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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: sarzah



We all have to focus on the larger goals of our life sweetheart, but we do need entertainment you know.. I will defo continue to PM you, but I will be happy to see your comments and likes on my updates!! And thank you so much, lekin mujhe nahin lagta Fantasy ke baad main aur koi FF likh payungi... Main itni bhi talented nahin hoon😆. Aur itne din se tum yehi thi, abb jab maine likhna shuru kiya, ur all about leaving... thats so not fair!!!😭😭

cheer up! Yr u r talented.. I hav seen so many writers like u during my stint..being awesome at writing..but not sure abt how awesome they are..finally rockin IF by their work:-)i find ur work very nice..n believe me after this one, u hav no stopping..mark my words..and IF moreover is a very receptive place:-) dont u feel tht, ppl luv ur work so much in such a short time..:-)and dont wry sweetie, i ll be back.. M here till monday.. its important for me to focus on studies right now! M crazy abt maaneet n ff...cant conc on tym things at a time..:-( even i m sad abt my decision! But comeon u hav so many more like me:-) n so many more to come! Its absolutely my loss:-)
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FANTASY

CHAPTER-8

The dark and deserted Mansion loomed in front of him. He stepped out of the car and dragged his feet towards his home, no, mansion. It wasn't HOME anymore. Home is where there are your loved ones, and he had got rid of his loved ones HIMSELF!!!

As he entered the hall, a rush of memories came back to him. This hallroom, where Geet had planned a romantic night for them. And he had ruined it with his own hands. He was willing to kill himself to get that night with Geet back again. He walked across to his room. Every corner, wall, nook and cranny of the Mansion reminded him of Geet. He saw them and was reminded of every time he had pinned Geet down on the wall, everytime she had smiled and blushed at him, for him, every time she had sweetly kissed him on his cheek, every time they had hugged tightly,never wanting to let go of each other, fought about stupid and unimportant things with each other. He entered his room and saw everything in place. She had even kept his clothes on his bed. FOR THE LAST TIME. Maan loosened his tie and took off his waistcoat slowly and walked out. There was no hurry today. There was no one in the Mansion. Daadima was still in Amritsar, Vicky and Pari were out with their friends and his Geet….had left…left him forever and he knew he deserved it.

He walked slowly, lost in thoughts. This whole place had the feel of her- her smile, her smell, her laughter, her dupatta, her voice, her eyes, everything…." I already miss her so much. How am I supposed to live without her for the rest of my life?", he thought to himself sadly. He glanced at the dining table to see the food set out for him- a table set for just one person.

" She even cooked for me before leaving. FOR THE LAST TIME!! Lekin aaj se agar main na bhi khaun, toh kisi ko koi farq nahin parega. Lekin meri Geet, she always made sure I had my meals on time. She didn't allow anyone else to cook for me, always did it herself!! Office se lautne ka intezaar karti thi, mere liye bhooki bethi rehti thi, mujhse beinteha pyaar karti thi, aur main? Maine uske pyaar aur vishwaas ka itna ghatiya sila diya!! Meri choti se choti baat ka khayal rakhti thi woh… Main kaise rahunga Geet tumhare bina? Dekho tumne mujhe kya se kya bana diya hai. Iss akelepan se mujhe kitna lagav tha, lekin aaj, tumhare bina lagta hai ke yeh ghar mujhe kaat ne ko daur raha hai!! Please Geet, wapas aajao mere paas!!!",his eyes filled with tears as he realized that it WAS over!! She is never gonna come back and this is how life is gonna go on for him. He is gonna come back home every night, and there will be no one waiting for him, no one to shower him with unconditional love, care and respect. He is gonna be alone for the rest of his life. " Lekin main marte dam tak tumhara intezaar karunga Geet, yeh mera waada hai tumse!! My wait will end with my life." He reached the terrace, and glanced up to the Moon, which stared back at him mockingly. The cold breeze ripped a murderous pain in his heart as he stood there alone. He turned and started to leave, but the voice caused him to freeze in his tracks instantaneously!!

" Aap ne aaj bhi mujhe nahin dekha kya Maan?", the voice said softly.

His heart jumped at the voice, but he didn't want to believe his ears so fast!! What if he was hallucinating, what if he set hopes, and then they shatter?? There would be no possibility for him to survive after that!!!

He heard the sweet tinkling of her anklets, as she walked close and stood behind him. He still stood frozen, with his back to her. She touched his biceps slowly, slipped her hands softly under his arms and hugged him just the way she had hugged him the morning he had pushed her away so rudely. He closed his eyes, as he savoured the feel and touch of her.

" Ekbar dekh toh lijiye meri taraf!!", she whispered softly against his shoulder, her breath tickling his senses furiously.

He turned around very slowly and there she was. Standing just for him. Her eyes filled with depthless love, and passion!! The wind caressed her hair softly, leaving a few locks on her heart-shaped face. With a red sari draped around her body, she stood there with her angelic beauty and innocence. She looked into his eyes and said softly," Mujhe soch ne me thoda sa zyada waqt lag gaya. Isiliye, I decided that aap ghar aajaye,tab tak main ruk jatii hoon aur aane ke bad aapko bata dungi ke main aapko chor kar nahin jaungi. Kabhi nahin jaungi…Lekin aap toh robot bankar khare hain!! Kuch toh kahiye!!!

He still didn't reply, so she moved forward and hugged him, resting her cheek on his chest.

" Main aapke bina nahin rehsakti Maan.Bohut pyaar karti hoon aapse. Kahin nahin jaungi aapko chorkar!!"

He was suddenly hit by the reality hard. She was here, she didn't leave, his Geet didn't leave him. He draped his arms round her waist and hugged her tightly,crushing her to his body. He held her in a bone crushing embrace, while tears fell from his eyes on her bare neck.

" Maan!! MAAN!!! I… I cant breathe!!", Geet panted, stunned by the way Maan was crushing her. He had never hugged her like this before!!

He loosened the pressure slightly for about 5 seconds and then resumed it back. Geet felt her breath knocked out of her, as Maan's hands pinned her tightly to himself in an iron grip. She tried to breath normally, and call out to him, but it was impossible, since Maan didn't budge an inch and continued to hold onto her as if his life depended on it and he was afraid, that if he as much as loosened his hold on her, she would leave him forever!! He squeezed her waist and crushed her to himself, as if wanting to engulf her into himself and keep her there forever. Geet gave up protesting, since she felt the emotional struggle within Maan, and hugged him back with equal passion. She felt her feet leave the ground, as Maan continued to hold onto her wildly. She felt her neck getting wet, and was alarmed to realize that they were tears!!

" Maan!! Aap ro rahe hai kya? Mujhe choriye, let me see you. Maan talk to me please, mujhe darr lag raha hai please…Aap thik to hai na? Maan!!!" she said desperately, trying to loosen his iron grip on her but he was nowhere near leaving her.

" I am sorry…I am sorry… I am….sorry I am sorry for everything!!", he continued to chant as he placed her on the ground softly and released her reluctantly from the bone-crushing grip.

" Maan!! Aap thik toh haina? Its okay Maan.. main yehi hoon aapke paas, dekhiye, dekhiye meri taraf!!", Geet started breathing normally and placed her hands softly on his cheek forcing him to look into her eyes. His eyes were filled with tears of guilt, pain, relief and remorse…and the sight tore Geet's heart to pieces. She couldn't see her Maan like this.

" Maan!! Jo hua usse bhul jayiye… woh ek bura waqt tha jo beet gaya!! Main yehi hu, aapke paas, aapke saath… main kahi nahin ja rahi hu. Dekhiye, aapki Geet yehi hai….aap shanth ho jayiye please," she explained desperately, trying to stop her tears.

" Geet!! Maine bohut galat kiya tumhare saath!! Kuch photos dekhkar aur kuch logon ki baate sunkar maine tum par shak kiya!! Tumhe itna dard diya, you shouldn't have stayed back!! Tum mujhe jo saazaa dena chahti ho mujhe manzoor hoga. Mujhe maaf kardo. Maine bohut koshish ki janne ki ke kisne mujhe woh photos bheje lekin mujhe kuch pata nahin chala. Main abhi bhi koshish kar rahi hu, aur main use dhoondh ke zaroor nikalunga!!", he said holding her face between his hands and kissing her desperately all over her face.

"Sshhh… koi baat nahin Maan… Mujhe bhi uss raat ko hi aapko sab kuch baata dena chahiye tha… Doosro ki madat karte karte maine humare rishte ke maine badal diye!!!",she told him, looking into his eyes with tears. " Saach toh yeh hai, ki aaj agar main zinda hoon, toh sirf aapki wajah se. Aapne jitne pyaar aur lagan se pichle kuch dino mein mera khayal rakkha- you were right, no one can love me as much as you do. Itna koi kisike liye nahin karta Maan. The number of sleepless nights you have spent, simply kyunki mujhe thand lag rahi thi, ya mujhe bukhaar tha… ya mujhe neend nahin aa rahi thi."She continued crying holding onto him. " Aur maine aapko kya kuch nahin sunaya. I even accused you of taking advantage of me.. chi.. maine yeh soch bhi kaise liya ke jo insaan mujhse itna pyaar karta hain, woh aisa sapne mein bhi nahin kar sakta.. I am sor…."

" Chup bilkul chup. Mujhe kuch bhi kehne aur sunane ka pura haq hain tumhe Geet. You have the right to kill me, Jaan!! Maine jo tumhare saath kiya, uske liye main aapne aap ko kabhi maaf nahin karsakta. You loved me so selflessly, you put up with all my accusations, insults, pain and humiliations, and you stand here today, saying sorry to ME!! Tumhari woh halat," he winced as he remembered the pale face, red swollen eyes, and the motionless body in his arms," Uski wajah sirf main tha. Main kuch kar baith ta Geet, agar tumhe kuch ho jata. I would have killed myself."

" Bas Maan…. Aisa phir kabhi mat kehna, warna main aapse baat nahin karungi. Jo huwa usse bhul jayiye. Aur mujhse waada kijiye ke hum uss baremein dobara koi baat nahin karenge. Chaliye waada kijiye mujhe." She said determinedly, wiping both her and his tears.

Maan gazed at her lovingly and engulfed her in his arms again. He picked her up tenderly, and walked down the terrace. She wound her hands round his neck and leaned on his shoulder. The long night had finally ended…. They were together and that's what mattered!!

PRECAP: He looked at the long black-blue scar on her left hand in confusion and dismay. And then, it dawned on him..

"I gave you this, haina Geet? Uss raat ko…

Main tumhare kareeb aane ke bhi layak nahin hoon.

She felt the cold air on her body, as he lifted himself off her and walked out of the room!!!





Okay, so FINALLY I am done with this chapter. Let me tell you all, I had started writing a negative update, but then I changed my mind at the last minute, 😕😕 I thought, ke I have tortured you people enough, so now you deserve a break from the sadness... so here goes...

Anyways, I have finally recovered from my fainting spells, though looking at the number of comments and likes makes me want to drool over them AGAIN!!!😆😆

Thank you so much to the 61 people for liking and 34 people for commenting on the last chapter. I owe a lot of chummas and hugs to you all SERIOUSLY!!!😃😃😃

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE press the like button and leave me longgg comments so that I can drool over them again and give you a quicker update!!😉 I send out a total of 68 PMs, so its not too much to hope for atleast 65 likes is it??😃😃

I hope you all like this chapter too.

Love

Sarzah



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Posted: 14 years ago
this is awesome and cant wait for the next update

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Posted: 14 years ago
awesome finally they r together
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Posted: 14 years ago
awesome,very emotional..too good..
very well written...
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Posted: 14 years ago
great part...geet stayed back...loved the emotional reunion between maaneet
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Posted: 14 years ago
hey ..
luved the part alot ...
thanks for the PM..
finally dey r together ...
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Posted: 14 years ago
Awesome update!
YaY! they are together!
Loved the update...!
Cant wait for the next part!
Please continue soon!
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Posted: 14 years ago
loved the update
do contue soon

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Posted: 14 years ago
fianllly sarz they r to gether thanks to babaji 😆and
literally thanks to u too.😆
for bringing them to gether😆 i loved d update😳
aww maan crying for getting his love back so sweet
but yet tum shock daynay😲 kae harkath say bahayar nahi augi na.😡...wat sort of precap os tat girl...ok
but yet gud job girl👏
keep on rocking😉
and this is for u
thabs😉

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