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Posted: 14 years ago
awesome ... superb ...

thnx 4 d pm ...

liked part 10 ...

continue soon ...
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oh my god...what a power packed update...i really love this story of urs...i can visualize the confrontation...nd empathise with both Geet nd Maan...love the way Geet is portrayed as a strong woman...love this Maan who is arrogant yet willing to accept his mistakes and the way he tries to make her see his point of view without resorting to any high handedness, his understanding of Geet, who he knows will be fair in her judgement...superb!
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u r an awesome writer, just finished reading ur updates ...
i hv sended u buddy request...
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Posted: 14 years ago
Wow superb superb super!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Both updates very nice...
Maan showed he is a real MSK...
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FOR ALL YOUR WONDERFUL COMMENTS, WISHES & SUPPORT... I AM SOOO HAPPY, THAT YOU ALL ARE LIKING THIS FF. IT MOTIVATES AND DRIVE ME TO WRITE EVEN IN A BETTER WAY...

KEEP COMMENTING...
I will be updating 2mrw.

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Posted: 14 years ago
I just now finished reading your FF at one go..
Loved every bit of it!! i am speechless...
Ur writing is captivating. It holds the reader glued.. I really really like this story a lot.
excited for the next part
plz continues soon .
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I loved ur update...Can you please PM me with your updates...
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Recap:-
He was demanding a trust she couldn't give, but maybe he would earn it if he truly had Daksh's best interests at heart.

'Of one thing you can be absolutely certain,' he said, mocking the turmoil of doubts in her mind. 'This time…this time…nothing on earth will make me walk away!'


PART 11

Geet was making, Daksh have his evening snacks… He is just back from school. She was agonized over whether or not to tell Daksh about the biggest truth of his life.. About his father… She knew, one or other day, she will have to tell Daksh about him. But not like this… definitely, not in this way… she herself is not prepared for all this… and she is afraid of his reaction…. not sure how he is going to take it… but there is no escape… today or tomorrow, he will come to know…, midway through the tea break, she heard the landline ringing…

'Geet'…

That was all the voice on the other end of the line said. Just her name. Cautiously. On a rising inflection.

Just her name.

And the sound sent Geet's world spinning into chaos.

She would know that voice anywhere. Even after six years.

Her stomach churning, she cast a frantic glance at the table a foot away.

'Geet'?" His voice in her ear again, more insistent now. "Hello? Geet?'

Daksh was watching. And he picked up on her mother's distress. The cute face scrunched into an apprehensive frown. 'Maa. Who's that? What's the matter?"

Geet spoke into the phone. 'Just a minute, please.' She wrapped her hand around the receiver, so Maan couldn't hear. Then she summoned every ounce of will and self-control she possessed and mustered a reassuring smile. 'It is just an old friend of mine, honey. No one you know. Now finish off you snacks and milk…'

For a split second that felt like infinity, Daksh stared at Geet, still frowning. Then his expression relaxed. He shrugged and picked up his fork again. Turning her back to her son, Geet spoke to her caller. 'Yes.' Her windpipe clamped shut. She had to swallow to make it open, to get air. At last she managed to fill her lungs. 'This is Geet.' She didn't want him to know, that even after years… she can just recognize his voice…

He is taken aback… Deep inside his heart, he knew, Geet recognized his voice…

'Geeet, this is Maan' he said soflty...

There was an odd silence…. It was stretching, making them feeling awkward and uncomfortable… It brought back, those painful memories… they thought, were buried deep inside their hearts… Spending long hours in phone… sharing tidbits of the day… or fighting over some silly things….. Those painful memories and the unbreakable bond, somehow, held them together… They both knew… they were dealing with the same agony: Memories of the past!

That's it… She felt the danger of losing herself… Stay calm, girl, she thought. Don't let your voice go giving you away. 'Yes… Yes, Tell me.'

After a taut, agonizing moment, he spoke again. 'Geet, I am outside. At your door step. I know this is pretty crazy, I realize. but…'. His deep voice was hesitant, hopeful… Unable to work… Unable to sleep… Without knowing, he was doing it…he came to their home… and he called her…

'What?' Geet's eyes widened in horror. No! He cannot….Unknowingly she lifted her hand to mouth…. the cold receiver turning warm and slippery in her hand as the room suddenly seemed hot and stifling… Her mouth gaped and flapped as she fought for air to rush back into her lungs. She looked at the door and sent a swift glance over her shoulder at her son, who, thank God, was concentrating on maggi. His favorite dish, Pasta and Noodles are Daksh's favorites… like his father, Geet thought bitterly.

She should not hyperventilate… she should not. Yes. She kept thinking, Breathe. Relax. Speak calmly. Her throat felt so terribly dry. Crazy, she thought. That's the right word for it.

'I am coming'. She said in one go and kept the receiver back in its cradle. She turned slowly, and relieved over the fact that, Daksh is immersed in his cartoon channel and food. Without making it evident, she forced her legs to carry her to the door. She grasped the knob and pulled it wide. The big glass storm door remained between them. He opened that.

She stepped back. He came over the threshold, into her house, the storm door pulling shut on its own behind him.

She saw hurt in his eyes.

'Geet… Did you…I know I shouldn't have… I know, it's a bad time…' He paused. She could see him, doing what she kept doing. Breathing. Slowly. Deliberately. With such painful care. Finally he spoke again. 'Did you tell him, Geet?' His voice already hollow sounding, broke. Another silence. Behind her, Daksh had just taken a gulp of milk. Geet knew this because she heard the clink of his glass as he set it back on the table.

Geet gave him his answer the only way she could manage right then: she nodded a No!.

And Daksh came racing down the hall. 'Maa!'

Geet turned, moving instinctively to block her son's view of the man at the door. She forced a bright tone. 'Sweetie, go and get your things. You know, we have to get back to the boutique.'

Daksh craned to see around her, to get a better look at the stranger at the door.

'Who's that?'

Geet spoke more sternly. 'Daksh Handa, You heard what I said. Get ready.'

'But—'

'No buts. Go!.'

Daksh started to obey – then hesitated. He fluttered the eyelashes that were every bit as long as Maan's. 'Maa.. Can I wear my new shorts – and shoes?'

'Daksh—'


'Please.'

'All right. Just go now. Get ready.'

Daksh spun away and vanished down the hall. Geet once again turned to face the man who waited, stunned and silent, at the door.

She spoke with great care. 'I haven't told him yet. Please. He is just back from school. Will you just … wait until tonight?'

He stared at her. But at the same time, he seemed to be looking lost… He muttered, 'Daksh Handa'. Geet suddenly knew, from the forlorn look in his eyes…

Yet another silence, but this time a brief one. Then he said, 'I… My son do not belong to me at all… right Geet'. In that moment, she felt the loss of him… the hurt they are going through… yet more heavily… than ever she felt. She knew with the little pulse of panic… her heart throbbing with hurt.. it had hurt him… the only man in the world, whom she loved desperately… She had to give him something.

'Daksh Maan Handa,' she said.

He blinked. 'Maan'? His middle name is—' he gave her a look that spoke of fathomless unspoken yearning…

'Is my name on his birth certificate?'

'Maan, we will discuss about it later. You should go now.'

'Answer me.'

'Yes… Yes, Your name is on it.'

'Damn… Geet. I just can't believe that you – after all that I —'

'I mean it, Maan. He'll be back any minute. I need some time to sort it all, before I tell him. Please. You have to go.'

'Later... You want to tell him later.'

'Yes.'

'When?'

He looked so much like a cute child demanding answers… She felt a silly flutter in her stomach… and suppressed a chuckle…. She suddenly felt light…

'Soon. But first, you should go now'.

'Call me, once you talk to him. I will wait for your call, Geet'

'Maan. I will call you.'

Still he stood there like rooted, not sure, what to do next.

'Maan. Please…'

He turned and suddenly paused. Without turning added 'Geet, I will be waiting for you call'. Pushed the storm door opened again and left without a backward glance.

'Maa. What is going on?'

Dread forming what felt like a cold, hard ball of ice in her stomach, Geet turned.

Daksh stood, small fists planted on his little plumpy hips, at the entrance to the main hall. He was wearing , his new shorts in white and blue with an Armani style shirt and the new, black 'sports ball' toddler shoes. There was a very determined set to his strong little jaw.

'Who was that man? What were you whispering to him about?'

Geet had no idea how to answer her son. She looked away, glancing out through the glass again.

'Maa... You are scaring me.'

For Geet it was a truly awful moment, one of the worst. She faced her son again.

Baabaji, what to do?

She didn't want to lie to Daksh, he has all the rights to know about his father… she cannot do the same mistake, Vikrant Singh Khurana has done, controlling his sons life…. but she wished with all her heart that she had taken some time to prepare her son for this – though how, exactly, she could have prepared Daksh, she hadn't the slightest idea. Her mind, at that moment, felt empty, numb, and incapable of rational thought.

Faintly, from outside on the street, she heard a car racing on.

'Maaa?' Daksh's expression had begun to crumple. 'What's the matter with you?

The distress on Daksh's face did the trick, banishing the ugly moment of indecision as if it had never been. Geet went to her son, put her hands on the small shoulders and knelt to bring the two of them eye to eye.

The words came out. Simple. Direct. Right to the point.

'That was Maan Singh Khurana!'. Daksh caught his lower lip between his small white teeth… confusion written all over his face….

'The same man, who was there outside our gate, few days back, with a black Ferrari.' With that, instantly his eyes become wide… and dark as the bottom of a deep, deep well.

'Maa Shin Kurana'… He narrowed his eyes… still is not convinced…

'Ohh God… how much he looks like his dad, when he do that'… Geet thought.

'Yes! That's right. Maan Singh Khurana. He is—'

She heaved a deep sigh… with a knowledge, borne of knowing – their lives will never be the same again…

'He is...He is your Papa Daksh'. She felt her heart boom like a cannon exploding in her chest.

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Precap:-
It was like; someone slapped her, tightly across the face. She froze with a sinking feeling. Her throat tightened…and felt her life's breath leaving her body…. She was wrong... He needs his daddy. Its very evident from his displeasure, of not meeting his father.

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nice part continue soon 👏
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nice update dear...thanks for the PM

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