someone else had faith in my beliefs when i lacked it.
Someone else held trust in me more than i did..
Trust.. the one thing i expected from my family..
..the one thing for which i was craving all the while..
And yet you call yourself a stranger?
Being a stranger you taught me to trust, to believe..
And i owe you this much..
I promise i'll believe in me, as it's your belief.
I'll hold trust in my dreams..

Maan's inner turmoil was clearly explained. It was indeed pre-written.. just like if it was all written before.. But one line made a little flip in my stomach..this was it

But was this it? The limit where he stepped back and let her cover the rest of the journey alone?

I already don't approve this ending so soon.. but all happy things come to an end and i prefer it short and sweet (Ok i'm lying.. i would love it even if you carry on😆)

And above all i respect your opinion. I am eagerly looking forward for the last part..wondering about the conclusion..

And as if this beautiful part wasn't sufficient, you added a beautiful poem!!

Stranger! you do not know how longingly I look upon you,

You must be she I was seeking.

I am not to speak to you,

I am to think of you when I sit alone or wake at night alone,

I am to wait, I do not doubt I am to meet you again,

I am to see to it that I do not lose you.

Walt Whitman

That was simply the words from Maan's heart! It was just WOW!!

PS: I know i suck at poems. But this one.. i don't know what to call it..

It doesn't rhyme..it isn't complicated.. so it's not a poem..

It's a mere paragraph.. 😆

I feel embarassed to keep it between two beautiful poems but i did nevertheless!!😆

😊😊 Okay.. so everything i wanted to say... has already been well and truly said... and articulated brilliantly by others... so i wont dwell too much on those other points i had

Jazz...its awesome... All parts r getting better,beautiful & interesting 👏

Amazing update:)

You may be a painter but you definately know how to paint with words as well. Just read the story in one go and have to see it was beautiful. Please do add me to your PM list.

Great update! Loved it! Can't wait to read more! Thanks for the PM, Jazz!